Far and Below

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far and below you will find- my favorite poem written in free verse it is not just the theme but the style of eecummings that brings me pride love the flow and no capitalization and no need for punctuation the gaps to create pauses the crunched words the made up words so silly and wonderful written- at a time of cliques and bullying by a few faded away now into nothingness proud they did not push me away so come take a ride on my- diaphanous gossamer filmy cloud sumptuous to where the blue birds sing ______________ my cloud written may 28, 2015 on my- diaphanous gossamer filmy cloud- sumptuous I float woebegone flowers far and below and bluebirds come fluttering in the azure sky twittering and its beautiful gossamer filmy cloud-sumptuous the goobledygooks with their nonsense far and below and bluebirds come drifting from the garden and forest they fly to my diaphanous gossamer filmy cloud-sumptuous the dullards with their yada yada far and below come with their hokum nattering and I yell hey you get off my cloud- sumptuous you you nincompoops bluebirds twittering and twittering beautiful assemblage of fluttering whispering hissing with meaningless words you keep off my diaphanous gossamer filmy cloud oh gentle breeze take this dreamer and flower picker of buttercups violets dandelions I see them swaying far and below in a meadow lovely and I recall the little girl me who picked them for mothers kitchen ledge oh let me drift and see far and below on my diaphanous gossamer cloud- sumptuous ______________________________ November 7, 2015 Free Verse Written by Broken Wings For the contest, Your Favorite Poem, sponsor, Judy Konos\ First Place

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 11/12/2015 1:02:00 PM

I also meant to say that clouds take us to a place above it all as you point out. I have been inside many clouds, and it is a rich and liberating experience. When I used to fly a small plane and would enter one, the water would collect on the surfaces and would cause a vibration that caused an eerie tone to be generated. Absolute magic.

Constance La France
Date: 11/12/2015 2:02:00 PM

Duke, I actually do not like heights and have never actually been inside a cloud, it sounds kind of eerie for sure but must be a wonderful experience at the same time ~

Duke Beaufort

Date: 11/12/2015 12:59:00 PM

Clouds are such beautiful things. Our magic carpets. You are just too much fun when you write like this. Sheer cloudy pleasure.

Constance La France
Date: 11/12/2015 2:01:00 PM

Thanks for the visit Duke, I do love drifting clouds in the sky and could imagine floating the world on one ~