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Failing Star - Mr Ox E Moron

He was an unpopular celebrity who enjoyed his liquid food
Acting weirdly normal when he was in a happy mood

He’d been on a heavy diet and was eating lots of jumbo shrimp
They were disgustingly delicious with hot chili and on his diet he won't skimp

His stomach was growing smaller and now looked awfully pretty
I hear his dieting was an open secret and not virtual reality

Once a star of film and stage he could stand out in a small crowd
His face was pretty ugly but his quiet presence was quite loud

This was his goodbye reception for he was now a failing star
Now his full time job in his retirement is propping up the bar!

08~20~16

Contest - Oxymoronic Obsession Sponsored by David Lindsay

Stanza 1 unpopular celebrity, liquid food, weirdly normal. happy mood
Stanza 2 heavy diet, jumbo shrimp. disgustingly delicious, hot chili
Stanza 3 growing smaller. open secret, virtual reality, awfully pretty
Stanza 4 small crowd, pretty ugly,
Stanza 5 goodbye reception, failing star, full time job in his retirement

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Seosamh De Burca September 9, 2016 at 9:39 AM Congrats on you winning poem well done. Jan Allison September 11, 2016 at 5:42 PM Thanks Seosamh:-) hugs Jan xx

Ralph Sergi September 8, 2016 at 1:30 PM Hi Jan: You never fail to impress me with your poetry. Great Oxymoron approach. An italian hug. Jan Allison September 11, 2016 at 5:42 PM Thanks Ralph I had fun with this contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Afzal Nusker September 7, 2016 at 11:18 PM Congratulations, Jan. Jan Allison September 8, 2016 at 1:30 AM Thanks Afzal:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May September 7, 2016 at 8:28 PM Congrats on a great win Jan Jan Allison September 8, 2016 at 1:31 AM Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

John Hamilton September 7, 2016 at 7:07 PM Great job, so many oxymorons, a real fun read.Congrats on a fine win! Look no N/A! woo hoo! Jan Allison September 8, 2016 at 1:32 AM Thanks John I was delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong September 7, 2016 at 6:24 PM A wonderful winning entry Jan. Congratulations on your second placement! 7 ; ) Jan Allison September 8, 2016 at 1:33 AM Thanks Connie I really enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight September 7, 2016 at 1:37 PM Great selection of 'oxymorons', Jan. Congratulations on your podium win. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison September 7, 2016 at 2:58 PM Thanks Sandra hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars September 7, 2016 at 1:13 PM Jan, congrats on your placement! very clever and funny :)-luloo Jan Allison September 7, 2016 at 2:58 PM Thanks Luloo hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel August 26, 2016 at 1:30 AM Great write, Jan:) Jan Allison September 7, 2016 at 2:57 PM Thanks Jo hugs Jan xx

Afzal Nusker August 22, 2016 at 4:23 AM Wow, wonderfully written oxymoron with very good choice of words. Enjoyed it very much. Best wishes, Jan. Jan Allison August 23, 2016 at 1:57 AM Thanks Afzal-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven August 21, 2016 at 4:30 PM Hi Jan, excellent work again. I always enjoy the fun Jan. This one is filled with such wonderful content. I like the concept of the whole write. Never heard of this format before. You write it very well though Jan. I always enjoy the lightness and laughter that comes from your writes. Another new form, to me, you have found. This has to be a seven Jan. Hugs....Mike. XX Jan Allison August 21, 2016 at 5:09 PM I was aware of the oxymoron term ... googled to find some examples and made up a few of my own and had fun writing the poem Mike:-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick August 21, 2016 at 1:53 PM Jan, I have found that great minds work in the same direction..LOL..Thanks for the visit to my page..I am looking forward to a great entry..You probably could change what you have written to suit either of the forms accepted..Sara..Enjoyed reading this contest entry..Clever oxymoron... Jan Allison August 21, 2016 at 1:57 PM I have written the poem for you Sara - I will work on the other poem I have started and post it another day:-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings August 21, 2016 at 7:46 AM Clever, Jan. Love the title. Good luck with the contest. Barry. Jan Allison August 21, 2016 at 8:07 AM I amended the title this morning ... I'm glad you liked it:-) hugs Jan xx

Fiona Callaghan August 21, 2016 at 2:45 AM Such fun to read Jan. Best of luck in the competition. Fiona Jan Allison August 21, 2016 at 3:49 AM Thanks so much for dropping by Fiona:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley August 20, 2016 at 4:48 PM Terribly good, Jan, will do well x Jan Allison August 20, 2016 at 5:48 PM ha ha ha great one Mr Viv:-) hugs jan xx

Darlene De Beaulieu August 20, 2016 at 2:12 PM I do like your poetry Jan I read it several times and enjoyed every time. you picked a good subject. Jan Allison August 20, 2016 at 5:48 PM Thanks so much for the lovely comment Darlene:-) hugs jan xx

Lynn Marie August 20, 2016 at 9:09 AM This is fantastic Jan..I really like the subject matter, so original and so fun to read.:-) There were so many oxymorons it was great to try to spot them all, as I was thoroughly entertained. Terrific writing...My very best to you in the contest.:-) blessings, lynn Jan Allison August 20, 2016 at 9:26 AM Thanks Lynn it was fun to write:-) hugs Jan xx