Exposing the Soul

The fallen sons slipped off Creation’s lens.
To taste the sting from our own tree and fruit.
Their giants quarried till no place to stand.
Before these day’s deceiving shades of gray,
The prophet’s shutters opened wide to write.
Foretold of hate in focus driving nails.
Our Pilate’s wash in Silver Halide’s bowl.
For only one Son’s blood can fill the baths,
His saving grace developing the soul.
And now reflecting every color’s hue,
Presented flawless under Father’s sight.
This world to turn and from you it will take.
Endure this to the end and ride the light.

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Date: 2/10/2019 8:39:00 AM
I see you are a true and deep composer my friend.This one being a true gem with a clear and important message. A fav.. and a very fine read this morn..
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Rob Carmack
Date: 2/10/2019 11:02:00 AM
Thank you Robert, I really like how this one turned out.
Date: 1/16/2016 2:51:00 PM
'...endure this to the end and ride the light,' the culmination of an exquisite piece of poetry. Perfect iambic pentameter! Well done Rob!! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 11/10/2015 11:33:00 PM
nice !
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Date: 11/10/2015 1:40:00 PM
This write certainly is from the soul---a beautiful poet's soul! Being a lover of Mother Nature and concerned for our rights to continue living in a clean and unpolluted environment....I really am glad I read your words today. Just put out three poetry and art books on nature to do my part in bring- ing attention to our global environment need fora clean-up!
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Date: 5/28/2015 10:48:00 AM
Great lines with majestic eloquence.. Your meandering of words still did not prevent your peice from giving out its message. This is an absolute 7!
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Date: 5/23/2015 2:00:00 AM
This is an amazing poem. wow... So many memorable and beautiful lines throughout. Truly intriguing.."Before these day’s deceiving shades of gray, The prophet’s shutters opened wide to write." Love those lines... excellent job! Always, Laura
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Date: 5/11/2015 9:18:00 AM
Rob this is a beautiful poem 7 and thanks for visiting my poem
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Date: 5/8/2015 10:04:00 PM
hey, how did I miss this one? I think I never perused this winners' list but it is nice to see you on it. your meter is pretty good , rob! A nice symbolic religious poem. congrats. Gosh, I am trying to remember the name of the poem you told me to check out. if you don't see another comment from me, it means I could not jog my memory looking down the list, and you will have to remind me!!
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Date: 4/6/2015 3:23:00 PM
We do tend to see the world in black & white until someone sheds light on all it's colors... You've done a marvelous job with this theme. Very creative work, Rob! Congrats on your win!
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Date: 4/3/2015 5:15:00 PM
This is awesome work!! No wonder it is in the winners’ list..Sara
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Date: 4/2/2015 4:09:00 AM
How true the words and a superb write rob! great work and awesome win, big congrats!
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Date: 4/1/2015 6:02:00 PM
Rob, congratulations on your fine win with this beautifully written poem, 7
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Date: 4/1/2015 9:37:00 AM
Congratulations on your nice win, Rob. I really like your unique take on the theme, and enjoyed the read very much. Sandra
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Date: 3/31/2015 11:35:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful win. Blessings eve
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Date: 3/31/2015 3:13:00 AM
Hi Rob! Like your take on this theme. Congrats on your top win....paul
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Date: 3/30/2015 5:27:00 PM
Your entry is so unique and wonderfully written Rob. Big congrats on your win! 7
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Date: 3/30/2015 2:39:00 PM
You took this challenge, and made it unique with this story of the ages. Wonderful piece, Rob !! Congratulations !
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Date: 3/30/2015 2:22:00 PM
I love your take in the theme with the passion story - many congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/25/2015 8:41:00 AM
A very unique way to tell the passion story, bravo!
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Date: 3/17/2015 4:31:00 PM
Rob, this is wonderful, I admire anyone who can do iambic pentameter, that is a skill I do not have, best of luck in the contest and thanks for visiting O the pain and my cat was 19 years old, yes she lived a good long life . . . and I did for her what we cannot do for humans who are suffering . . .
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Date: 3/15/2015 8:10:00 AM
Rob I love this masterful spiritual write. It is a fav for me. Thank you so much for your Soup Mails. They helped me so much. All my love always my brother, Armand.
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Rob Carmack
Date: 3/15/2015 4:22:00 PM
Armand, welcome back and you are welcome. Thank you for the fav and comment.
Date: 3/15/2015 3:42:00 AM
Great write about Christ's sacrifice for us which was due to his great love. I read bits of your conversation with Gorgio on the blog, Rob. I'm going to soup mail you.
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Rob Carmack
Date: 3/15/2015 3:47:00 AM
Thanks for the comment and I will look out for the soup mail.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/15/2015 3:42:00 AM
I have a comment on this poem of yours...not about the conversation with Georgio...Just saying! ;)
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