Dying To Meet Women

There once was a man on the beach
Hoping for women to meet
      To try to look thin
      He held his breath in
And passed out dead at their feet.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Spence Sr Avatar
May 30, 2010 at 12:58 PM
Dude, this is getting down with the beat. He should have known better. Women love pot belly guys. Great job! Joseph
Cwiak Avatar
May 27, 2010 at 10:48 AM
Congrats on the win! Dan C
Freeman Avatar
May 26, 2010 at 5:12 PM
Congratulations Joe, on your 3ard place. Agape, Moses
Sweetheart Avatar
May 26, 2010 at 12:36 PM
Congrats Joe on your big win in the Bulge contest .. this was awesome and enjoy your victory my friend... with luv from the "Sweetheart"
Johnson Avatar
May 26, 2010 at 10:07 AM
Yes, a winner. I told you so. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
Devonshire Avatar
May 26, 2010 at 9:32 AM
Had to laugh at the image of this happening, Joe. I think a lot of folks hold in their breath at the beach. Congratulations on placing third in the contest! Love, Carolyn
Peterson Avatar
May 24, 2010 at 9:06 AM
love this write nice job
Johnson Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 8:37 PM
lVery funny in a morbid sort of way. I think this is the winner of all that I have seen so far. Joyce
Chachere Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 8:25 PM
lol.did he lose his breath? -Always&Forever Lynette
Gorelick Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 12:21 PM
Oh, this has to win..I will be laughing about thiss all day.BG
Palli Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 11:57 AM
I giggled! Loved it but sorry for the old chap.
Dietrich Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 11:42 AM
GOOD ONE!!!! Me really likes! Luv, andrea
Roberts Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 10:56 AM
that was adorable, loved it , good luck in the contest
Green Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 10:46 AM
Like this one, Joe! Great job!
Stella Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 10:01 AM
LOL reminds me of laurel and hardy loved the imagery in this one should do well for contest also thanks for your kind comment keep up the great writing
Freeman Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 9:41 AM
An't this a grand one, I can't believe a man would do that! Agape, Moses
Richards Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 9:38 AM
Men aren't the only ones, who try sucking it in at the beach!!!! A funny limerick, Joe.... (now...you'd better go take a breath..you are turning blue!!!)
Cwiak Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 9:04 AM
Ah yes, the old muscleman at the beach routine...lol. Good luck in the contest. Dan C. ps. There are more than a few of us Cub fans left, otherwise they wouldn't do 2.5 million in fans every year!
Diva Avatar
May 22, 2010 at 8:10 AM
So funny Mr. Flach and I appreciate you liking my entry.. so far I have not won anything on this site so I hope it gets better. Satin Doll Diva
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