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Faustian Fraud

Just one more duty to perform... The moon is full and navel orange on this hot August night. The crickets and tree frogs have just begun their sublime serenade. In the distance, the steady clickety, clickety, click of a train wending it's way along the track soothes my nerves and before long I am lost in reflection of my recent past- At forty-five my life was idyllic. The perfect wife, three awesome kids and a steady, stable career with the United States Marine Corps. I was living the American dream in all its pampered glory. That is, until I met her Half my age with devil-green eyes that lasered straight through my ribcage and into my heart, catching me quite off guard. Soon, our weekend affairs were filled with expensive dining, alcohol and cocaine-laced nights of revelry followed by the kind of sex you'd die for. How could I resist? How could any man of flesh? She was a sorceress sent by Satan himself to seduce and entrap my very soul. All she asked was that I leave my world behind - the wife, the kids, everything and everyone that ever meant anything to me. Leave it all for her. In return - a life of hedonistic pleasures beyond my imagination. Adrenalin rushed through my veins causing my heart to explode and my brain to overload. I promised her everything. I would lie for her, cheat for her, steal for her, even murder for her. I placed my bet, sealed the deal. The game was full on. Six months later she dumped me for a stockbroker. I am left with nothing Suddenly, the cry of a wolf howling in the distance snaps me out of my trance. That is my cue. I know what must be done. Here, deep in the Appalachian mountains, no one will find me. In reality, no one will bother searching. Just one last duty to perform

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Date: 2/13/2025 2:35:00 PM
This one is deliciously dark--pure noir tragedy with a touch of the supernatural. The slow-burn descent into ruin, the hypnotic power of the femme fatale, and the lingering dread in that final line all make for an excellent, brooding tale of betrayal and self-destruction. My kind of poetry!!
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Tom Woody
Date: 2/13/2025 2:46:00 PM
Yes ma'am!
Date: 2/11/2025 9:51:00 AM
H Tom, More like a nightmare if it were true - fortunately you only got lost in a day-dream. Great story telling my friend. A. Greek saying - 'the devil has many feet'. There is another comment of mine lying somewhere but I mixed this poem up with your next, quite a comment I made but can't find it, think I must have deleted it! it. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Tom Woody
Date: 2/11/2025 10:16:00 AM
Actually, his daydream is a reflection on his past. He blew it. Thx Jen
Date: 2/9/2025 10:08:00 AM
Dear Tom, I was completely entranced by your "trance". Your daydream of living the erotic dream and leaving behind the typical American dream was captivating and fascinating in how you unspooled the story. I especially enjoyed the visceral effect I felt from this verse "Adrenalin rushed through my veins causing my heart to explode and my brain to overload" .. and that subtle internal rhyme in there too. Great writing! Love the title and your intriguing poem, my inspiring poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Suze
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Tom Woody
Date: 2/9/2025 10:26:00 AM
Sweet. Thank you
Date: 2/1/2025 7:46:00 AM
Hahaha. I'm glad it was a trance. Thing is the devil uses the things we love or want against us. Green eyes, good sex. Whatever makes us feel whole again. One, traded by the devil. However, whatever the devil offers us, God has already given. Great fiction T. You know your spices.
