Empty Room On a Summer's Day

Empty Room On A Summer's Day


     An empty room where forgotten shadows lay

     Under white edged clouds in a bright cobalt sky.

     Where Summer’s warm palette paints the sultry day,

     Beyond wood framed windows, swooping Swallows fly,

     As scented drafts drift under the closed oak door

     Lifting long rested dust from the sun warmed floor.

     There rays of silver light in the silence gleam,

     Sunlit shafts shine in bright iridescent beams.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Barden Avatar
July 31, 2018 at 6:11 PM
Glorious imagery that gives one a sense of peace and bright-edged melancholy ... I thoroughly enjoyed this, Barry - very nicely done! (Going into my favs) I have never written a Rispetto, but I must try, as I love the rhythm and pace ... I "put off" writing a Sonnet for a long time, then fell in love with them when I finally DID ... I have a feeling similar will happen here. Thank you for the wonderful introduction, (hopefully a slot-or-two left). Blessings, my friend! :-) ~ The Bard
Stebbings Avatar
August 1, 2018 at 2:39 PM
Thank you Gregory. I am pleased you picked up on the mood of the poem. The eleven syllable line has a quality not in the usual even syllabled scheme. // Barry
Gomm Avatar
July 25, 2018 at 6:59 AM
Very romantic, and flows well. Thankyou very much. Jayne. Gomm.
Stebbings Avatar
July 25, 2018 at 3:43 PM
Thank you very much, Jayne. // Barry
Roper Avatar
July 15, 2018 at 9:20 PM
Nicely done, Barry, love the imagery and the flow.. This is a great example of what your looking for... Hugs Eve
Stebbings Avatar
July 16, 2018 at 7:35 AM
Thank you very much, Eve. // Barry
Dutta Avatar
July 9, 2018 at 10:39 AM
So nicely composed. Let me have a try. Best wishes.
Stebbings Avatar
July 9, 2018 at 3:14 PM
Thank you, Anisha., I will interested to read your entry. // Barry.
Allison Avatar
July 8, 2018 at 11:31 AM
what a lovely example to inspire us Barry:-) hugs Jan xx
Stebbings Avatar
July 8, 2018 at 3:06 PM
Thank you, Jan. I look forward to reading your entry. // Barry
Shines Avatar
July 7, 2018 at 2:18 AM
Loved reading your poem.have a great day!
Stebbings Avatar
July 7, 2018 at 4:57 AM
Thank you very much, Kenisha, pleased you enjoyed it. // Barry
Dietrich Avatar
July 3, 2018 at 1:18 PM
That is a gorgeous example for your contest, Barry. I will go by this rhyme scheme!
Stebbings Avatar
July 3, 2018 at 4:40 PM
Than you Andrea, I look forward to reading your entry. // Barry
Ashley Avatar
January 13, 2018 at 10:15 PM
Enthralling and elegant poetry Barry. A beautiful write with charming imagery and and lovely accents of alliteration. I love the Rispetto form and your poem is showcased brilliantly within it. Warmest wishes ~Susan
Stebbings Avatar
July 3, 2018 at 4:40 PM
A very belated Thank You for you kind comment, Susan. Sorry it took me so long to reply. // Barry
Kendrick Avatar
January 6, 2018 at 4:05 PM
Enjoyed reading this creative and descriptive work..I am glad that I chose it as one of the ones that I could read today..Thanks for dropping by my page..Sara
Stebbings Avatar
January 7, 2018 at 8:06 AM
Thank you very much, Sara, pleased you enjoyed it. // Barry
Dietrich Avatar
January 4, 2018 at 1:01 AM
this is beautiful writing, Barry. Rispetto is an elegant form and I injoyed how you did yours here. lots of great alliteration.
Stebbings Avatar
January 5, 2018 at 7:15 AM
Thank you very much, Andrea, pleased you enjoyed it. I like this form, I like using the shift in tone from the first half to the second half of the poem. // Barry.
Evans Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 8:29 PM
"An empty room where forgotten shadows lay." Now that how you start a poem. Nice.
Stebbings Avatar
January 3, 2018 at 12:38 PM
Thank you for your appreciation, Richard.
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