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Emptyness

A place still lies
Lonely and untouched
Every night it cries
Seeking for its walls to be patched

A place still lies
But dead in its self
With broken memories
And an empty shelf

I struggle to find myself
In the midst of all the strife
But above me a cloud of darkness
So thick, full of sadness

The place will still lie
But not utter a cry
It shall continue to die
Because no one asked why

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 2/16/2016 2:30:00 PM
awesome poem. LINDA
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Date: 9/20/2009 7:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your lovely poetry being featured this week>>James
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Date: 9/17/2009 7:33:00 PM
Sounds like the description of the place in NY where the twin towers stood or perhaps, it is your heart ... smile ... beautiful writing here, Victor and a well-deserved selection to be a feature this week on PoetrySoup. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/17/2009 9:50:00 AM
Congratulations friend, on having your poem featured this week. Please keep writing. Great you my African bro!Ghana is fast becoming the Giant of Africa, I would love you to write a poem on that great country... I mourn for my country Nigeria but I know it will be well.... Adeleke
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Date: 9/16/2009 4:33:00 AM
Congratulations, Victor, on having your well-written poem featured this week. It behooves the reader to ask, "Why?" Keep those words flowing. Big Smile, Dane Ann
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Date: 9/15/2009 1:54:00 AM
Victor, congrats on having your work featured...Raul
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Date: 9/14/2009 3:42:00 PM
congrats on being a featured artist!!
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Date: 9/14/2009 3:57:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Victor. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/3/2009 11:40:00 AM
Victor, my belated congrats in making the semi finals...Raul
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Date: 4/22/2009 9:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your "first round survivor" write ... smile ... and good luck in the contest, Victor!
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Date: 4/20/2009 7:01:00 AM
Great poem. One thing: pls replace sadness with emptyness in your stanza because of two reasons: first- the title needs to dwell a line, second- a cloud of dakness explains the fact fo sadness itself. Beautiful lyric.
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Date: 4/18/2009 5:37:00 PM
Congrats on making it to thru to the 1st round. Sad poem...very deep... keep doing what you're doing. :-)
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Date: 4/9/2009 1:23:00 PM
Congratulations on your poetry making it in the semi finals. Wishing you the best of luck in the finals Victor. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/5/2009 10:09:00 AM
Victor - Congratulations on your poetry making it through the first round, best of luck in the finals – God Bless, MJ
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Date: 4/4/2009 8:23:00 PM
this is awesome. concise yet thought provoking... I read passion in every line. please tell me what the place is... you are great . hope to read more of your work.congrat on a well deseverd first round survival. wishing you all the best in the finals. love Leke
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Date: 8/29/2008 3:34:00 PM
A poem that expresses what most passed through...Sometimes loneliness strikes so severely, yet we continue to search and find the right place....Hoping you'd have more nice days...Sara...
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Date: 8/29/2008 9:39:00 AM
Aw, this is so sad and lonely. It is a feeling many of us have been through. Your last line really got to me. Very well expressed. Wishing you happier days. Love, Shar
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