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Tom Woody
Date: 2/1/2025 11:05:00 AM
Not a trance, a deep reflection. Yes, I have a few hidden spices lol. Thx much Tonye
Date: 1/28/2025 7:06:00 PM
Another wonderful story my friend,You have an incredible gift for storytelling! The way you draw readers in, keep them hooked, and leave them wanting more is truly something special. Your words flow effortlessly, making it impossible to stop reading. Keep shining—Hugs . PS thanks for stopping by on mine
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/29/2025 5:48:00 AM
Always a pleasure to correspond with you
Date: 1/26/2025 11:48:00 AM
An exceptional vignette Thomas - locked in from start to finish - no wasted embellishments "Just the facts sir"! Especially the final paragraph which actually said it all magnificently - which left the final singular line unnecessary perhaps? Hitchcock would have faded out after "searching" - love your writing here
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/26/2025 4:43:00 PM
Thx so much for your endorsement. Appreciated
Date: 1/26/2025 10:03:00 AM
Tom, a very interesting short story. You write with an alluring style that reminds me of how I feel about J.K. Rowling or Roald Dahl. Can you tell I am praising your amazing writing style? You get to the essence with just the right amount of detail and that is a rare talent. As far as the message...this poor soul never learned this lesson early on in life. Cheating never works out very well and the hedonism you describe doesn't count for much in the long run. I've been attached for 47 years now and understand this completely. A good partner has the will to reject temptation...it gets easier and easier with time.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/26/2025 10:11:00 AM
"A good partner has the will to reject temptation." That says it all, though David, Solomon etal all succumbed. Yipe! As far as my style of writing I appreciate the compliment. I'm just a simple storyteller at heart
Date: 1/25/2025 2:52:00 PM
Blame it on the devil, for God's gift to women, green eyes and beauty, perhaps he supplied the goodies, after all it takes two to tango. She'll feel the same about the older man who seduced her, used her. I think of the innocent youth out there like Anais, no means no! Howls
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/25/2025 3:53:00 PM
I get more entertainment reading her vignettes than watching the Kardashians
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I Am Anaya
Date: 1/25/2025 3:38:00 PM
You have a suspicious mind Tommy.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/25/2025 3:11:00 PM
Our resident Yalie, innocent? Ha! In any case thx much for visit. Always appreciate your support
Date: 1/25/2025 2:20:00 AM
An excellent, engaging fictional story/poem Tom, an affair may be exciting at the start, but it’s never worth breaking someone’s heart…. Beryl
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/25/2025 5:58:00 AM
So true. Thx
Date: 1/24/2025 1:26:00 PM
Hi Tom, I couldn't help but wonder how much of this is your real life and how much was poetic fantasy and license. In either case, if you truly were a Marine, thank you for your honorable service and the poem/storyline was a captivating description of the perils of lust and those "devil-green eyes." Very interesting & thanks for a free lesson on Faust. Write on, Terrell
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/24/2025 1:36:00 PM
It's pure fiction my friend, though I certainly couldn't deny the many temptations over the years that had to be subdued. It's my goal not to end up like this foolish schlep
Date: 1/24/2025 7:09:00 AM
The devi indeed, all that you say. We are not given the true face of the one doing the deed, if in fact you saw the claws, the ugliness, the fearsome beast…perhaps some do and drugs become their choice infusion. A steady marriage, not boring, but in time shows its gifts and tears release as a loved one dies, leaving memories of the most rapturous kind. Still God will wrap you in his salvation and healing, his mercy and grace!
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/24/2025 7:19:00 AM
Appreciate you're reading my sad tale of lust and loss
Date: 1/23/2025 1:51:00 PM
Tom This is an excellent poem on the devastating pull of temptation and the consequences of giving in to it. It delves into themes of treachery, grief, and the tragic consequences of decisions made in pursuit of brief pleasures. Tom, I apologize, but I never blocked you, and I have no idea how to do so or how to unblock you.
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Sotto Poet
Date: 1/23/2025 4:11:00 PM
Thanks, Tom, I find it, it's deleted. Thanks for your support
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/23/2025 2:34:00 PM
Thx much. Go to member home select blocked poets and hit delete. Easy peasy
Date: 1/23/2025 1:19:00 PM
A sad story, but easy to imagine, and probably one that's been repeated in some way many times.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/23/2025 1:23:00 PM
Indubitably
Date: 1/22/2025 10:01:00 PM
Just as Faustus surrendered his soul to the devil, here also is a surrender, not exactly to the devil, but to a young girl with a 'devil green eyes'. Despite his enviable career and his role as husband to an adorable wife and three blessed children, he was lured by the trap set by the devil in female form. The end is predictable. To those who are prone to relationships outside the marital bond, this is a great warning. Well done, Tom.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/23/2025 5:51:00 AM
Thx so much Valsa. Very true
Date: 1/22/2025 9:16:00 AM
Wow! This was like watching a movie in 2 min. I love the title, the intrigue, the description of the temptation, how her gaze pierced through his ribcage into his heart. He didn't stand a chance. Or did he. I was wondering if it would have been better to add more detail about the struggle - about his wife, how she stood by him through thick and thin, supported him, loved him, etc. But in a way, the glossing over that is probably real in the moment. Does one stop to think about all that will be lost? Also, want to add, the writing is good. I don't know if the alliteration is intentional, but it is there, and adds that poetic element. Really good!
