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Familiar Foes

sometimes..beneath conceited clouds we swirl~cloaked in rainbow radiance.. self-serving songs sung by familiar faces~ but are we too naive.. to see past nebulous spheres ~ cunning wings of bittersweet butterflies.. not every tuscan twinkle is gold ~ nor do they speak tea rose twilights..

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Silent One

Date: 12/17/2023 5:25:00 AM

Oh a winner again...so amazing! Congrats

Paige Hind

Date: 12/16/2023 12:05:00 PM

Very wise...love the last two monokus!

Joe Maverick

Date: 12/10/2023 3:18:00 PM

I at times consider people fame the price.? Many are bought out..The establishment swoops down four scouser working class Lads bugged many people out, a kbe i dangled And sir paulie is on cloud nine.' Singing for the Kings and emperors so to wax.' No longer the Potent force for change, lesson learned old Guy new song.' Covent garden to let it loose And 20 big celebritys happened to be there the Song is acclaimed, it was all unplanned of Course.' Well of course spur of the minute.'

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/10/2023 11:38:00 AM

A very creative Monoku write. I enjoyed this one... Have a great/blessed day...............

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/10/2023 10:12:00 AM

Excellent way to describe these beautiful people so shallow on the inside

Ink Empress
Date: 12/10/2023 10:20:00 AM

You are an amazing reader sweet andrea im grateful for you. You understood my words. Thats truly a gift

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/10/2023 8:07:00 AM

Your skillful usage of the syllable-strained framework to seamlessly portray feelings reminiscent of free verse poetry is truly impressive. Your extraordinary poetic prowess is admirable dear friend. Not all rays in the Tuscan sky possess the luminosity of gold. Ink, your words are so eloquent.

Silent One

Date: 12/10/2023 7:28:00 AM

I agree with what the lioness said.. four great monoku, and you have to be careful with people in this world, even those that claim to be our friends... nice imagery in the last one and metaphorical monoku are your speciality..

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/10/2023 6:44:00 AM

a lovely chain of evocative Monokus, dearest Ink. I love the delicate yet powerful images you created to convey your message of deceit and self-serving, cunning individuals. I delighted in every image and word, like I would a magnificent painting at the art gallery. I especially liked 'conceited clouds' and 'tuscan twinkle.' I do so appreciate how you can powerfully convey your theme and thoughts with such subtly. Pleasant indeed. Have a splendid Sunday, hugs, Sara

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/10/2023 6:30:00 AM

I like how you use this syllable constrained form to paint emotions as easily as a free verse poem. Kudos to your poetic prowess, my friend. --not every tuscan twinkle is gold--I hear you, Ink.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/10/2023 3:35:00 AM

Creative lines penned. Thank you for sharing them with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

John Lawless

Date: 12/10/2023 2:58:00 AM

I shall have to revisit these when I am fully awake.....very interesting.....but I haven't finished my coffee....

Ink Empress
Date: 12/10/2023 3:57:00 AM

Haha how was the coffee? I challenge you to read between these words john im sure you can do it. Lol haha

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 12/10/2023 12:18:00 AM

Tea rose twilights . Wow . You just nailed it.

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 12/9/2023 10:48:00 PM

Ooooo that opening line papi!!! sometimes…beneath conceited clouds we swirl~cloaked in rainbow radiance… mmm .. cunning wings of bittersweet butterflies.. mmmhmm damn butterflies!!!! That’s y neeed the sunscreen aeee from these insects!! SPF10000! not every tuscan twinkle is gold .. damn rite then !!!!! nor do they speak tea rose twilights.. oooo child that ending is on the perfect perioooood!!!

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/9/2023 10:19:00 PM

Oh my, what an evocative and thought-provoking chain of monoku this is! I am enchantingly in awe of your mesmerizing wordplay that draws shades of profound depth within heartfelt lines. Very true, cloaked in rainbow radiance, we somehow fail to recognise those selfish/self-serving songs of familiar faces and we are blinded by our naive innocence.. Those cunning wings of bittersweet butterflies aren't always magical! And so rightly said.. Not every "tuscan twinkle is gold" Sigh, deeply resonating

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/9/2023 10:20:00 PM

"Tea-rose twilights" Gosh, I'm a fan of your eloquent word-combinations my dear Ink, this is such a breathtaking poem.. With so much to grasp and ponder about.. Brilliantly weaved in words..