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Exodus

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The only fear of this stubborn lion heart is to beat - unheard, without the blessings of your sighs. In the absence of your affection, severe silence spins cobwebs upon mossy fences, you have built across your sky full of blackness and I ponder when my soul ascends with sunrise, why do you veil yourself until twilight reflects moonlight? Am I the personification of a tree, under which you no longer need shelter. A message in a bottle, no longer upon your mantelpiece. That love sonnet to which you found so much joy, but now torn from pages of your poetic anthology. When romance arrived at your doorstep, blooming like cherry blossoms, you pressed each petal in a book you called - love, but now it collects dust - unread, wilting like an unnourished bouquet, so here my hopes lay, like a 'pearls cradle' upon unwanted shores, preparing to be washed away with the tide. Footsteps in the sand remain - although nothing will keep us together. I know you are the most beautiful thing, I'll never get to call my own, so should I still whisper vows into the void, or allow upcoming waves to wane our bond? If only you would flow to me like tropical drops from waterfalls, eventually kissing frozen estuaries then I would place you in the cusp of my hands to refresh my lips, which crave your touch. It seems this year there was no spring, no daffodils, no sunshine - only rain, so downhearted robins did not sing, but I captured the last feather from your exodus. I know a premature summer will only bloom anaemic sunflowers but, I still sow their seeds - hoping you will appear. Simple Sunday Musing

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Date: 6/21/2025 9:12:00 PM
First poem of yours I've read since returning to Poetry Soup this week. It was a very engaging and emotional poem for me to read. You wrap each emotion you feel in a poetic bundle of meaningful words. your poem flows well with the lovely imagery you so often use. Thanks for sharing your gift of poetry with us. A poet friend in Texas, now known as Texas Cowboy / just call me Tex
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Date: 6/12/2025 1:50:00 PM
Just now, right here, I listened to a poem for the 1st time. Not a Soup Media virgin any longer. Your voice is softer than I'd 'imagined', probably to match poem's mood and it does. This is laced with the pain of rejection & abandonment. I've never been left but I've lived w/ the ache of unrequited love - this took me to that 30+-yr old pain - it gathered like cold rain chilling and soaking me. Is this for audio contest? The longing, pain is palatable ... CayCay
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Date: 6/11/2025 2:07:00 PM
Silent One, your romantic plea is graced with beauty in its deeply heartfelt emotion as well as in your usual, magically spun words! !I hope you've been well my friend !!
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Date: 6/8/2025 8:52:00 AM
My utmost hope for you is that they, or she will re-appear - give time to the seasons, and you will one day unravel the reasons. One wonderful day I wish for that romance to re-appear on your doorstep, 'blooming like cherry blossoms.' Blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 6/7/2025 9:38:00 AM
Dear Silent, I am enraptured by the melancholic soul-baring of this love lost poem. I was especially moved by "I would place you in the cusp of my hands/to refresh my lips" and " I captured the last feather from your exodus". Your striking yet tender imagery and metaphors fills the poetic page with poignant longing as she slipped from your fingertips and beautifully expresses your yearn for her return. Breathtaking, my inspiring poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 6/7/2025 7:43:00 AM
Hi Silent One, I really enjoyed your engaging writing style. Just come by to see you.
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Date: 6/4/2025 11:07:00 AM
This is such a heartfelt poem and youv used such heartfelt metaphors to depict loss and longing in the most exquisite and soul stirring manner! I love the flow and the way youv expressed throughout here, from the start to the ending it flowing with nothing but sincere and touching lines, when in grief and in pain, when accepting fate of life and design of destiny so many would tend to resonate with lines such as “It seems this year there was no spring, no daffodils, no sunshine - only rain” how moving and only few can express like you do using elements of all that is around, turning them into poetry, leaving so many of your readers in awe of what you call simple musing! Its always a pleasure reading your poems cus they arent just words, theres soul in them, human, and real , that they just not only sound eloquent but are impactful! Sending you light always.
