Fathers and Sons

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5/22/2024 for Open Poetry 9 Contest sponsored by Charlotte Puddifoot

I try not to think about it, my friend.
It's so horrible, and yet, 
I'm on beer ten, and I won't see you again - 
So, I'll tell you a secret.

No, it's not what happened in Vietnam.
I still see it in stop-action -
If you measured it in inches and seconds,
That moment was a fraction.

A youth soccer game, my dad in the crowd,
It was nineteen sixty-two 
When we lost the championship game
As I let the winning goal go through.

As a boy, I never hurt anyone, 
Was a friend when needed.
I always helped my mother with her chores.
Mom and Dad, I heeded.

I studied hard, did all my homework, 
Followed every rule.  
Upon college graduation, I was rewarded, 
Accepted to med school.

Today, I am a successful surgeon
Using scalpels and knives.
I make so many people feel better -
Sometimes, I even save lives.

Yet, deep down, I don't have what it takes.
I let everybody down.
What you see before you is a failure. 
I should be buried in the ground.

I see it as we speak.  My dad was in the crowd.
It was nineteen sixty-two.
We lost the championship game.
I let the winning goal go through.

You see, there's nothing now that I can do - 
But wait, I have a little son. 
He plays goalie on his youth soccer team, 
A great boy who likes to have fun.  

When the rival striker takes his final shot,
There's one thing my son won't do.
Well, I hope he doesn't, no, he better not,  
Let the winning goal go through.

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Date: 5/22/2024 2:37:00 PM
A great poem. The relationship of sports and it's rules to life (or lack of) is noted in the poem. I liked how dates, and time, and a son were so expertly woven into its creation.
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Date: 5/22/2024 6:09:00 PM
Thank you Hilda!
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