Bj Legros Kelley Poet Choka

Eyes of the Beholders

moon peers from heaven
                            shrouds of light clouds obscure not
                                          his curious view

                                          romantic couple
                                 strolling along moonlit path
                                    love's peace enshrouded

                                       cautious eyes uplift
                                 shadow darkens moonlit face
                                      bunny burrows deep

                                          precision vision
                                  owl in a moonbeam races
                                         dinner escaping

                                     couple's hushed visions
                               awed sighs beneath desert skies
                                      eyes beholding peace

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Linda Alice Fowler March 23, 2023 at 7:02 AM Wow BJ. I had to read this after your comment to my Nocturnal. Fabulous! A pair of keepers! Bj Legros Kelley March 23, 2023 at 12:19 PM Yes, your poem Nocturnal, coupled with this, exactly! You truly conveyed the other side of the night that I was grasping at in this poem! :)

Anon Y'Mous March 22, 2023 at 11:13 PM I can picture all this so easily. You paint beautiful pictures with your words. Bj Legros Kelley March 23, 2023 at 12:28 PM Thank you Anon :) A pictures is worth a thousand words, but when a few words can paint a picture, that is always a joy :) Thank you for your visit and comments to my poems :)

Anna Marie Kaianah March 7, 2023 at 9:29 PM Another amazing write. Keep up the amazing work BJ <3 ~Anna Kaianah Bj Legros Kelley March 23, 2023 at 12:26 PM Aw Anna, encourager and sweet friend :) Thank you for your visit and kind comment. I will be over soon and hope to see more poems on your site! :) <3

Joe Maverick March 4, 2023 at 2:26 PM Great stuff B J, it has a smooth tapestry If imagery and sensation..Haiku senryu Tanka, are syllabatically correct in 5 7 7 Format as well..I have done some like that I don't know why the 5 7 5 seems more favoured? Good to have been here.' Bj Legros Kelley March 23, 2023 at 12:23 PM Thank you, Joe, so hopefully I labeled this correctly, it gets a bit confusing sometimes! Mostly, I am comfortable with rhythm and rhyme sorts of poems that come naturally to me, but it's fun to try different forms :)

Valsa George March 3, 2023 at 8:12 AM I am not familiar with choka ! But certainly your poem is a delight. Bj Legros Kelley March 3, 2023 at 2:29 PM I hope I did this form correctly, my daughter told me that several groupings of Haiku lines were a Choka, so I tried it. I can only hope I titled this form correctly. :)

Sotto Poet March 3, 2023 at 6:29 AM You depict the nighttime in a sequence of illustrations. The owl was the last one left who hadn't eaten yet. Really adored all the little specifics you provided. Bj Legros Kelley March 3, 2023 at 2:27 PM Thank you Sotto, hopefully he'll catch some delicious mice for his dinner, the desert is filled with much competition, the coyotes seem to be proliferating and seen all over, so, there seems to be less for owls, bobcats, mountain lions, etc to eat. The carnivores are now hunting closer to humans and pets, which shows natural food sources have become unbalanced...poor things! When we had a bunch of locusts come in, I saw coyotes trying to catch and eat them! But, despite the desert's competition and struggles, the sweethearts saw only beauty and peace. Thank you for your visit, I hope you are well :)

Paula Goldsmith February 2, 2023 at 1:45 PM A lovely write. I love the moon/sky. Have a blessed day writing away...................... Bj Legros Kelley March 2, 2023 at 10:44 PM Thank you Paula, oh, me too. It is wonderful to enjoy the vast beauty of the sky, and the moon and stars, I love them so! I hope you are blessed Paula, thank you for all your visits and comments to my poems, I will be over soon to enjoy reading more of your poems :) <3

Andrea Dietrich February 1, 2023 at 4:58 PM a great set of nature haiku putting together this lovely scene, BJ. Sorry I am so late seeing your poetry. It's so hard for me these days to do Soup as often as I used to. Bj Legros Kelley March 2, 2023 at 10:42 PM I understand Andrea, likewise, I am not able to be on here the way I wish I could be, just trying to catch up tonight after a rather long absence from here myself. Life can get a bit overwhelming sometimes, it's just impossible to be able to do all we wish we could. Thank you for your visit, I hope you are well, Hugs to you Andrea, you come to my mind often, I pray you are well. <3

Harry Horsman January 31, 2023 at 8:58 PM 5-7-5 with in nature, and everything under the moonlight, such is this wondrous poetry, BJ. love it. Bj Legros Kelley March 2, 2023 at 10:39 PM Thank you so much Harry, your comment is like poetry :) You have truly honored me with this wonderful comment to my poem :)

Valsa George January 31, 2023 at 8:52 PM In the moonlit night, beauty and romance co mingle and peace emanates! A heavenly night ! Bj Legros Kelley March 2, 2023 at 10:37 PM <3 It can be so romantic out in the desert, under star swept skies and the moon peering through the clouds. The desert is alive with so much life, but for romantic lovers, the awestruck beauty is all they can see :) <3 Thank you for your visit and comment sweet friend, I will be back over soon to catch up on all I've missed while I was away from here for the past few weeks <3

Michael Tor January 31, 2023 at 8:16 PM Very nice BJ enjoy reading my friend. thanks for sharing... Bj Legros Kelley March 2, 2023 at 10:34 PM Thank you Michael :)

Heidi Sands January 31, 2023 at 2:20 PM This is so nice to read tonight. A Fave for me! Beautiful , :) Bj Legros Kelley March 2, 2023 at 10:33 PM Wonderful Heidi! I'm so honored with your fave :) I hope you are doing well, I remember to pray for you. Sorry to be replying back so late, sometimes I can't be on here, and I feel so bad to not reach out. I'll be over to your site soon. Looking forward to catching up on your poems as well as others on here :) <3

Kim Rodrigues January 31, 2023 at 1:43 PM I can see that couple looking at the vastness of the desert sky, in awe! Bj Legros Kelley March 2, 2023 at 10:31 PM Oh, yes, it never gets old, ever! It is a wonderous feeling to be out under the stars, and moon. We have an owl living nearby, he is always looking for a midnight snack, but, such a majestic creature :) I know you'll be heading to the southwest soon, I hope you have a wonderful stay :) <3

Sara Kendrick January 31, 2023 at 12:25 PM Creative lines you have written in this one. I enjoyed reading it today. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara Bj Legros Kelley March 2, 2023 at 10:28 PM Thank you Sara :) I will be over to visit your site again soon, I have been absent from PS for awhile and have so much to catch up on! Thank you for your visit and comment too :)

Evelyn Judy Buehler January 30, 2023 at 6:34 PM Peace and romance are wonderful companions, not to mention the moon. Lovely poem, BJ. Bj Legros Kelley March 2, 2023 at 10:27 PM Thank you Evelyn, the moon makes for a truly enchanted evening to be sure :)

Vijay Pandit January 28, 2023 at 5:24 AM Beautifully you convey these moonlit images, BJ. Much enjoyed. Bj Legros Kelley March 2, 2023 at 10:26 PM Thank you Vijay, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. I love moonlit walks, and the desert is such a captivating place, filled with so much life :)

Victor Buhagiar January 27, 2023 at 10:37 PM You paint a series of pictures of nighttime. Only the poor owl remained hungry. Loved your details. Thanks for reading my poems. Bj Legros Kelley January 28, 2023 at 3:21 AM Yes, poor owl, but I'd rather he catch a rattlesnake or a field mouse and leave the sweet bunnies alone :) I really enjoy reading your poetry Victor, as well as your visits and uplifting comments to my poems. I'm glad you liked this Choka; I enjoyed writing it. :)