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Date: 6/2/2025 6:02:00 PM
Awaiting an elusive bloom, Very nicely penned Silent
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Date: 6/2/2025 7:57:00 AM
oh my word...this is mystifyingly languid with sketches from your inner experiences-- the bittersweet underpinnings of a heart that needs some space of vulnerability, of honesty...you tear me up, S...beautifully sublime ' I still sow their seeds - hoping you will appear.
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Date: 6/1/2025 10:56:00 PM
Dear S1,if heartbreak were a sport, you’d be taking home the gold with this one. The imagery is stunning—pressed petals, cobwebbed fences, and that feather from the exodus? You’ve got a way of making sorrow feel cinematic. Still holding out hope for those sunflowers. A fave for me...Hugs
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Date: 6/1/2025 7:27:00 PM
Dear S O, this poem is breathtakingly beautiful and heart-wrenching. Your words are like a symphony of emotions, capturing the longing and yearning that comes with loving someone from afar. The way you've woven together the themes of love, loss, and longing is truly masterful. A truly moving write. Best, Anne
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Date: 6/1/2025 4:29:00 PM
'When romance arrived at your doorstep, blooming like cherry blossoms...' I love that line and so many others, S.O. You've written an amazing, nostalgic tale of lost love. :)
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Date: 6/1/2025 2:04:00 PM
Is her name Bertha? Careful, she's a mean ol' drama scream queen. Seriously though, there is a yearning, a missing, an undeniable wishing for renewed and restored relations. Your poem aches with loneliness and desire... for what he'll never have again. PS. I heard she made off to Bermuda with an accountant. Go figure
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Tom Woody
Date: 6/2/2025 9:35:00 AM
Just one of those funny, nerdy names. Like Norman. Hey, remember the song: Bertha Butt Boogie? Classic
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Silent One
Date: 6/2/2025 9:06:00 AM
Oh...but why Bertha lol....
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Tom Woody
Date: 6/2/2025 6:22:00 AM
My attempt at humor. Forgive me. Loved your poem
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Silent One
Date: 6/2/2025 2:11:00 AM
Who is Bertha? I don't understand the reference...
Date: 6/1/2025 12:11:00 PM
This is no simple musing. For me it's incredible. What I like about your writing this way is that your imagery is beautiful, focused and understandable. That's my favorite type of free verse. And also when it's not too long!
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Tom Woody
Date: 6/1/2025 1:59:00 PM
He always says that lol
Date: 6/1/2025 12:06:00 PM
Lost love, strangely, is always entertainment. Brilliant imagery and profound thoughts on what could have been. I wish I could write simple musing like yours.
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Date: 6/1/2025 11:45:00 AM
This is so sensitive of a write, Silent. " kissing frozen estuaries then I would place you in the cusp of my hands to refresh my lips" love that
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Date: 6/1/2025 11:16:00 AM
You just made my Sunday beautiful because I found this lovely write from you. Your words dance across the page as they tell a magical story. Have a blessed day and week to come writing away........
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Date: 6/1/2025 10:52:00 AM
Dear S.O. Your poem displays emotions that stem from one-sided love, in which affection is not reciprocated. Your amazing poem shows a profound longing for the beloved by remembering past experiences and emotions. It also explores the ephemeral essence of life, love, and connections. The heart is referred to as a "stubborn lion heart," which represents courage, strength, and vulnerability. These photos create feelings of solitude, gloom, and emotional boundaries. You wonder if they have become outdated, like a tree behind which the beloved no longer seeks refuge. This metaphor reflects your abandoned hopes and feelings, which are left to drift away. "Pearls cradle" represents abandoned hopes, like a delicate, unloved gift.
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Date: 6/1/2025 5:10:00 AM
I love that second verse! This bittersweet romantic poem is at the top of my all time faves that you have written! It is easy to understand and though it is sad, there is a peaceful beauty in your musing. God bless you, Silent! Fave!!!
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