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Fear At Bay

A s another day goes by B ubbles burst with every lie C agey secrets full of pain D rip beneath the falling rain E arnest feelings shorn of pride F all dejected to the side G uile abuses self respect H aughty action for a fact. I am lost within your schemes J aded mind and silent screams K iss of death flows in the air L anguor presses, hard to bear. M elancholic; there’s no light N or a helping hand in sight. O vercome by lack of hope P inned by weight I cannot cope. Q uicksand sucks under my feet R eaching out to spell defeat S trength is waning really fast T his endurance will not last U navoidable the end V iolation by false friend. W as it wise to have my bride X anthippe to be my guide? Y et this panic I shall beat Z en will help outwit the cheat! ------------------------------------ Contest: Abecedarian ~ 2015 Sponsor: Shadow Hamilton Placed 5th

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Skat A

Date: 7/24/2015 3:44:00 PM

Paul, Congratulations on your awesome win. **SKAT**

Laura Leiser

Date: 7/24/2015 11:49:00 AM

Enjoyed this more serious, introspective poem, Paul. Congrats on your win :)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2015 6:02:00 AM

Thank you Laura! Pls forgive the late reply. Have a lovely day. // paul

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 7/24/2015 5:26:00 AM

well thought out Paul congrats on placing hugs

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2015 6:00:00 AM

Thank you Shadow; very pleased to be on your winners' list. All the best. Hugs // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/24/2015 12:09:00 AM

Congrats on ur awesome winning poem Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2015 5:59:00 AM

Sorry for a very late reply, Upma! Must have been a hitch beyond my control. Thank you for the congrats:) // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/23/2015 9:13:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this amazing poem Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2015 5:56:00 AM

Thank you Connie. I did not know there were all these comments to reply to; sorry for being so late! Must have been something technical. ~ Keeping Michael in my prayers...and you. Hugs // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/23/2015 5:49:00 PM

This ABC poem is awesome !! No wonder it is in the winners’ list. Congrats..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2015 5:51:00 AM

So glad you like it, Sara! I must excuse myself for the late reply; only noticed these comments a while ago. All the best. // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/23/2015 5:44:00 PM

Paul, I'm glad to see this poignant pen on the winner's list. Congratulations on your awesome win:-)Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2015 5:49:00 AM

Many thanks Alexis. Sorry for the late reply...there was a hitch somewhere! All the best :) // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 7/23/2015 5:36:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Paul it was good to read this again:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2015 5:47:00 AM

Thank you Jan! For some reason the messages re this poem did not come through; just realized this now. I see there are quite a few comments to reply to! Hugs // paul

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/25/2014 4:47:00 PM

very interesting piece of writing beautifully penned paul

Paul Callus
Date: 9/26/2014 5:19:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed it Liam, and thank you for stopping by. // paul

Angie Thomas

Date: 9/8/2014 9:16:00 AM

Very smart write! I love this poem :) For this form, do the lines have to rhyme?

Paul Callus
Date: 9/8/2014 2:59:00 PM

Many thanks Angie! Your visits are most welcome! No....rhyme is not compulsory, but if you can do it, why not! I would suggest a free write to begin with, while getting the hang of it; second time you can try rhyming as well. cu // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/6/2014 6:02:00 PM

I love your abecedarian poem.Its an.excellent topic which describes so well the pain of betrayal,the betrayal of friends is like the betrayal of a relative ,sometimes even more painful. It wasn t easy to pick the right words ,especially for the last three letters of the alphabet.I've written only two abecedarian poems in thr past,and I know its challenging to keep it interesting,but you got me hooked till.the end.To my fvs

Paul Callus
Date: 9/7/2014 12:55:00 PM

Hi Charm! I'm glad you enjoyed this abecedarian and it kept you hooked:) It is not that easy to write and needs planning well beforehand. After writing 2 of these forms, I realized that the subject matter has to be built on the last 3 lines; xyz are the tricky letters, so it's best to work on those first; even syllable count comes into it if there is rhyming involved. I will be even more careful next time! Once again...I appreciate the fave; thank you! // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 9/1/2014 9:57:00 AM

this pull out a range of emotions in me far better than the first one.. :) I like this better than the one.. though they dont have same mood and lol plot.. :D? but i like this one.. the affect, and its effects are stronger.. :) miss u Paul.. :D hugs GBU

Paul Callus
Date: 9/1/2014 11:25:00 AM

Thank you Olive_eloi for enlightening my mind and helping me to make a choice! [hopefully will mail u after badminton:)] hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/31/2014 11:25:00 AM

Wow! You really have a gift for writing in this form, Paul. Some Abecedarians seem forced, but yours flow seamlessly. Many of us have been violated by "false friends." The damage they cause is more painful than attacks by known foes. Love the message here and the eloquently way you expressed it. Which will you choose for the contest? Both seem like winners to me. Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 9/1/2014 11:22:00 AM

Hi Carolyn! Thank you! This has been my first ever abecedarian write. I'm still mulling which one to enter! Being betrayed by friends is something that would shatter me, especially since I have always chosen my friends using both mind and heart. Glad you see well through my message. hugs // paul

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 8/31/2014 4:04:00 AM

Super-awesome write Paul enjoyed. Verlena

Paul Callus
Date: 8/31/2014 5:44:00 AM

Thank you for the awesome comment, Verlena; I still am not sure which one to enter for the contest:) // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/30/2014 1:21:00 PM

Fantastic write Paul ! Smooth flowing acrostic, N great rhyming! Good luck!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/30/2014 2:30:00 PM

Thank you Upma. Love your comments. Pls have a look at my reply to Jan; I have still a decision to make:) // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 8/30/2014 12:51:00 PM

I had a go at this form Paul - set myself the challenge of getting it to rhyme too - it looks an easy form but its not and you nailed it! Good luck with the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 8/30/2014 2:25:00 PM

Hi Jan! Thanks for the encouraging comments; to say the truth I have not put this one in for the contest; let's say it's a trial run, just to see how it works. I'm working on another one; once finished I'll decide which one to enter. Now let me go and see what you have written. hugs. // paul