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Falling Through Cracks, Greased By the Sale

Stars falling from the sky like diamonds from a crown. Jewels fell through time, to fall all around. A woman cracks a smile, you pass and they frown. Greased lighting passing between the posts touchdown. She's the star of the show by far, as the moon came down. The chitter chatter starts, you're the talk of the town. Free of charge, or sale of the century or was it a shakedown. I'mfalling just falling, if I screamed, no one would hear me. A man walks through an enchanted wood but nobody see's. An evil spirit stares between the cracks of the tree's. Like greased lighting he is onto you, giving you the third degree. Save me, by all that is good in this world, a plea. A fantasy world that's hidden between the lines, for thee. Hidden in a sale book on a dusty shelf, so full of mystery and glee. comp entry 16/12 You will find one word of the title in each line both stanza

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Date: 12/20/2016 9:33:00 AM
Nicely done, Stephen, and I enjoyed how you wove in those words from that line of Daniel's poem. Congratulations on your podium win! Sandra
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Stephen Pennell
Date: 12/20/2016 12:15:00 PM
many thanks sandra glad you liked it and chuffed it was picked stephen , merry xmas
Date: 12/20/2016 9:20:00 AM
You have fallen through the cracks...but have come out with a beautifully written piece...Congrats!!! Stephen...god bless...^WW^
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Date: 12/20/2016 12:18:00 PM
many thanks, winged warrior always nice to get a lovely comment stephen
Date: 12/20/2016 8:46:00 AM
I love the creativity, flow, clear message and great verses in this fine presentation. Congratulations on your win. A pleasure to read this and find such a clear and true message within.A7
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Date: 12/20/2016 12:20:00 PM
many thanks for these comments on the poem , stephen
Date: 12/20/2016 4:54:00 AM
Ohh, Stephen, I adore this poem! How you did this, is brilliant, and it's flowing too. I am awed.
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Date: 12/20/2016 5:46:00 AM
cheers darren praise indeed from a ps regular stephen
Date: 12/20/2016 3:53:00 AM
To echo so many other words, love the scattering of the title within the poem. Congratulations on a job well done!
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Date: 12/20/2016 5:44:00 AM
thank you , was a shot in the dark glad you liked it
Date: 12/19/2016 8:34:00 PM
Congratulations Stephen on your win!
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Stephen Pennell
Date: 12/20/2016 1:09:00 AM
many thanks meenakshi nice surprise to wake upto
Date: 12/19/2016 8:13:00 PM
Very good, Stephen, I love the way you used each word of the line in your poem. Congratulations on your win... :) Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays Hugs Eve
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Date: 12/20/2016 1:10:00 AM
cheers, eve and the same to you have a great xmas
Date: 12/19/2016 7:57:00 PM
Congratulations, Stephen. : ) Your poem is very true to one of the moods that can come from Daniel's poem (in my opinion).
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Date: 12/20/2016 1:10:00 AM
cheers doug , thank you
Date: 12/19/2016 6:21:00 PM
A 7 for your highly imaginative, WINNING poem, Stephen! Janice
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Date: 12/20/2016 1:11:00 AM
cheers janice tried to do something different
Date: 12/19/2016 6:01:00 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful placement Stephen. There were so many excellent entries, I can imagine Daniel had quite a time choosing. Bravo! ; )
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Date: 12/20/2016 1:08:00 AM
thank you connie
Date: 12/19/2016 5:57:00 PM
Congratulations Stephen on your placement in my contest. Your poem rhymed and flowed well and was very creative. I did not score you higher because of the bold words but it was very clever. Thank you for your participation:)
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Date: 12/20/2016 1:07:00 AM
many thanks :chuffed at 1st i posted without highlighting then thought it would make it easier to see how I used your excellent line .
Date: 12/16/2016 3:55:00 PM
a rare offering well done, stephen.. huggs
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Date: 12/16/2016 4:09:00 PM
cheers nette , invented by me, something tells me there's a reason no one else as thought of this , but the world loves trier. lol
Date: 12/16/2016 2:27:00 PM
I am impressed Stephen! Love your clever format with the title in the actual poem too... not sure if my muse is going to play for the contest...that pic of Daniels makes my eyes go weird lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 12/16/2016 4:11:00 PM
cheers jan glad your about giving encouragement , not wrote anything for a couple of days the muse as done one lol

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