D!VORCE

Drowning in deep bruised darkness I search for heartbeats lost within, Vapors that veiled the vermilion of sunsets, Orchestrating a funeral for moon-kissed vows, now deceased. Riddled with regrets and unspoken apologies, Creating confusion across the constellation, whilst I ponder, was- Every rose in our garden a scentless lie?

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Tonye George

Date: 1/18/2024 5:10:00 AM

"Was every rose in our garden a scentless lie?" I love it. Congratulations Ink dear, you did a great one.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/18/2024 4:51:00 AM

Great imagery that makes one feel. Love vermilion of sunsets, Every rose in our garden a scentless lie? (that doubles as senseless). Congratulations on your second place win, Ink Empress! Blessings!

Matt Caliri

Date: 1/17/2024 9:41:00 PM

Congrats on placing 2nd out of 49 poems! I thought your tight, powerful prose was super effective, and love the last line, that really brought it home. Well done!!!

Ink Empress
Date: 1/19/2024 12:17:00 PM

Thank you so very much truly im so grateful and glad that you felt and placed my poem in your contest.

Valsa George

Date: 12/9/2023 8:51:00 PM

With what more sincerity one can address the trauma experienced by people after divorce? Your poem has created a sense of pain in me too. No body wants divorce. But circumstances force them to do so. Some are simply reluctant to make any sort of adjustments.... and we know when two people from different families get together, their nature differs widely and without adjustments, marriage can't thrive. Your poem is not simply an acrostic, but a true record of intense pain and sense of angst one go through after a separation. Great entry .... dear Empress! All the Best....

Hilo Poet

Date: 12/9/2023 9:52:00 AM

Sad 'tis, Ink Empress. My friend--I do not know his reasoning, is looking for his fourth Mrs. ex-Cantwell, I am clueless about him, other than methinks he's being callous. Thoughts aside--nicely knitted, my friend. Aloha, William

Bill Baker

Date: 12/8/2023 5:10:00 PM

Excellent Acrostic, Ink. A good entry for the contest, my friend. Good Luck! Bill

Roses Roses

Date: 12/8/2023 3:06:00 PM

WOW just WOW, you painted a masterpiece of emotion within the truth of pain!

Paige Hind

Date: 12/8/2023 3:04:00 PM

Just beautiful, well, heartwrenchingly so. I loved the second to last line "was"- took my breath.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 12/8/2023 1:38:00 PM

Maybe not? our best intentions are often real, sharing space with you on this one dear poet friend

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 12/8/2023 10:43:00 AM

A poem to the point. I could feel the heartache as I read this one.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/8/2023 8:43:00 AM

I enjoyed reading this "DIVORCE" Acrostic write. It is a sad time for anyone going through this. Looks like we both this one. Have a great/blessed day...................

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/8/2023 7:41:00 AM

Divorce is an extremely delicate topic, and I believe you have conveyed how the majority of individuals would feel following their own divorce. Your acrostic addresses the perils associated with separating and makes excellent use of metaphors and sophisticated diction. "Orchestrating a funeral for moon-kissed vows, now deceased" was a brilliant line.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/8/2023 5:53:00 AM

Riddled with regrets and unspoken apologies--that describes the effects of divorce perfectly and the ending line wonders of the life together in a perfect metaphor.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/8/2023 5:16:00 AM

an emotional and almost gut-wrenching Acrostic on divorce, words that are heartfelt and from personal experience. Your imagery moved me to sadness, especially "orchestrating a funeral for moon-kissed vows, now decease." Powerful and poignant. A fabulous contest contender. Best wishes with the contest. Have a splendid day, hugs, Sara

Silent One

Date: 12/8/2023 3:36:00 AM

Why do you not have an I in the title, you have an !.. That is a long last line here... but you have done an acrostic which covers the fatalities of a divorce.. nice use of analogy at the end .. good luck in the contest dear.

Ink Empress
Date: 12/8/2023 5:11:00 AM

Read the line above that. Lolol yes its a question smh .. ah i should have left it as it is then

Silent One
Date: 12/8/2023 5:00:00 AM

I didnt say it was bad, but why do you have a ? at the end.. is it a question.

Ink Empress
Date: 12/8/2023 4:24:00 AM

Hello silent one i made my last line shorter lol is it better now dear?

Ink Empress
Date: 12/8/2023 3:40:00 AM

Thank you for pointing out all that. I wanted an exclamation mark. No rules for title i guess. Or maybe and yea last line is long thanks for your sincere thoughts on my acrostic

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/8/2023 2:53:00 AM

My gosh, you've so evocatively described those heart-aching emotions when one goes through a separation..The person whom one cherished the most and considered spending the lifetime together.. How they become like strangers in this unknown world. I loveeee this gorgeously knitted acrostic poem which just touches my soul. "I search for heartbeats lost within", "orchestrating a funeral for moon-kissed vows" Sigh, that's so poignant.."I search for heartbeats lost within" Such a melancholic situation

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/8/2023 2:55:00 AM

"Every rose in our garden was a scentless lie", "then why is my ink still bleeding your name?" That ending part is my most favorite here dear Ink.. You just weave art of soulful feelings with your creative quill.. Wow. Best of luck to you for the contest, I'm sure this will do very well! Sending you so much love and light!

Jeanette Brewin

Date: 12/8/2023 2:39:00 AM

Such a heartbreaking thing to go through. Well written.

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 12/8/2023 2:25:00 AM

Divorce is such a sensitive subject and I guess you have expressed it as how most people would feel after a divorce . Well done