Rob Carmack Poet Iambic Pentameter

Exposing the Soul

The fallen sons slipped off Creation’s lens.
To taste the sting from our own tree and fruit.
Their giants quarried till no place to stand.
Before these day’s deceiving shades of gray,
The prophet’s shutters opened wide to write.
Foretold of hate in focus driving nails.
Our Pilate’s wash in Silver Halide’s bowl.
For only one Son’s blood can fill the baths,
His saving grace developing the soul.
And now reflecting every color’s hue,
Presented flawless under Father’s sight.
This world to turn and from you it will take.
Endure this to the end and ride the light.

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Robert Lindley February 10, 2019 at 8:39 AM I see you are a true and deep composer my friend.This one being a true gem with a clear and important message. A fav.. and a very fine read this morn.. Rob Carmack February 10, 2019 at 11:02 AM Thank you Robert, I really like how this one turned out.

Keith Bickerstaffe January 16, 2016 at 2:51 PM '...endure this to the end and ride the light,' the culmination of an exquisite piece of poetry. Perfect iambic pentameter! Well done Rob!! Best wishes, Keith

Debbie Duncan November 10, 2015 at 11:33 PM nice !

Diane M Quinlan November 10, 2015 at 1:40 PM This write certainly is from the soul---a beautiful poet's soul! Being a lover of Mother Nature and concerned for our rights to continue living in a clean and unpolluted environment....I really am glad I read your words today. Just put out three poetry and art books on nature to do my part in bring- ing attention to our global environment need fora clean-up!

Funom Makama May 28, 2015 at 10:48 AM Great lines with majestic eloquence.. Your meandering of words still did not prevent your peice from giving out its message. This is an absolute 7!

Laura Breidenthal May 23, 2015 at 2:00 AM This is an amazing poem. wow... So many memorable and beautiful lines throughout. Truly intriguing.."Before these day’s deceiving shades of gray, The prophet’s shutters opened wide to write." Love those lines... excellent job! Always, Laura

Constance La France May 11, 2015 at 9:18 AM Rob this is a beautiful poem 7 and thanks for visiting my poem

Andrea Dietrich May 8, 2015 at 10:04 PM hey, how did I miss this one? I think I never perused this winners' list but it is nice to see you on it. your meter is pretty good , rob! A nice symbolic religious poem. congrats. Gosh, I am trying to remember the name of the poem you told me to check out. if you don't see another comment from me, it means I could not jog my memory looking down the list, and you will have to remind me!!

Kelly Deschler April 6, 2015 at 3:23 PM We do tend to see the world in black & white until someone sheds light on all it's colors... You've done a marvelous job with this theme. Very creative work, Rob! Congrats on your win!

Sara Kendrick April 3, 2015 at 5:15 PM This is awesome work!! No wonder it is in the winners’ list..Sara

Dr. Upma A. Sharma April 2, 2015 at 4:09 AM How true the words and a superb write rob! great work and awesome win, big congrats!

Constance La France April 1, 2015 at 6:02 PM Rob, congratulations on your fine win with this beautifully written poem, 7

Sandra Haight April 1, 2015 at 9:37 AM Congratulations on your nice win, Rob. I really like your unique take on the theme, and enjoyed the read very much. Sandra

Eve Roper March 31, 2015 at 11:35 AM Congratulations on your wonderful win. Blessings eve

Paul Callus March 31, 2015 at 3:13 AM Hi Rob! Like your take on this theme. Congrats on your top win....paul

Connie Marcum Wong March 30, 2015 at 5:27 PM Your entry is so unique and wonderfully written Rob. Big congrats on your win! 7

Carrie Richards March 30, 2015 at 2:39 PM You took this challenge, and made it unique with this story of the ages. Wonderful piece, Rob !! Congratulations !

Jan Allison March 30, 2015 at 2:22 PM I love your take in the theme with the passion story - many congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux March 25, 2015 at 8:41 AM A very unique way to tell the passion story, bravo!

Constance La France March 17, 2015 at 4:31 PM Rob, this is wonderful, I admire anyone who can do iambic pentameter, that is a skill I do not have, best of luck in the contest and thanks for visiting O the pain and my cat was 19 years old, yes she lived a good long life . . . and I did for her what we cannot do for humans who are suffering . . .

Maurice Yvonne March 15, 2015 at 8:10 AM Rob I love this masterful spiritual write. It is a fav for me. Thank you so much for your Soup Mails. They helped me so much. All my love always my brother, Armand. Rob Carmack March 15, 2015 at 4:22 PM Armand, welcome back and you are welcome. Thank you for the fav and comment.

Eileen Manassian March 15, 2015 at 3:42 AM Great write about Christ's sacrifice for us which was due to his great love. I read bits of your conversation with Gorgio on the blog, Rob. I'm going to soup mail you. Rob Carmack March 15, 2015 at 3:47 AM Thanks for the comment and I will look out for the soup mail. Eileen Manassian March 15, 2015 at 3:42 AM I have a comment on this poem of yours...not about the conversation with Georgio...Just saying! ;)