Victor Buhagiar Poet Pantoum

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Feelings of Nostalgia

The soft breeze whispered in a barely heard whiff.
Emptiness enveloped the lovely old park
Past life has been hard and now all are dead stiff.
Hot tears rolled down my cheeks as day became dark.

Emptiness enveloped the lovely old park
All six played around the opposing benches
Hot tears rolled down my cheeks as day became dark.
Young girls dreamed of becoming famous wenches

All six played around the opposing benches
Memories tumbled haphazardly in mind.
Young girls dreamed of becoming famous wenches
Knew instinctively we were loving and kind

Memories tumbled haphazardly in mind.
Not easy to forget those difficult years
Knew instinctively we were loving and kind
Recall all we said echoing in my ears

Not easy to forget those difficult years
Life had its plans for us as each departed
Recall all we said echoing in my ears
The lonely park we became broken-hearted

Life had its plans for us as each departed
Past life has been hard and now all are dead stiff.
The lonely park we became broken-hearted
The soft breeze whispered in a barely heard whiff.


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Paige Hind February 22, 2024 at 10:26 AM Almost haunting- I love this form, and you nailed it!!

I Am Anaya February 16, 2024 at 9:32 AM A deep Pantoum. We must savor those memories, they certainly don’t come around too often, when they do it may be devastating or a romantic memory, still we have them. You have described the devastation of loneliness and at dusk, in the stillness of a park's atmosphere, so well done. Intriguing!

Kim Rodrigues February 16, 2024 at 5:03 AM A deep feeling Pantoum! Wonderful!

Eve Roper February 14, 2024 at 4:25 PM Great imagery and deep feelings Those years do echo in our ears and also in our hearts. Hugs my friend

Christina Bowring February 14, 2024 at 12:11 PM Dear Victor, such a touching poem that draws the reader in. Beautifully written as always from your talented pen. The refrain lines really have an impact. You really can sense the loneliness with the reminiscence of past days. This is another new form to me and you have inspired me with this wonderfully constructed pantoum. Emotive read. Hugs and blessings to you.

Sotto Poet February 14, 2024 at 9:36 AM Exquisitely crafted and eloquently expressed, Victor's poignant narrative evokes a profound sense of heartache. It is as if a surge of cherished reminiscences of departed loved ones overwhelms our hearts, particularly when we witness the vibrant festivities of others' existence.

Maria Williams February 14, 2024 at 4:06 AM Life can be difficult, and it's never easy when we lose those we care about. Though departed, it's important to remember the love and memories that were shared. It's understandable to feel broken-hearted, especially in a lonely place like a park. But know that you are not alone. The soft breeze whispers words of comfort, reminding us that one can find solace in even the smallest moments of peace. A wonderful Pantoum, dear Victor...Hugs

Valsa George February 14, 2024 at 3:06 AM This is so heart wrenching . Memories of departed dear ones rise in our hearts like tidal waves, especially when we see others enjoying the gala of life. Our loneliness is felt more in a place where one has been in the company of the loved one before. May God console you, dear Victor. Sending you love and hugs!

Anne-Lise Andresen February 14, 2024 at 1:50 AM - A heartbreaking poem with feelings... excellently written, Victor - hugs

Evelyn Judy Buehler February 13, 2024 at 2:30 PM Memories etched with grief, heartbreak and loneliness, are so well conveyed in this well imagined tale, Victor. This is a fave for me.

Sara Kendrick February 13, 2024 at 2:27 PM These are not so easy to write but you have done well. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Hilda Greenhough February 13, 2024 at 2:05 PM A good job on writing the difficult pantomime. The story returns to the lonely park, which I think keeps it relevant. I liked this poem.

Vijay Pandit February 13, 2024 at 12:50 PM Feelings wonderfully woven in this write, resonating in memories. A FAVE from me, Victor--how expertly you scripted this verse in memoirs of past---Emptiness enveloped the lovely old park--Hot tears rolled down my cheeks as day became dark--And so much more that grabs the reader!

Silent One February 13, 2024 at 11:33 AM An excellent pantoum in form, but also a deep and emotive poem that many will relate to.. You wrote this one really well...

Sam Kauffman February 13, 2024 at 10:22 AM A plaintive pantoum, Victor, filled with memories of life in the past, memories that hold onto something precious in yesterday. Strong, bold images that carry us into your nostalgia! Wonderfully written. Blessings to you!

Beryl Edmonds February 13, 2024 at 9:02 AM A wonderful fictional Pantoum of nostalgia Victor. It must be lonely in a park after dark for those who’re departed and broken hearted. Beryl x