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Empty As the Hourglass Shatters

I lie trying to read, but my heart maunders	
as the rain taps at my red eyes window pane.	
The loneliness niggles as my mind ponders.	
My spirit empty as the hourglass shatters.		
God give me silence from the weight grip of pain.	
Bleakness devouring days lying in tatters;		
music of my soul evaporates like smoke.		
Unsought tears finally run somewhere and drain	
in between the illness of old age to choke.		
Where are the children I use to entertain?		


6/8/2018

Poetry Contest: Rhyme Time 4- 10 Lines'
Sponsored By:	Laura Loo

?Write a 10 line poem using rhyme scheme: A-B-A-C-B-C-D-B-D-B

?1.) Empty as the hourglass shatters
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Barden Avatar
June 29, 2018 at 9:46 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful win, Eve - blessings and best wishes for continued success, my friend! :-) <3
Gentry Avatar
June 29, 2018 at 6:05 PM
Congratulations on your win. I like how you did yours. Such a well-written poem and imagery that goes with the theme. Sad. :)
Scars Avatar
June 29, 2018 at 6:56 AM
tug at my heart strings sweet Eve, beautiful poem indeed from a beautiful lady...thank you for your entry and congratulations on your placement. Be blessed, -luloo :)
Ajmal Avatar
June 14, 2018 at 8:27 AM
It is a really sad poem that it has truly touch my heart especially the last line,where are the children I use to entertain, good luck in the contest, I m sure that it will do good,
Sharma Avatar
June 11, 2018 at 7:53 PM
Nice one
Warrior Avatar
June 11, 2018 at 11:31 AM
Beautifully crafted Eve...I smell a winner...love & light...^WW^
May Avatar
June 11, 2018 at 5:48 AM
A longing for the blue skies of youth amid the rain...Well written Eve
Sietesantos Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 8:02 PM
Awesome write, my friend, using the chosen theme and the intricate rhyming scheme! This was very challenging and you make it seem like it was so easy! Good luck in the contest. Best wishes and hugs. Pandita
Devonshire Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 7:59 PM
A sad poem that touches the reader's heart. A lot of older people live with loneliness and it's not easy to deal with it. The "children" will return when it's too late. I'm sure this poem will do well in Laura's contest, Eve. Sending winning wishes to you, Carolyn
Dietrich Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 6:33 PM
wow, I LOVE how you did the theme,Eve. I think this particular contest is inspiring such great poetry in those here. I particularly like this one. FAVE
Smith Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 11:51 AM
Terrific entry Eve, all my best...
Bateman Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 11:47 AM
Hello Eve, This is a most wonderful rhyme. Your ten verses here really pull at the heartstrings. The emotion and sadness of your verses pull the read directly into your theme. Very Well-Done!! Best Always, Gary
Lamoureux Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 9:16 AM
A sad reality for some parents. This brings a tear.
Manassian Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 1:55 AM
What an emotive write, dear. Parents give so much and deserve love in return. That ending tugs at the heart. Thank you for your visit to my work.
Marcum Wong Avatar
June 9, 2018 at 9:01 PM
I see this happen so often, but in my case I have no worries. My daughter and I help each other. It is a blessing. Your poignant poem speaks for itself beautifully Eve! A wonderful entry that should do well! : )
Ashley Avatar
June 9, 2018 at 7:49 PM
Such woeful emotions flow with profound sadness from your poetic pen, Eve. A potent emotional write with a stunning and poignant last line. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan
Gupta Avatar
June 9, 2018 at 8:16 AM
Powerful words very poetically used ... where are gone the children ... very true ... lovely ... all the best, Eve ...
La France Avatar
June 9, 2018 at 8:14 AM
Eve, this is very deep and dark and wonderfully penned, so much said in 10 lines, best of luck in the contest ~
Cunningham Avatar
June 9, 2018 at 4:57 AM
Time , it passes so quickly and you look around and wonder where it went.
Michael Avatar
June 9, 2018 at 4:36 AM
Wow...Your poem says a lot...I like it...All the best Eve
Vaso Avatar
June 9, 2018 at 12:16 AM
Eve, what can I say, your poetry shines, every poem I read I find better than the last! hugs!
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