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Dying for A Drink

white wind whips whistles
blue blowing bush big branches
denim drunk driver dead

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Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/15/2024 1:41:00 AM

Wonderful alliteration.

Karen Jones
Date: 1/15/2024 5:20:00 AM

Thanks for reading Victor!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/14/2024 5:58:00 AM

I have read your work and enjoyed reading it. Keep on writing, using your creative muse. Sad that today so many ends up dead behind a car steering wheel because they had been drinking or using drugs or both. Sara K

Karen Jones
Date: 1/14/2024 3:09:00 PM

I’m glad you enjoyed this. Yes often impaired drivers kill because they got behind the wheel. It is so unfortunate and tragic.

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/13/2024 7:44:00 AM

Dear Karen, wonderful alliteration highlights your Senryu and delivers your sobering last line with poetic finesse and emotional impact. Great title too. Your poem’s message is a sad one but one that needs to be heard. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Karen Jones
Date: 1/13/2024 11:39:00 AM

Thanks for your kind comments Susan! Hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/11/2024 1:12:00 PM

great alliteration and a sad message at the end.

Karen Jones
Date: 1/11/2024 6:06:00 PM

I use to volunteer on the 24 hr national MADD hotline as well as in the courts as a court reporter. I heard so many stories that it still haunts me. I try to advocate and yes it is sad. Thanks for reading anyway.