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Moon speaks from her heart: I watch for you every morning with sad weary eyes after spending the night suspended in dark velvet skies. First glimpse of dawn excites me when I see you rise. We share a wink but I never let you hear my lonely cries. Wish that you could offer me some kind of a sign to make my heart gladden so it would no longer pine. If in the sky together, how brightly we would shine, but we are Sun and Moon, destined never to entwine. When I am all alone my silver tears threaten to flow. I cannot risk them falling even when the tides are low. The stars whisper, "Oh, poor Moon, she loves him so." In my grief and sorrow, my moonbeams lose their glow. Sometimes it seems as if there is something you want to say. I see it in the glint of your golden eyes when you look my way. I'd love to hang around with you instead of always fading away, Would it place the world in danger if I stayed with you one day? We are two celestial bodies, but lovers we're not meant to be. Both shine brightly from the heavens for all the world to see. Couples fall in love when they spend the night looking up at me but we can't share a loving embrace. It's not part of our destiny. Sun yearns for the Moon: Your tender words of devotion give me the courage to bestow the same sentiments to you, dear Moon. I need to let you know I would give up my throne in the sky just to be your beau. Each day I wake and pass you by, my love continues to grow. I've always wanted to tell you how much I long to be with you. I never want to leave you lonely. You must know my love is true. But if we dare to fly away together, the Earth will be left askew. One night of passionate love with you will have to see us through. Moon's desire: To have one moment in your arms is an offer I could never decline. Stay with me tonight, Sun, and when the stars come out and align, we will gratefully share our long awaited desire in a love so divine. You may burn me with your fire, but on this night we will entwine. <<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> February 7th, 2016 Entwine Contest by: Broken Wings

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Date: 2/23/2016 8:52:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this very cleverly, well-written Monorhyme! An enjoyable read.
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Date: 2/23/2016 8:56:00 AM
Tarnation! The response timing on this site stinks...Sorry, Susan. Thanks for reading and your wonderful comments.
Date: 2/23/2016 8:43:00 AM
What a wonderful take on the theme, Lin. Great rhyme and beautiful content.
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Date: 2/23/2016 8:55:00 AM
Thank you, James. I appreciate your comments.
Date: 2/23/2016 6:38:00 AM
Congratulations on your prize winning write, Lin. Very original and "hot". (Pun intended) Peace my dear:)
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Date: 2/23/2016 7:00:00 AM
Thank you, Danny. Last night the moon was full and this morning the sun is shining. Something in the heavens worked out just right.
Date: 2/23/2016 3:50:00 AM
Started reading, the beauty of the lines compels me to hold, linger, savour and then go past..., beautiful in form, content and movement. Congratulations.
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Date: 2/23/2016 3:55:00 AM
Such lovely comments...Thank you very much, Probir.
Date: 2/23/2016 12:12:00 AM
a love eternal so finely written, lin... best congrats on your top award!..huggs
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Date: 2/23/2016 3:54:00 AM
Hiya, Nette, and thank you so much.
Date: 2/22/2016 11:00:00 PM
Hi Lin, Congrats on your win with this super-creative poem--way to go! Cheers, Brian
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Date: 2/23/2016 3:54:00 AM
Hi, Brian. I sure do appreciate your kind comments!
Date: 2/22/2016 10:00:00 PM
Congrats on great win with this superb verse Lin..
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Date: 2/23/2016 3:53:00 AM
Thanks so much, Upma.
Date: 2/22/2016 6:47:00 PM
Lin, congrats on your well deserved top placement!-luloo *smiles*
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Date: 2/23/2016 3:53:00 AM
Thanks, Luloo. Much appreciated!
Date: 2/22/2016 5:59:00 PM
Wow! No wonder you are number two Lin.
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Date: 2/23/2016 3:52:00 AM
Thank you very much, Jean.
Date: 2/7/2016 5:14:00 PM
Oh my Lin!!! This is beautifully perfect!!! Good luck in the contest :) *Smiles* -luloo
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Date: 2/7/2016 5:25:00 PM
Thanks, Luloo. your comments are always so kind. ;)
Date: 2/7/2016 4:28:00 PM
you must be the first WOMAN to land on the sun, or let me say interview it, wow! the sun told me this some years ago, am glad you made a move on it lol, excellent take on the theme Lin, you've got great thoughts, best of luck in the contest...the moon and the sun, i've always suspected they are in love!
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Date: 2/7/2016 4:32:00 PM
It's a love based on mutual respect, Sage. And if you'll read it again you'll see that he spent the night with her...He came to her. lol Thanks for liking this one so much.
Date: 2/7/2016 7:37:00 AM
Elegantly stated as well as beautiful. Peace and many blessings.
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Date: 2/7/2016 7:48:00 AM
I thank you very much, Steven.

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