Far and Below

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far and below   you will find-
my favorite poem   written in 
free verse    it is not just the theme

but the style of     eecummings
                               that brings me pride 

love the flow and no capitalization
  and no need for punctuation
    the gaps to create pauses
      the crunched words
        the made up words so silly
                               and wonderful

written-
at a time of cliques and bullying
by a few      faded away
now into nothingness
proud         they did not push me away

so come take a ride
   on my- diaphanous   gossamer filmy cloud
sumptuous
to where      the blue birds sing

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my cloud
written may 28, 2015

on my-
diaphanous    gossamer filmy cloud-
sumptuous I float woebegone

flowers   far    and below

and bluebirds come
fluttering in the azure sky
twittering and its
beautiful

gossamer filmy cloud-sumptuous

the goobledygooks with their nonsense
far    and   below
and bluebirds come drifting

from the garden and forest they fly
to
my diaphanous
gossamer
             filmy
                   cloud-sumptuous

the dullards with their yada yada
far
and
below
come with their hokum nattering

and I
yell     hey you
get off my cloud-
sumptuous      you you
nincompoops

bluebirds
twittering and twittering
beautiful
assemblage    of fluttering

whispering     hissing
with meaningless words
you keep off my diaphanous
gossamer    filmy   cloud

oh gentle breeze

        take this dreamer and flower picker
of buttercups     violets
           dandelions
I see them swaying far    and below
                            in a meadow lovely
and I recall the little girl       me
who picked them
                  for mothers kitchen ledge

oh    let me drift   and see far and below
on my
diaphanous    gossamer cloud-
sumptuous

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November 7, 2015

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 11/12/2015 1:02:00 PM

I also meant to say that clouds take us to a place above it all as you point out. I have been inside many clouds, and it is a rich and liberating experience. When I used to fly a small plane and would enter one, the water would collect on the surfaces and would cause a vibration that caused an eerie tone to be generated. Absolute magic.

Constance La France
Date: 11/12/2015 2:02:00 PM

Duke, I actually do not like heights and have never actually been inside a cloud, it sounds kind of eerie for sure but must be a wonderful experience at the same time ~

Duke Beaufort

Date: 11/12/2015 12:59:00 PM

Clouds are such beautiful things. Our magic carpets. You are just too much fun when you write like this. Sheer cloudy pleasure.

Constance La France
Date: 11/12/2015 2:01:00 PM

Thanks for the visit Duke, I do love drifting clouds in the sky and could imagine floating the world on one ~