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Evening Gown of Yesterday

After days of fog Moths eat away the slip of winter Pieces of the New Year Drift as ash into spring Eyes waiting abhorrently While midnight clasps the last remnants Tomorrow becomes the butler Escorting the sun Rays peel open the solstice Tattered wings flutter towards The lamppost of February Sealed in pocket mirrors…

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P Sheart

Date: 10/4/2009 10:52:00 AM

A amazing poem. Congrats!! Love Light Truth Patty

Raul Moreno

Date: 10/2/2009 10:31:00 PM

Jason, congratulations on making the first round of the contest...Raul

Date: 9/26/2009 9:34:00 AM

Jason, I just wanted to drop by and add--Congratulations on having two poems make it through the first round in the contest. Good luck in the finals! Karen

James Fraser

Date: 9/5/2009 7:53:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week>>James

Adeleke Adeite

Date: 9/2/2009 12:57:00 PM

This is a well deserved feature … what a creative, wonderful poem, I love every bit of it. You are such a great poet. Please keep writing and congrats on your poem being featured this week. Hope to read more of your wonderful pieces. You are great ! Adeleke

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 9/1/2009 4:58:00 AM

Congratulations, Jason, on having your well-written poem featured today. Keep writing. Lovingly, Dane

Raul Moreno

Date: 9/1/2009 2:09:00 AM

Jason, congratulations on your feature this week...Raul

Date: 8/31/2009 5:24:00 PM

Nice use of imagery and personification for a creative view. Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. I wish you continued success with your writing. Karen

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/31/2009 4:19:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Jason. Hope to see many more of yours featured. Love, Carol

Charlene Bird

Date: 4/22/2009 8:40:00 PM

Sheer excellence, with great imagery!

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 3/11/2009 12:52:00 PM

This is brilliant. too many great lines to quote, Jason, awesome. awesome!!! Love, Kristin

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/10/2009 3:19:00 PM

Just wonderful & a perfect contest entry for 5 senses/ 5 elements..You have used Water (fog) Fire (moth, ash) Taste (eats away) Sight (Eyes) Touch (peel open). wonderful verse. Light & Love

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/3/2009 10:33:00 AM

Jason, please send the "Moths (that) eat away the slip of winter" my way. Will you be our "butler" and "escort the sun"? Love the way you describe the shedding of the evening gown to reveal the coming of spring. Best wishes, Carolyn

Denis Joe

Date: 3/1/2009 5:23:00 AM

Excellent imagery here. the metaphors and similes are inventive and are used sparingly, having made their presence felt. The pace of this poem is great. It reads rather like one views an impressionist painting and has a strong feeling of Baudilaire in the way that imagery and economy are used. I love that the poem has a dreamy qualkity to it without being flowery or pseudo-romantic.

Christopher Higgins

Date: 2/27/2009 10:16:00 AM

This title is amazing my friend.. I love this piece..tomorrow becomes the butler..escorting the sun..wicked..pure fire like we Jamaicans say..FIRE!!