Fifty Shades

Fifty shades of broken shrewn across the floor multicolored plumage riddled to the core Twist and turn to picture what's inside this man create a mental image and guide him with a hand The corners they will tell you what's around the bend straight off to the edges with finesse you'll reach the end Tiny specks of sunshine filter through the grey whipped against the backdrop please tell me that you'll stay Misshapen moments linger where inner solace cried half way to the finish well, at least you say you tried

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/25/2017 6:26:00 PM

Hmmm, I was expecting a bit of soft porn with that title, but this will do, Tim. Mystical.

Becca Teagan

Date: 7/25/2017 8:13:00 AM

I don't really get the meaning, it reads like a riddle and I'm not very good at solving riddles lol But I like how it's written! with the rhymes and the rhythm, it flows well. I just wish the meaning were a little more clear.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/25/2017 12:56:00 AM

I am not sure I grasped the meaning of this one Tim, but it was fun trying. : )

Eve Roper

Date: 7/24/2017 9:08:00 PM

I've never read the book or watched the movie ,,, I can see the plumage all over the floor... his ideas were just different with the rest of the 95% I'm just guessing

White Wolf

Date: 7/24/2017 7:56:00 PM

Great penmanship, mate

Akkina Downing

Date: 7/24/2017 4:25:00 PM

And fifty shades of beauty on this piece of art you penned, dear Tim :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/24/2017 1:56:00 PM

- Beautifully written as always, Tim :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Darren White

Date: 7/24/2017 1:37:00 PM

You tried my friend, and never stop trying, I won't either!

Jan Allison

Date: 7/24/2017 1:18:00 PM

I wasn't sure what to expect from the title lol and with references to grey and whipped I'm still not sure and I've not even read the books lol:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/24/2017 1:15:00 PM

A beautiful enigmatic poem that makes the reader to ask for more dear friend, Tim! Enjoyed!

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 7/23/2017 2:53:00 PM

Tim i like this poem it has a message at least I see a message in your poem. I enjoyed reading this poem. Have a nice day my friend.

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/23/2017 1:38:00 PM

You have such a talent for writing interesting poems that lead the reader to want to read through them more than once and with an ability to come up with great descriptions Tim :)

Lin Lane

Date: 7/23/2017 11:19:00 AM

Then try again if this one didn't work out. Your first verse is a very sentimental emotion of preening that was ignored. Some hens are colorblind morons. A wonderful write, Tim.

Lenna Walker

Date: 7/23/2017 11:15:00 AM

never. stop. trying. A great write Tim !