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Susie’s flowing blonde tresses were her pride and joy they shone like a halo above her head and framed her delicate features From the moment they met her boyfriend called her Goldilocks Five years after they married cancer cruelly crept into their lives Skilled surgeons removed her lump but chemotherapy took its toll and clumps of hair clung to her brush They both sobbed bitterly as her husband turned on the hair clippers which buzzed across her scalp… in the ultimate act of love Goldilocks Zone Poetry Contest Sponsored by Anthony Biaanco 04/11/21

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/18/2021 9:37:00 AM

A unique take that garnered you top spot. Way to go, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/18/2021 5:34:00 PM

thanks Andrea i am surprised and delighted!:-) hugs Jan xx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/17/2021 10:54:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a story/write. Have a blessed day/weekend with your win...........

Jan Allison
Date: 4/17/2021 2:15:00 PM

Thanks Paula:-) hugs Jan xx

David Kavanagh

Date: 4/17/2021 4:33:00 AM

Congratulations Jan, on a well deserved win, you came at this contest, from a completely unique angle, and perspective, a difficult subject to pen, but you get the balance between suffering and love just right, cheers David

Jan Allison
Date: 4/17/2021 2:14:00 PM

Thanks David it was an emotional poem to write:-) hugs Jan xx

Beata Agustin

Date: 4/17/2021 3:06:00 AM

Congrats! Thanks for sharing this reality in your awesome poetic style. God bless you.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/17/2021 2:14:00 PM

Thanks Beata:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/14/2021 1:11:00 PM

You took this contest to and emotional place Jan, with your heartfelt words that are poignant and reverent. A lovely entry my friend. Blessings xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 4/17/2021 2:13:00 PM

thanks Connie i wasn't sure if the sponsor would like it, but thankfully he did!:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/14/2021 10:40:00 AM

- A heartbreaking poem, Jan ... that could very well be from reality - The hair, the woman's ornament it is said ... but I would rather be hairless than have cancer - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/17/2021 2:13:00 PM

thanks my friend cancer is so cruel in so many ways:-( hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/13/2021 7:16:00 PM

The Gift of the Magi comes to mind as well. ~ Rapunzel

Jan Allison
Date: 4/17/2021 2:12:00 PM

thanks GW:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 4/12/2021 12:34:00 PM

Yours is a touching, sad take on this Goldilocks Zone theme, Jan. The last line turns eyes misty! ~ Incidentally I know of someone whose granddaughter calls him Baldylocks! :) Take care. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2021 2:08:00 PM

I wonder who that young lady might be! :-) hugs to all the family, Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 4/12/2021 12:23:00 PM

My maternal grandmother's hair hung down to her ankles, so you can imagine what a life-changing event that was! Excellent entry, Jan! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2021 2:07:00 PM

aww that is so sad Rico:-( hugs Jan xx

Edward Ibeh

Date: 4/12/2021 10:54:00 AM

This is a sad yet fabulous take on the theme, Jan. Good luck in Anthony's contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2021 2:07:00 PM

Thanks so much Edward:-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/12/2021 12:20:00 AM

It will grow again so long as she is cured. Soup mail me on your husband's condition. Yesterday I had my third chemo jab.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2021 2:06:00 PM

Thanks Victor:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/11/2021 7:07:00 PM

Mom went through this too...tears

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2021 2:06:00 PM

so sorry you can relate Kim:-(hugs Jan xx

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 4/11/2021 5:30:00 PM

Oh Jan Maybe this 1 is just for me thank you dearly my friend. This my favorite memory of my dad cutting trying to cut his hair because it was still so thick. Cancer took everything but couldn't take that

Christopher Flaherty
Date: 4/14/2021 4:34:00 PM

I Jan Maybe the cruelest of them all Bugs and blessings

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2021 2:06:00 PM

aww thanks Chris, it is such a cruel disease:-( hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley

Date: 4/11/2021 4:34:00 PM

You my friend, have gifted such a gem of love. One that reaches well within this old poet's heart. And so touches its core, its concept of life, love and the immense sadness that one faces when a beloved falls ill. A gem, a fav.. God bless...

Jan Allison
Date: 4/11/2021 4:44:00 PM

so glad to hear your wife is doing so well, sadly this is a poem too many can relate to:-( thinking of you all:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley
Date: 4/11/2021 4:37:00 PM

Hope renews as my darling wife's hair is now growing back. Her surgery having gone so very well. Yet to come is her weeks of radiation treatment. We so truly appreciate all the prayers given us. God bless...

Ilene Bauer

Date: 4/11/2021 2:56:00 PM

oh, so sad, but beautifully told, jan! best of luck in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 4/11/2021 3:29:00 PM

Thanks Ilene, its such a cruel disease on so many levels:-( hugs Jan xx

J. Summers

Date: 4/11/2021 1:53:00 PM

A poignant tale of love Jan. John

Jan Allison
Date: 4/11/2021 2:04:00 PM

Thanks John, not sure if its what the sponsor is after but I take the chance:-) hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 4/11/2021 1:41:00 PM

I remember when my husband decided to shave his head - I actually liked the bald look on him! Thankfully it's growing back now - very moving entry for the contest, Jan~

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/12/2021 11:13:00 AM

His latest scan showed no trace of cancer cells, so we are cautiously optimistic~

Jan Allison
Date: 4/11/2021 2:03:00 PM

Thanks Michelle, hope your hubby is doing well:-) hugs Jan xx