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Original poem:  

"a million fairytales tremble at us,
   they know how our love does outshine with flickering light-
sounds of swift ivory doves cry out,
   fleeting into the ebon night; for our love loses not insight,
never cursed or full of deep blight;
I embrace you…you hold me tight

saturated in loneliness were you-
   I knew the pain of loss and despair you carried with ease;
black ravens plague this existence, 
   yet you stay with me, longing for my hopelessness to cease,
descending onto my grateful knees-
I sense your essence in the breeze

the wind blows, and gusts prevail,
   intense obscurity of the calamity I faced before you attains-
emerging from the dust I was found
   weeping in the forsaken land of my desolated heart’s remains;
as the tempest rages in warm rains,
your genuine adoration still sustains


for I am but a woman craving to be near you for all of eternity-
and I shall feel this pure affection or you, my beloved…eternally. 

   and...

sweetheart, you are my perpetual connection,
my alleviation found in perfection-
bound by love and affection"


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CONTEST EXAMPLE:

black ravens plague this existence, 
fleeting into the ebon night-
I embrace you…you hold me tight;
I sense your essence in the breeze,
descending onto my grateful knees- 
for our love loses not insight;
your genuine adoration still sustains,
the wind blows, and gusts prevail- 
as the tempest rages in warm rains

saturated in loneliness were you-
 
sounds of swift ivory doves cry out;
they know how our love does outshine with flickering light-
never cursed or full of deep blight,
I knew the pain of loss and despair you carried with ease, 
yet you stay with me, longing for my hopelessness to cease


emerging from the dust I was found- 

weeping in the forsaken land of my desolated heart’s remains;
for I am but a woman craving to be near you for all of eternity-
sweetheart, you are my perpetual connection
bound by love and affection;
and I shall feel this pure adoration or you, my beloved…eternally. 
intense obscurity of the calamity I faced before you attains,
my alleviation found in perfection

and...

a million fairytales tremble at us…
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FOR MY NEW CONTEST PLEASE REWRITE MY ORIGINAL POEM ABOVE AND CREATE YOUR OWN MASTERPIECE. USE LINES IN ANY ORDER AS LONG AS THEY ARE EXACTLY AS WRITTEN. YOU CAN ADD UP TO 5 LINES OF YOUR OWN. JUST MAKE SURE IT MAKES SENSE AND FLOWS WELL. THE SECOND POEM IS AN EXAMPLE OF WHAT I AM LOOKING FOR. MY SOUPMAIL IS WORKING (AT THE MOMENT) SO PLEASE SOUPIE ME WITH ANY QUESTIONS. 

THANK YOU,
-luloo

Be blessed :)

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Date: 9/10/2019 3:20:00 AM
I have read this two or three times. Too intimidated to try to figure it out at this time. I guess I am too busy with other things. A terrific poem though!
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Date: 9/8/2019 11:37:00 AM
Lu Loo, I am trying to get this straight. So the idea is to change your lovely lines around and add up to five lines of our own (but only if we want?) i am counting 26 lines in each poem above, so it looks like you want it around 26 to 30 lines but keeping all your lines and only changing their order. Did I get that right? This is quite the challenge. wow.
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Date: 9/8/2019 1:58:00 PM
so I guess the max lines anyone can have is 31, does that make sense?
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Lu Loo
Date: 9/8/2019 1:53:00 PM
you are right! you can add up to 5 lines of your own, as long as you use ALL my lines. Makes it more the poets too. I changed the directions later, hopefully everyone got them!! Thanks lovely lady :)-luloo
Date: 9/8/2019 2:43:00 AM
Quite a challenge, unprecedented - at least for me. It is already a lovely poem but the challenge is an exciting one. Currently my muse is marinating in it - I'll wait until she dries off. truly - pretty writing. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 9/8/2019 1:52:00 PM
yes quite fun too! good luck! You know I love you're poetry. Thank you :)-luloo
Date: 9/7/2019 12:23:00 PM
This is a tall order as both of your poems are so well done. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 9/7/2019 2:29:00 PM
I decided to add to the contest that you can add up to 5 lines of your own if you want. I woke up from a nap earlier with that thought. thanks dear Richard