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To ride the sea is a pleasure and a curse as huddle of gulls, starfish dart from nowhere enchanting frolic on breakers, they traverse into buoyant laps with crystal tides so rare. My arms swivel a distance while I immerse from deep lures of an islet, beyond compare; yet once, twice... roughest torrents did choke my lungs engulfed by coils of a dunk, into waves’ tongues. I awake on swamps of moss , hurt like trapped cord from a hillside , birds echo their fiercest drawl; reviving my anxious glides with crests adored for the terror -thrill of waters makes me stall. As the bashing of rapids drills more pain on board this dread, dread of drowning snuffs a night-breaths' pall... though I cringe, hurt again from a sail, outright, I’d rather face danger to unleash my fright. If it hurts so bad, why do we do it? Contest of Silent One -------------------- [11 syl lines per requirement of the form; 10 syls likewise acceptable] -------------------- 6/19/2016

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Date: 2/17/2017 6:08:00 PM
Outstanding Ottava rima poem, Nette. Love the theme, and the fearlessness of the protagonist in this poem. Wonderful display of language and emotional intimacy. Very riveting poetry, dear. Loved it though. Much love and hugs.
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Date: 7/9/2016 7:31:00 AM
Beautiful choice of words, net. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 7/9/2016 7:31:00 AM
Beautiful choice of words, net. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 7/3/2016 3:02:00 PM
Nice pen and I believe I learned something new ottava rima, Louis.
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Date: 6/25/2016 8:18:00 AM
Facing fears - Nice spin on the contest and congrats on your 2nd place win! Jesse
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Date: 6/23/2016 7:26:00 AM
Congratulations on your fine entry and fabulous win, Nette. ~karam~
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Date: 6/19/2016 3:19:00 PM
Reads like a winner to me..Way to go..I enjoyed reading your work..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 6/19/2016 12:21:00 PM
I find myself being unqualified to comment on your poetry. It has a style and an essence to it that surpasses my own ability to conceive. Beyond that, you stimulate and inspire this reader to explore those horizons that exist beyond where my own comfort lives. Peace. :)
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Date: 6/18/2016 4:37:00 PM
Masterful! You face the hurt, pain with such spunk of a poem by taking the theme to another level. Sail on, woman!
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Date: 6/18/2016 4:27:00 PM
- A difficult subject, but you've mastered it great - Good luck in the contest .... and happy weekend, Nette - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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