Erasing Every Trace - Corrected Repost

This is what should have posted last night.  Thank you for your understanding

Erasing every trace 

“Star light, star bright,
The first star I see tonight;
I wish I may, I wish I might,
Have the wish I wish tonight”

The winter wind is cold
as I stand in the yard
staring up at a 
the first star of the evening, 
one we shared often

Gazing upon its light, wishing,
certain it shimmers for some,
those holding hands and dreaming
of a future as bright
as these icicle glistened heavens 

Now though dimming, fading 
with the universe
where possibilities once thrived
as if life were real
and not some fabled archer
 
When then the ground crumbles, 
giving way beneath my feet,
frozen earth opens up,
swallowing me 
into a deep abyss

And as the surface falls, 
caving in, creating
a darkness like
I have never known before
I whisper, “thank you”

For soon spring will come,
and new grass will grow
over the disturbed land,
erasing every trace,
that I ever was

And I will know
beyond a shadow’s doubt
That my wish upon that first star tonight
was granted…

Good night Soupers

Note: The opening stanza is from the 19th-century English poem by Jane Taylor, "The Star".

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Date: 1/27/2017 1:22:00 AM
The whole thing made me smile :) I once accidentally posted a poem of Poe as my own. I only wanted to save it as a draft on my blog, to work out a poem using that quote, but accidentally hit 'publish'. So I fully understand how you feel.
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Chris Green
Date: 1/27/2017 8:23:00 AM
Thanks so much Darren. That is a very nice thing to say to me. I truly enjoy making people happy if I can.
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Darren White
Date: 1/27/2017 1:26:00 AM
That aside, it is a beautiful poem, Chris. I so often write about an abyss, and it also often ends dark. I know you like happier endings, we differ I guess. But I also come here to your poems so often when I am low, to feel better again :) And somehow I always do.
Date: 1/26/2017 9:35:00 PM
...The death of a winter of torment fed by the promise of a summer. Beautifully written Chris.
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Chris Green
Date: 1/27/2017 8:22:00 AM
Thanks so much John. I am glad you liked this one.
Date: 1/26/2017 2:04:00 PM
This is so very sad..It breaks my heart..There will never be a Spring without the beloved....Am touched.
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 1/26/2017 2:33:00 PM
Tomorrow : )
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Chris Green
Date: 1/26/2017 2:11:00 PM
Thank you Charmaine for always showing me such kindness. Goodnight, yes, tomorrow. :)
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 1/26/2017 2:05:00 PM
Goodnight..Read you tomorrow?
Date: 1/26/2017 12:44:00 PM
Lovely, Chris!
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Chris Green
Date: 1/26/2017 12:53:00 PM
Thank you so much Kim.
Date: 1/26/2017 12:39:00 PM
Wow! This is sooo sad in it's imagery! So the wish was to die because of lost love, but at least with death life for others starts anew? Was that right?
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Chris Green
Date: 1/26/2017 12:53:00 PM
That is pretty much it John. Thanks so much for reading this and accepting my apology for my gaff last night.
Date: 1/26/2017 12:10:00 PM
- A pleasure to read, beautifully Chris :) - The seventh verse gives hope for warmer season ... with new flowers and sunshine in your eyes - Good night ... sweet dreams :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Chris Green
Date: 1/26/2017 12:52:00 PM
Thank you so much Anne-Lise.
Date: 1/26/2017 11:52:00 AM
gratitude overflows through this splendid write, chris.... the stars affirm your dreams.. huggs
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Chris Green
Date: 1/26/2017 12:51:00 PM
Thank you so very much Nette.
Date: 1/26/2017 11:51:00 AM
Hi Chris, You've penned a well written piece. I found it to be sad. I could sense a someone deeply in love that longs to be reunioned with their lover. Is that the wish? I could be way off but that's my take on this exceptional write. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis
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Chris Green
Date: 1/26/2017 12:51:00 PM
My sweet friend, you are right on, it is a sad one. I truly appreciate you Alexis.
Date: 1/26/2017 11:46:00 AM
Enchanting Chris...I had read the other last night and was wondering
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Chris Green
Date: 1/26/2017 12:51:00 PM
Thanks Tim, I am happy I got to clear that up.
Date: 1/26/2017 11:41:00 AM
I love this Chris and the wishes upon stars :)
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Chris Green
Date: 1/26/2017 12:50:00 PM
Thanks again my friend.
Date: 1/26/2017 11:41:00 AM
You really make a difference with your poetry each day :)
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Chris Green
Date: 1/26/2017 12:50:00 PM
Thank you Heidi, that is such a nice thing to say.
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