Empty Lungs

She alone shadows my outside heart in glass,
Unknowns in saws and hands, a lifetime's goodbye 
That her memory's stay will still on us crash,
Where the breath in both our wombs, this hollow light —
A channel of trees all grown up should, must last —
And the tongue in her leaves also with me cries,
The rattling of limbs through some window passed —
Shaking green on my lips, her oxygen mask.
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Date: 5/18/2025 1:14:00 PM
Paige, this is heartbreak rendered in breath and bark--achingly beautiful. “She alone shadows my outside heart in glass” and “her oxygen mask” form a stunning emotional arc, like memory and grief entwined with nature. The imagery is so raw, so rooted, and so human. This one truly lingers in the lungs.
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Date: 2/19/2025 11:04:00 AM
Paige, compelling and real, a genuine gem! I just binged on "Penelope" there was an episode dedicated to tree hugger in the wilderness. faving
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Date: 2/18/2025 8:55:00 PM
"I was an only child, and mother was always right with me all my life." -Elvis Presley
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Date: 2/18/2025 9:03:00 PM
Interesting choice. :)
Date: 2/15/2025 8:15:00 AM
Dear Paige, this captivating piece is beautifully expressed. Impassioned imagery like " the breath in both our wombs, this hollow light" and "the tongue in her leaves also with me cries" stirs the heart and soul to rich imaginative depths. Splendid poetry. Warmest wishes my sweet poet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 2/14/2025 12:14:00 AM
This is beautiful poetry!
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Date: 2/13/2025 4:46:00 PM
A profound poem of personification this is! Thanks for all your comments this week, Paige
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Date: 2/12/2025 6:03:00 PM
The rattling of limbs through some window passed — Shaking green on my lips, her oxygen mask...powerful, Paige!
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Date: 2/11/2025 11:35:00 PM
Dear paige, as always youv written a very profound and meaningful poem flowing with such brilliant metaphors! I felt the lines"A channel of trees all grown up should, must last — And the tongue in her leaves also with me cries," so well written! And delivered. Pleasure reading. Sending you light always
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Date: 2/11/2025 6:04:00 PM
I hate to see trees cut down. Your poem brings this anguish to light. May you have a week of silent saws.
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