F-5 Tornado

The warm temperature drops outdoors,
    And first drops of fresh rain sprinkle.
      The thunder claps right above me,
         As lightening is striking afar.
         Dust is blowing in the wind,
         Trees are bending fiercely,
            A train horn blares,
              As the core nears me.
              Then sudden silence,
             A calm reappears.
              Electrical fires start,
               For a moment one
            Thinks it’s over,
             Then it starts
              Again quickly.
                 Passing by my  
                Home taking
                 My neighbors,    
                  Tin flying by,
                   The tornado
                      Fades, look                   
                         At all the
                            Damage.
                                 And I 
                                     Am
                                       Uns
                                              c
                                                  a
                                                       t
                                                            h
                                                        e
                                                           d.

My poem is about Tornadic weather and evokes
Water in, 'first drops of fresh rain sprinkle'
Wind in, 'Trees are bending fiercely'
Earth in 'Dust is blowing in the wind'
Metal in 'Tin flying by'
Fire in, 'Electrical fires start'

Feeling in 'The warm temperature drops outdoors'
Smell in 'First drops of fresh rain sprinkle'
Taste in 'Dust is blowing in the wind'
Sight in, Lightening is striking afar'
Hearing in 'A train horn blares'
_____________________________
Inspired by Deborah Guzzi's
Five Senses / Five Elements contest.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 11/2/2009 1:53:00 PM
OKIES!!!! Here you go hon for the Concrete contest now if you haven't all ready done one! Light & Love
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Date: 4/15/2009 7:41:00 AM
this is so amazing this guy has lots of inspiration keep up the grat writing raul!!!!!!!!!!
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Date: 3/29/2009 10:26:00 AM
Stunning shape, this is what they look like and do.
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Date: 3/28/2009 5:07:00 PM
Good job!!!! Yes, I found her contest to be inspirational and challenging. I like your concrete presentaion of nature. Good luck to both of us. Smiling again.
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Date: 3/25/2009 2:51:00 AM
The shape is fascinating, you captured the violence of the tornado down to a 'T'. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Date: 3/25/2009 2:36:00 AM
Amazing shape, you outdome yourself with this one. I hope you place.................Danielle
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Date: 3/24/2009 8:00:00 PM
ooh. this one is a winner in my mind. Your talent surpasses mine. GREAT JOB, twop thumbs up. Love E.
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Date: 3/23/2009 11:09:00 PM
I like the shape and the you nailed the truth behind a tornado. It's amazing how it can damage one house and not the one's next to it. I've seen 2X4's driven into a tree. Tyler
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Date: 3/23/2009 3:51:00 PM
Nice shape to the poem. We're very familiar with tornados in Oklahoma.
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Date: 3/16/2009 7:16:00 PM
nice that reminds me of the may 3,1999 tornado!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!danielle
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Date: 3/13/2009 4:12:00 PM
this is wonderful , Raul! I love the shape, too! Good luck! Love, Robin
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Date: 3/12/2009 2:38:00 PM
Nice shape, tornado's are fierce forces of nature. It's crazy how they can touch one house and the ones right next to it are unharmed. DN
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Date: 3/11/2009 6:11:00 PM
Loved the way you approached this poem and the visuals are fantastic. Your creativity is inspiring to a novice poet like myself. My eyes are opening.
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Date: 3/11/2009 7:05:00 AM
WOW Raul, this is great, great, great! A sure winner here! I agree with Sharon, it is truly a piece of art and the tornado shape is just perfect! This one will BLOW the competition away! hehe Tin and all! ;) Really excellent, good luck! Love, Amy
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Date: 3/11/2009 5:47:00 AM
Wow is right! You've outdone yourself. Bravo Raul! This truly a magnificent piece of art. Excellent. Love, Shar
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Date: 3/11/2009 1:23:00 AM
Wow..Best wishes with this one Raul.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 3/10/2009 9:14:00 PM
Raul well looks like you have this one wrapped up to me - Outstanding - God Bless you Raul, MJ
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Date: 3/10/2009 7:38:00 PM
WOWSERS! Totally awesome dude! This is so exciting, fun stuff Raul.
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Date: 3/10/2009 4:06:00 PM
Very talented writing, I can see the eye of the storm when the train horn blares. Splendid. Déirdre
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Date: 3/10/2009 3:40:00 PM
This is totally awesome.. the shape is great.. the words captures it well..very creative..best wishes Raul.
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Date: 3/10/2009 3:12:00 PM
Weather sure can be challenging. We're in the midst of our worst winter bizzard of the season. This is such a creative piece--a tribute to your talent. Best wishes in the contest. Karen
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