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5/22/2024 for Open Poetry 9 Contest sponsored by Charlotte Puddifoot

I try not to think about it, my friend. It's so horrible, and yet, I'm on beer ten, and I won't see you again - So, I'll tell you a secret. No, it's not what happened in Vietnam. I still see it in stop-action - If you measured it in inches and seconds, That moment was a fraction. A youth soccer game, my dad in the crowd, It was nineteen sixty-two When we lost the championship game As I let the winning goal go through. As a boy, I never hurt anyone, Was a friend when needed. I always helped my mother with her chores. Mom and Dad, I heeded. I studied hard, did all my homework, Followed every rule. Upon college graduation, I was rewarded, Accepted to med school. Today, I am a successful surgeon Using scalpels and knives. I make so many people feel better - Sometimes, I even save lives. Yet, deep down, I don't have what it takes. I let everybody down. What you see before you is a failure. I should be buried in the ground. I see it as we speak. My dad was in the crowd. It was nineteen sixty-two. We lost the championship game. I let the winning goal go through. You see, there's nothing now that I can do - But wait, I have a little son. He plays goalie on his youth soccer team, A great boy who likes to have fun. When the rival striker takes his final shot, There's one thing my son won't do. Well, I hope he doesn't, no, he better not, Let the winning goal go through.

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Date: 5/22/2024 4:54:00 PM
a poignant poem, David...like you, my husband (despite his success as a coach) still remembers to this day the 5K race he lost with his father watching his face registering anger and disappointment. He used that memory to always be supportive of his runners, win or lose. I liked the last verse
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David Crandall
Date: 5/22/2024 6:11:00 PM
Thanks Sara. I guess it's a typical father/son thing. It's great that your husband was able to use his own experience and turn it around to support his runners.
Date: 5/22/2024 2:37:00 PM
A great poem. The relationship of sports and it's rules to life (or lack of) is noted in the poem. I liked how dates, and time, and a son were so expertly woven into its creation.
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David Crandall
Date: 5/22/2024 6:09:00 PM
Thank you Hilda!

Book: Reflection on the Important Things