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Fairy Tale Flounderings

That steamy summer day At age fourteen and three months I stood awaiting the kiss Of the tall, dark, handsome hunk My stomach was in knots As terror snaked up my throat Would he think it was okay? Would he, with flowery words, emote? His luscious lips descended As I closed unbelieving eyes A thrill rushed through my body I was weak from feet to thighs Then, suddenly, his tongue Darted out and squished around In a sloppy and slathering mess My feet never left the ground When the “kiss” was over I couldn’t look at him the same He was a dog; no longer a boy And, now, I don’t recall his name Inspired by John Heck's contest, "Egads, My First Kiss?"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 7/10/2009 4:55:00 PM
Donna, How sad for you. I thought everyone remembered their first kiss and who gave it to them. Mine was in third grade, behind the pyracantha bushes, from Netina Langston. We were caught by Mrs. Ludlow the fourth grade teacher. Embarrasing but it was wonderful. This kiss was the standard by which all others were judged until I met my bride. Thanks for the memory. Love, Will
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Date: 3/1/2009 1:28:00 PM
When I was a girl, there were many "hunks" around. I was 16 when the first one tried to "French Kiss." At the time, I would have truly agreed with you that it felt like a dog panting. Thanks for taking me back a ways, Donna. Love your kiss poem! Carolyn
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Date: 2/19/2009 7:01:00 PM
AWW..the first kiss..you have captured the feelings....weak in the kness...lol..you are a gifted writer!
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Date: 2/19/2009 6:41:00 PM
Hello My Blessed & Gifted Fellow Poet Donna Golden! What a wonderfully humouress and reminiscing account of your lifes first youthful kiss! Ah, the awkwardness of it all, which can sometimes only make one laugh as they become older and then look back upon it all within their years understandings and wisdoms...."Excellent Write!"...."Warmth & Blessings Always To You & Your Loves, John!":)
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Date: 2/19/2009 4:25:00 AM
This has terrific imagery that made me look back to my youth a bit. Very clear and the rhyme is just perfect. MIchael
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Date: 2/18/2009 11:40:00 PM
Besy wishes with this one Donna.Rgds Brian & thanks for your kind words
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Date: 2/18/2009 8:48:00 PM
Those rotten boys, such an expectation for a first kiss lost in a lot of tongue. Now that for sure is an Egad moment. Laurie
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Date: 2/18/2009 5:50:00 PM
Oh yeah....how I do remember the shocking reality of that age, those eager beaver boys who thought that it was sexy to go for the tonsils!! eeeuuuwww! ... Great job, Donna!! Good luck!!! My laugh for the day!~ Carrie
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Date: 2/18/2009 3:58:00 PM
Those first kisses are truly an experience. This is a wonderful poem and I too like the twist and humor in this delightfull read! Great job, Doona, and good luck! Love, Robin
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Date: 2/18/2009 3:41:00 PM
Donna you made me fall off my chair laughing - what an interesting twist - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 2/18/2009 3:14:00 PM
Hey, Donna, flies make love better, huh? As I recall the first kiss, I missed....what a clod I was. Enjoyed your poem mucho. Love, daver
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Date: 2/18/2009 1:59:00 PM
The imagery is great and best of luck in the contest...Raul
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Date: 2/18/2009 1:29:00 PM
Hi Donna.. dodgy thing kissing dogs.. LOL ... tricky subject dealt with, with a touch of humour, good luck in the competition..... thanks for the comment on Once Upon a time, Donna
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Date: 2/18/2009 1:10:00 PM
Great use of imagery and expressions I could see here where I sit I love the small bit of humor to. well done! Good luck in the contest! Laura :)
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