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I lie trying to read, but my heart maunders as the rain taps at my red eyes window pane. The loneliness niggles as my mind ponders. My spirit empty as the hourglass shatters. God give me silence from the weight grip of pain. Bleakness devouring days lying in tatters; music of my soul evaporates like smoke. Unsought tears finally run somewhere and drain in between the illness of old age to choke. Where are the children I use to entertain? 6/8/2018 Poetry Contest: Rhyme Time 4- 10 Lines' Sponsored By: Laura Loo ?Write a 10 line poem using rhyme scheme: A-B-A-C-B-C-D-B-D-B ?1.) Empty as the hourglass shatters

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Date: 6/29/2018 9:46:00 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful win, Eve - blessings and best wishes for continued success, my friend! :-) <3
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Date: 6/29/2018 6:05:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. I like how you did yours. Such a well-written poem and imagery that goes with the theme. Sad. :)
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Date: 6/29/2018 6:56:00 AM
tug at my heart strings sweet Eve, beautiful poem indeed from a beautiful lady...thank you for your entry and congratulations on your placement. Be blessed, -luloo :)
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Date: 6/14/2018 8:27:00 AM
It is a really sad poem that it has truly touch my heart especially the last line,where are the children I use to entertain, good luck in the contest, I m sure that it will do good,
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Date: 6/11/2018 7:53:00 PM
Nice one
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Date: 6/11/2018 11:31:00 AM
Beautifully crafted Eve...I smell a winner...love & light...^WW^
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Date: 6/11/2018 5:48:00 AM
A longing for the blue skies of youth amid the rain...Well written Eve
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Date: 6/10/2018 8:02:00 PM
Awesome write, my friend, using the chosen theme and the intricate rhyming scheme! This was very challenging and you make it seem like it was so easy! Good luck in the contest. Best wishes and hugs. Pandita
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Date: 6/10/2018 7:59:00 PM
A sad poem that touches the reader's heart. A lot of older people live with loneliness and it's not easy to deal with it. The "children" will return when it's too late. I'm sure this poem will do well in Laura's contest, Eve. Sending winning wishes to you, Carolyn
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Date: 6/10/2018 6:33:00 PM
wow, I LOVE how you did the theme,Eve. I think this particular contest is inspiring such great poetry in those here. I particularly like this one. FAVE
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Date: 6/10/2018 11:51:00 AM
Terrific entry Eve, all my best...
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Date: 6/10/2018 11:47:00 AM
Hello Eve, This is a most wonderful rhyme. Your ten verses here really pull at the heartstrings. The emotion and sadness of your verses pull the read directly into your theme. Very Well-Done!! Best Always, Gary
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Date: 6/10/2018 9:16:00 AM
A sad reality for some parents. This brings a tear.
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Date: 6/10/2018 1:55:00 AM
What an emotive write, dear. Parents give so much and deserve love in return. That ending tugs at the heart. Thank you for your visit to my work.
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Date: 6/9/2018 9:01:00 PM
I see this happen so often, but in my case I have no worries. My daughter and I help each other. It is a blessing. Your poignant poem speaks for itself beautifully Eve! A wonderful entry that should do well! : )
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Date: 6/9/2018 7:49:00 PM
Such woeful emotions flow with profound sadness from your poetic pen, Eve. A potent emotional write with a stunning and poignant last line. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan
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Date: 6/9/2018 8:16:00 AM
Powerful words very poetically used ... where are gone the children ... very true ... lovely ... all the best, Eve ...
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Date: 6/9/2018 8:14:00 AM
Eve, this is very deep and dark and wonderfully penned, so much said in 10 lines, best of luck in the contest ~
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Date: 6/9/2018 4:57:00 AM
Time , it passes so quickly and you look around and wonder where it went.
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Date: 6/9/2018 4:36:00 AM
Wow...Your poem says a lot...I like it...All the best Eve
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Date: 6/9/2018 12:16:00 AM
Eve, what can I say, your poetry shines, every poem I read I find better than the last! hugs!
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