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speakeasy | White photography, Walking in the rain, Black and white

Though hued October canopies the earth
I picture you in shadows without mirth
A forlorn gaze nestling on the threadbare wind
While my eyes reflect time which can’t appease
This burst of anguish on one ghastly day.
    Beyond pathways, our fervor's demise ends
    When lucent nights once imbued harmony:                                                                  
    Yet  I roam with you before morn unfolds    
                                                          
 Leaving me nameless in kohl of despair.
                                                                  





For Brian Strand: Completely Your Choice (4) Contest
     9/8/2020

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/8/2020 7:28:00 PM

You paint this words like a film noir.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/7/2020 3:26:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. A wonderful write and picture. I can feel the rain drops. Have a wonderful day..................

Eve Roper

Date: 9/6/2020 8:20:00 PM

threadbare wind, love the line. congratulations on your win.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 9/6/2020 5:20:00 PM

Congratulations on your top win. It was nice to come back and find you still writing and winning. Love, Joyce

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 9/6/2020 5:19:00 PM

a forlorn gaze nestling on the threadbare wind...leaving me nameless in umbra of teas...such beauty in those words. Congrats on the top win Nette.

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 9/6/2020 4:52:00 PM

Beautiful Nette. Congrats on the win! Linda

Brenda Chiri

Date: 9/6/2020 4:19:00 PM

Nette congrats on you top win!:)

Bryan Norton

Date: 9/6/2020 4:03:00 PM

Lovely write. Congratulations on your win. Best wishes, Bryan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/6/2020 3:01:00 PM

so amazing when you write like this, Nette. which is pretty much ALWAYS. Big congrats on a top win,

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/6/2020 2:50:00 PM

Captivating emotions you painted here, Nette--fading into umbra of tears. The ending says it all....your silhouette dips...my breath fails to rise...