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For Your Choice 1453 Poetry Contest sponsored by Brian Strand

Fathers and Sons

I try not to think about it, my friend.
It's so horrible, and yet, 
I'm on beer ten, and I won't see you again - 
So, I'll tell you a secret.

No, it's not what happened in Vietnam.
I still see it in stop-action -
If you measured it in inches and seconds,
That moment was a fraction.

A youth soccer game, my dad in the crowd,
It was nineteen sixty-two 
When we lost the championship game
As I let the winning goal go through.

As a boy, I never hurt anyone, 
Was a friend when needed.
I always helped my mother with her chores.
Mom and Dad, I heeded.

I studied hard, did all my homework, 
Followed every rule.  
Upon college graduation, I was rewarded, 
Accepted to med school.

Today, I am a successful surgeon
Using scalpels and knives.
I make so many people feel better -
Sometimes, I even save lives.

Yet, deep down, I don't have what it takes.
I let everybody down.
What you see before you is a failure. 
I should be buried in the ground.

I see it as we speak.  My dad was in the crowd.
It was nineteen sixty-two.
We lost the championship game.
I let the winning goal go through.

You see, there's nothing now that I can do - 
But wait, I have a little son. 
He plays goalie on his youth soccer team, 
A great boy who likes to have fun.  

When the rival striker takes his final shot,
There's one thing my son won't do.
Well, I hope he doesn't, no, he better not,  
Let the winning goal go through.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Ashley Avatar
October 12, 2025 at 9:39 AM
Dear David, your soul-baring poem is captivating and impactful. Poignant emotion and vivid imagery brings me to the center of this resonant and introspective piece. Congratulations for your success in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Crandall Avatar
October 12, 2025 at 6:41 PM
Hi Susan! Thanks! It seems sons really want their fathers to hold them in high esteem.
Agustin Avatar
October 9, 2025 at 11:59 PM
Wow! Congrats... Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.
Crandall Avatar
October 10, 2025 at 2:19 PM
Thank, Beata! Have a nice weekend!
Godwin Avatar
October 8, 2025 at 11:26 PM
I am impressed and even proud. This is the most serious write I've read of yours (that I remember). The emotion flowed, grew the reader's empathy and then lost this readers at the end when I learned he'd learned nothing from his father. VERY VERY everything poem-ish. My brother relived an AllStar Baseball game he was in at 13 for decades so I related to this, as well as loved it. Congratulations
Crandall Avatar
October 9, 2025 at 7:06 PM
Thanks, CayCay! I'm gonna send you a soupmail.
Toney Avatar
October 8, 2025 at 2:24 PM
David, a missed goal, a parent’s regret, lifelong guilt, yet a final, unresolved hope. What is it about those fathers and sons? This will resonate with many. A Fav poem for me. Congratulations on your top 10 win on Mile 20 of my 2025 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 21 has already started. You can find your current standing in my Mile 20 Checkpoint blog post.
Crandall Avatar
October 8, 2025 at 10:07 PM
Thanks, Mark! Glad you liked my poem about the travails of fathers and sons.
Greenhough Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 2:37 PM
A great poem. The relationship of sports and it's rules to life (or lack of) is noted in the poem. I liked how dates, and time, and a son were so expertly woven into its creation.
Crandall Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 6:09 PM
Thank you Hilda!
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