Famous Last Line Contest Example
~FAMOUS LAST LINE CONTEST EXAMPLE~
ORIGINAL POEM
Before the rain fell and the sky's rainbow set the scenery, I had a day that will never cease my mind. The center of my core fell into a creek by the cottage and drifted down slowly into rigid waters. All of your affection dwindled like a a soft Spring snowflake.. melting..melting...melting... Considering your disregard, my loneliness was expected. Now, a part of me seems to be missing...
….a part of you.
Our light bulb went dim, and our white turned grey, all within one hour of time. Perceptions of consequences decided upon your actions left my warmth arrested by your cold. How will I live without you?
My tenderness is dripping slowly into soft memories we shared..
half of my heart is yours...
...half of my heart is lost.
You've searched for your puzzle pieces, and I thought I was the one who would make you whole. All I was to you was a mess you had to clean up. Underneath the picture lays a broken mirror. So broken the broom slid right through it with ease. You left me with such ease.. Seven years of misery and distress to come. Women are supposed to love wholeheartedly, And partners are supposed to reflect like prisms radiating into.... …..their lovers soul.
Behind my sternum and between my ribs, my heart has almost been emptied. Oh, how I regret letting you borrow my essence my internal bosom God gifted to me thinking it was all yours. My tenderness is dripping slowly into soft memories we shared...
...half of my heart is yours...
...half of my heart is lost...
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NEW POEM
...half my heart is lost, and half of my heart is still yours. After the scenery of our broken rainbow aligned the stars that night, you just couldn't believe in me. I am at fault. This is all because of my doing. The truth became my misery and my misery became your hell. Do you really feel that way? Do you really think I am better off alone?
Alone...alone...alone...
Regardless of our misconceptions, I truly believed you were the one...
...my one...my only...
Now I'm frightened and lonely.
After the thunder but before the lightening, our branches flew like a tornado. I was your tornado. I swarmed around and around and I could never let you go...
without the reasons I needed you. You won't admit it but you needed me too. There are no more hello's and quite too many goodbyes and my life is a whispering willow tree starving for rain. You were my rain.
We started off as little seedlings and grew into a strong yellow lily within three months. It was too much and too fast for our reality to be sacred. I gave you my core and you smashed it and threw it away. Now, I will never be whole again.
My tenderness is dripping slowly into soft memories we shared...
...half my heart is yours...
...half my heart is lost...
~Written By: Laura Loo~
~Date Written: February 26, 2016~
Copyright © Lu Loo | Year Posted 2016
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