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I can't soar as of my plight, all is sorrow.  If you're late on doom day, you may miss the gate. I need a key to join, but fiend doth borrow. At the swish,  angels freed me and sealed my fate. As the sun sets, the waves recede with moon's tide. My doom is set, felt a chasm I cannot ride. Shift to dust when I'll stand in dull land abide.  Oft stroke like I'm dying in a boundless sea. Beguiled outbursts keep me gasping on my knees. I sucked for air to clear my chest and be free. Life has an odd way to teach, for tomorrow As passion hides, it hurts the heart—should I wait? Intrusive thoughts manifest when healing hides. Endless schism with past and sense is a doomed key. This poem form is the Fragmented Rhyme invented and Conceived by Constance La France. It has 14 lines with indentation, and a rhyme scheme, as follows: ABABCCCDDDABCD 1st place contest winner Written: February 14, 2023 Writing Challenge -F Words Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Date: 2/23/2023 9:37:00 AM
Dear Lasaad, The Fragmented Rhyme sounds difficult to do, but you succeeded in writing it beautifully! Congratulations!
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Date: 2/21/2023 5:17:00 PM
Mood set for the end of the world. Congratulations, Poet!
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Date: 2/21/2023 11:53:00 AM
Amazing poem Lasaad! I simply cannot pick out a line that stands out for every one of these is a poetic gem expressing redemption! Congratulations on your win! Best wishes for the Fragmented Rhyme contest if you are entering. Blessings my friend.
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Date: 2/21/2023 8:03:00 AM
Congratulations on this winner in Constance's contest. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 2/21/2023 2:40:00 AM
Sotto, a beautiful write and thanks for using my invented form, and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge F Words, well done, I like the image too, blessings, Constance
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Date: 2/20/2023 9:26:00 PM
Back to your poem with Congratulations on your well deserved win dear poet friend !
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Date: 2/15/2023 1:52:00 AM
Incredibly beautiful. Pity this type of poem is not added to types of poems. Best for a win.
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Date: 2/14/2023 10:18:00 PM
A brilliant poem and that too in her form, she will be pleased:) well done, Sotto:)
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Date: 2/14/2023 9:09:00 PM
First off the mark! And what a superb entry for the contest too!
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Date: 2/14/2023 8:12:00 PM
You are always first in entering a contest . I appreciate your enthusiasm and greatly admire your ability to come forward with sizzling ideas ! A great entry for the contest and I can predict this is going to be a sure win.
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