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Empty Room On a Summer's Day

Empty Room On A Summer's Day An empty room where forgotten shadows lay Under white edged clouds in a bright cobalt sky. Where Summer’s warm palette paints the sultry day, Beyond wood framed windows, swooping Swallows fly, As scented drafts drift under the closed oak door Lifting long rested dust from the sun warmed floor. There rays of silver light in the silence gleam, Sunlit shafts shine in bright iridescent beams.

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Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 7/31/2018 6:11:00 PM

Glorious imagery that gives one a sense of peace and bright-edged melancholy ... I thoroughly enjoyed this, Barry - very nicely done! (Going into my favs) I have never written a Rispetto, but I must try, as I love the rhythm and pace ... I "put off" writing a Sonnet for a long time, then fell in love with them when I finally DID ... I have a feeling similar will happen here. Thank you for the wonderful introduction, (hopefully a slot-or-two left). Blessings, my friend! :-) ~ The Bard

Barry Stebbings
Date: 8/1/2018 2:39:00 PM

Thank you Gregory. I am pleased you picked up on the mood of the poem. The eleven syllable line has a quality not in the usual even syllabled scheme. // Barry

Jane Gomm

Date: 7/25/2018 6:59:00 AM

Very romantic, and flows well. Thankyou very much. Jayne. Gomm.

Barry Stebbings
Date: 7/25/2018 3:43:00 PM

Thank you very much, Jayne. // Barry

Eve Roper

Date: 7/15/2018 9:20:00 PM

Nicely done, Barry, love the imagery and the flow.. This is a great example of what your looking for... Hugs Eve

Barry Stebbings
Date: 7/16/2018 7:35:00 AM

Thank you very much, Eve. // Barry

Anisha Dutta

Date: 7/9/2018 10:39:00 AM

So nicely composed. Let me have a try. Best wishes.

Barry Stebbings
Date: 7/9/2018 3:14:00 PM

Thank you, Anisha., I will interested to read your entry. // Barry.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/8/2018 11:31:00 AM

what a lovely example to inspire us Barry:-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings
Date: 7/8/2018 3:06:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. I look forward to reading your entry. // Barry

Kenisha Shines

Date: 7/7/2018 2:18:00 AM

Loved reading your poem.have a great day!

Barry Stebbings
Date: 7/7/2018 4:57:00 AM

Thank you very much, Kenisha, pleased you enjoyed it. // Barry

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/3/2018 1:18:00 PM

That is a gorgeous example for your contest, Barry. I will go by this rhyme scheme!

Barry Stebbings
Date: 7/3/2018 4:40:00 PM

Than you Andrea, I look forward to reading your entry. // Barry

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/13/2018 10:15:00 PM

Enthralling and elegant poetry Barry. A beautiful write with charming imagery and and lovely accents of alliteration. I love the Rispetto form and your poem is showcased brilliantly within it. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Barry Stebbings
Date: 7/3/2018 4:40:00 PM

A very belated Thank You for you kind comment, Susan. Sorry it took me so long to reply. // Barry

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/6/2018 4:05:00 PM

Enjoyed reading this creative and descriptive work..I am glad that I chose it as one of the ones that I could read today..Thanks for dropping by my page..Sara

Barry Stebbings
Date: 1/7/2018 8:06:00 AM

Thank you very much, Sara, pleased you enjoyed it. // Barry

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/4/2018 1:01:00 AM

this is beautiful writing, Barry. Rispetto is an elegant form and I injoyed how you did yours here. lots of great alliteration.

Barry Stebbings
Date: 1/5/2018 7:15:00 AM

Thank you very much, Andrea, pleased you enjoyed it. I like this form, I like using the shift in tone from the first half to the second half of the poem. // Barry.

Ricky Muse

Date: 1/2/2018 8:29:00 PM

"An empty room where forgotten shadows lay." Now that how you start a poem. Nice.

Barry Stebbings
Date: 1/3/2018 12:38:00 PM

Thank you for your appreciation, Richard.