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Keith D Trestrail
Date: 1/24/2025 5:42:00 AM
Ha, I love how your mind works, Becs. I could write ten volumes on Faucian fraud.
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Becca Teagan
Date: 1/22/2025 9:53:00 AM
Also, I love that the ending wasn't spelled out for the reader. It was left a tad ambiguous, which I thought was a great way to end it. I'll be reading more of your work, as time permits.
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Becca Teagan
Date: 1/22/2025 9:50:00 AM
At first glance I thought the title was "Faucian Fraud" but that's an entirely different topic lol
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/22/2025 9:43:00 AM
Hey thx. I try to keep these stories short bc so many hate to read long poems. It would be fun to really flesh it out. I've been experimenting with different poetic devices, alliteration, spacing etal. Nice to see you here
Date: 1/21/2025 6:10:00 PM
In the end the lust and the devil ruined you and retribution for your actions against your wife and children in this fictional adrenaline rush based on lust, sex, and adventure. Well written Tom. Got the justices flowing for the readers lol. Words do affect when read you proved it with this write my friend...
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/21/2025 7:16:00 PM
I'm glad you found it worth reading Michael
Date: 1/21/2025 11:17:00 AM
A sudden love is frequently accompanied by destructive consequences.. Tom, Blessings/Mulu
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/21/2025 11:31:00 AM
Indeed. Thx so much
Date: 1/20/2025 11:15:00 PM
Have you checked to know if you are near the (End of the tracks?) Cause if its foggy.?? My Input..Munch..munch wheew this popcorn is A bit too salty.' Where was I?? Yes my interest.?? Is in the current storyline..And I wouldent want Anything to upset your intentions to whatever End...So as was said 2020..Do take care.!!
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/21/2025 6:19:00 AM
Thx for visit Joe
Date: 1/20/2025 2:39:00 PM
Ouch! Powerful strong narrative. I like how you left it up to the reader to wonder if the narrator holds a gun or a Bible praying.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/20/2025 2:56:00 PM
Interesting thought. I actually hadn't considered it to be a question mark but I think i like that better
Date: 1/20/2025 10:03:00 AM
Yep, wrong decisions have destroyed many families. Heartbreaking. Folks...think with your brain...and not with your.... Great read.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/20/2025 10:13:00 AM
Lust is a powerful emotion ... and one of the deadliest
Date: 1/20/2025 1:16:00 AM
What a powerful write Tom. l had a friend who this happened to, l guess we all know someone. He was the most gentlest soul l have ever met. He lost everything, his children , home etc. He was a broken man, tormented as never forgave himself , and there was nothing we could do. He died last yr, only in his 40's.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/20/2025 7:05:00 AM
Wow, that's brutal. Thx for comment
Date: 1/19/2025 4:57:00 PM
ohh but one succumbs to the thrill of abandon,and pays for the price in a fair way...remarkable story, tom!
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/20/2025 7:06:00 AM
There is always a price, for sure. Thx much
Date: 1/19/2025 11:41:00 AM
It wasn’t me, it wasn’t me although I have green eyes. Regret is a bitter pill as they say. Only an officer and gentleman would follow through. Fun storytelling, Tom.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/19/2025 12:16:00 PM
Appreciate the visit, green-eyed lady
Date: 1/19/2025 10:28:00 AM
Wow, Tom, you career Marines surely do lead an interesting life. A fascinating read, at any rate.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/19/2025 10:32:00 AM
Purely fictional. Thx
Date: 1/19/2025 10:15:00 AM
This shows a lot of humanity - we all get over our heads sometimes in relationships. Wishing you well,
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/19/2025 10:22:00 AM
The wrong side of humanity I'm afraid. Thx
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