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I felt our trouble brewing like a raging wind and I, helpless to escape its stinging wrath. In long dark corridors where he had sinned I watched him crawling down an arcane path. His murmurous mumblings I could not hear, though echoed in a gravelly sonorous voice. I knew instinctively there was much to fear. In the surreal moment I had to make a choice. When he woke on that cloudy thundering morn I broached the problem that he could not defend. His gorgeous green eyes were infused with scorn and I cried knowing we'd reached the bitter end. ~ ~ ~ I heard he keeps pretending everything is just fine but I know his life is still ruled by the raging winds. His dazzling smile is a façade that does not shine when he looks in a mirror, for he sees his own sins. If my dream had not become so frightening and vivid my vision may not have found a way to make me see the Mr. Hyde he becomes when his temper turns livid. His next innocent victim could have possibly been me. __________________________________________ 4/24/16 MR's More Than the Eye can See Contest

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Date: 4/29/2016 8:58:00 AM
Very dark, and well expressed personal write Lin. Rage is a frightening chemical reaction, and fear - mankind's oldest emotion.
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Date: 4/30/2016 5:14:00 PM
Thanks for your nice compliments, Michael. They're appreciated very much.
Date: 4/25/2016 3:26:00 PM
Dear Lin, your pain is deeply felt through the words in your excellent poem and so brought tears to my eyes. You are blessed with a poet's gift to be able to share your heart and soul to touch others this way. Best wishes for Mystic's contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 4/25/2016 4:37:00 PM
I take the blame for your tears and your sweet compliments to heart. Thank you for such kind thoughts, Sandra. It's a pain that I'd rather not have firsthand knowledge of, but it helps with writing that my words come from emotions.
Date: 4/25/2016 8:10:00 AM
Hi Lin, an excellent write as always. Sometimes it helps to bring out these memories and sometimes it doesn't. You manage to bring us into the heart of your write. Your words share with us the pain that you feel. Sometimes memories we bring forward can be as real as they were at the time. The pain is always there Lin but you have a strength within you that deals with it. Let your heart keep singing Lin for it sings with truth. You put my offering to shame. A seven and a fave. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 4/25/2016 9:14:00 AM
All are deserved Lin, always a pleasure visiting....Mike. XX
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Lin Lane
Date: 4/25/2016 9:00:00 AM
Nay that your offering is of less value than this one. Tis why I left a comment for you on your Vision poem. Thank you for all the lovely compliments, Mike.
Date: 4/24/2016 4:41:00 PM
One thing I am learning on this site is that the "pain" written about here is as real as the sensation of pain can get! Your writing's are truly what your life, being and soul know firsthand! This write has my attention! Your reply to Charlie though I must admit I am sooooo in agreement with!
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Date: 4/24/2016 5:14:00 PM
Writing about pain, whether it's physical or emotional has helped me express what I could never say to his face. He wouldn't see himself as he really is anyway, so instead of trying any longer to help him, I had to save myself. Your comments are always so intuitive, Walter. Thank you.
Date: 4/24/2016 11:18:00 AM
Lin, so beautiful... you have a true gift..:)-luloo
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Date: 4/24/2016 5:11:00 PM
Thank you, Laura. First hand knowledge of such tragic circumstances is something I'd rather not have knowledge of, but I have to say it helps when writing, and in return-writing about it helps. I just wish it wouldn't be taking so long to clear it out of my system, but I think some memories(good and bad) never fade.
Date: 4/24/2016 11:15:00 AM
My dear, you have a way of making words come to life. This is a difficult piece to read, but life is not a walk in the park, is it. I'm touched by these words. Hope all is well...Hugs
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Lin Lane
Date: 4/24/2016 5:08:00 PM
You're correct,Eileen. Not all relationships are fortunate enough to be filled with honey and roses. Thanks so much for your kind words, and yes...I'm quite well now.
Date: 4/24/2016 10:09:00 AM
Well done Lin. This sounds to real not to be close to home. The problem is the next innocent victim is out there...G/L in the contest, Charlie
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Lin Lane
Date: 4/24/2016 10:30:00 AM
The painful truth, Charlie. Some people should come with a warning label. Thanks for the read.

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