Dundurn Castle

I hesitate for a moment outside the rod iron gates;
sensing behind those castle doors, a long past life awaits,
within those many mortared walls, rising high above the lake,
as my breath begins to quicken and my knees began to shake.

Step into the parlour, the old curator now implores;
where upon I see  the winding staircase, I at once abhor. 
Below the ground on cobbled stones, stepping up to marbled floors,
a scullery maid with calloused feet, summoned by her Lord.

As I climb those winding stairs again, my back begins to ache,
as visions of cups and saucers, tumble down the stairs and break.
The Mistress of the castle, coiled, and hissing like a snake,
strikes me down to lie among the shattered glass, and birthday cake.

Upon a marble checkerboard, in squares of black and white, I die;
barely fourteen years of age, a lonely  child, frail and shy;
buried in a shallow grave, no marker telling where I lie,
just the roses in the garden, underneath a blue, blue sky.


Written:  June 25, 2014
For Past Life Contest

Author's note:
 Dundurn Castles is a real castle in Hamilton, Ontario, Canada.
On a visit there, I had an overwhelming feeling of familiarity, 
which inspired this poem about a past life.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 7/18/2015 5:49:00 AM
I much enjoyed your evocative poem. Julia, with best wishes.
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Date: 5/10/2015 9:05:00 AM
A tremendous piece!
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Elaine George
Date: 5/13/2015 6:56:00 AM
Thank you Carol. bfn Elaine
Date: 9/12/2014 3:55:00 PM
Awesome write Elaine! I read and saw a lot of stuff about it in some YouTube videos I found there not many months ago. Very nice video tours by the way showing the castle. Love your poem and everything to do with castles. Best wishes! xxxxx D
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Date: 8/12/2014 11:10:00 AM
Splendid write!!
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Date: 7/14/2014 6:03:00 PM
That was so perfectly written Elaine.... I enjoyed the read :) Ana
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Date: 7/14/2014 4:50:00 PM
Wow! Your poem is so impressive that it makes one wonder if it is a real memory of a past life experience. A wonderful entry for the contest that is sure to be on the winner's list. I loved it Lainie!
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Date: 7/13/2014 3:04:00 PM
You are such a talented writer Lanie. I thought about this contest and could not even guess who I might be in a past life. love phyl
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Date: 7/8/2014 1:44:00 AM
I like how you connect tactile perception with this illuminating memory Lanie. You articulate the entirety of this experience with awesome brevity, its so complete. I also appreciate how you didn't self aggrandize yourself for a Past Life. Although a tragic Passing, what more beautiful and mysterious grave marker than roses and sky. Bravo Lanie. J.A.B.
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Date: 7/5/2014 3:07:00 PM
Awesome write,Elaine - and very cool that you felt such familiarity
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Date: 7/3/2014 11:00:00 AM
Hi, Lanie. Good to hear from you. Very mysterious your feeling of familiarity - from another life maybe? Love, Dave
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Date: 7/2/2014 11:27:00 PM
I love to read about castles and their history, so I really, really enjoyed your poem! This was an excellent write, and I felt like I was right there with you! Congratulations on your win, Elaine! Well deserved!
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Elaine George
Date: 7/2/2014 11:34:00 PM
Thank you Kelly. it was a fun contest. bfn Lainie
Date: 7/2/2014 11:18:00 PM
Thank you for your comment on the evergreen thumb, i don't have it either but my next door neighbor does he can grow anything. Love this poem also I to believe in past lives very much have had something close to this experience but from a distance it's hard to explain. But it was very real great job on this write Elaine enjoyed the imagery the most. Nicely done, i'll be on tomorrow or the next day will read more than. cheri
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Elaine George
Date: 7/2/2014 11:25:00 PM
Thank you Cheryl. I will return to read more of yours also. Gonight for now. Lainie
Date: 7/2/2014 9:54:00 PM
Stopping by to enjoy the imagery one more time, Elaine, thank you for the stroll...Linda
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Date: 6/30/2014 3:00:00 PM
wow, this is GOOD stuff. Did you truly feel a bleak or horrible feeling about it? I sure wish I could have come up with something for this contest. Congrats. I see you won and you deserved it.
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Elaine George
Date: 6/30/2014 5:17:00 PM
HI ANDREA, IN ANSWER TO YOUR QUEST, YES! I DEFINITELY HAD A FEELING OF FAMILARITY-EXPECIALLY DOWN IN THE KITCHEN BELOW THE MAIN LEVEL FLOOR. wHEN WRITING THIS POEM, THIS WAS WHAT CAME TO ME WITHOUT REALLY THINKING TO MUCH ABOUT IT. BFN ELAINE
Date: 6/30/2014 2:46:00 PM
WOW Elaine, I believe it! I don't remember living in this time period. [line 8 typo hon] very sad but beautifully told Light & Love
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 6/30/2014 2:46:00 PM
oopsie congrad's!!!
Date: 6/30/2014 12:23:00 AM
Interesting gripping tale, Elaine, congrats on the win
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Date: 6/29/2014 10:45:00 PM
Congrats on your well-deserved win, Elaine, it is a gripping tale which I enjoyed much. Thnx for your kind comments!
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Date: 6/29/2014 8:09:00 PM
"Upon a marble checkerboard, in squares of black and white, I die; barely fourteen years of age, a lonely child, frail and shy; buried in a shallow grave, no marker telling where I lie, just the roses in the garden, underneath a blue, blue sky." CONGRATS, LOVE THIS!!
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Date: 6/29/2014 5:30:00 PM
Elaine, Congrats on a top win with this very impressive write. Hugs.. Arlene
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Date: 6/29/2014 3:53:00 PM
Hi Elaine, congratulations on another well-deserved top win! This is such a beautiful, mystical write with glorious imagery that your reader is easily transported along with you to a different place and time. I truly enjoyed this read. Pandita.
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Date: 6/29/2014 2:59:00 PM
This was like reading a chapter of a gothic or Victorian novel.....beautifully written and captivating. You took me along into another century, another life as if I were watching it all unfold. Well done!
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Date: 6/26/2014 1:37:00 PM
This is a captivating write, Elaine; great imagery, too. You chose a perfect take on this contest. gl // paul
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Date: 6/26/2014 2:01:00 AM
Incredible imagery I really loved the write from start to finish. good luck in the contest. hugs Jan xxx
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Elaine George
Date: 6/26/2014 8:35:00 AM
Thanks for the comments and the good wishes, Jan. Wishing you a wonderful day. bfn elaine
Date: 6/26/2014 1:55:00 AM
This is so absorbing Elaine! I get a very real sense that you did once upon a time live this...best wishes for the contest...love, Deb
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Elaine George
Date: 6/26/2014 8:22:00 AM
So do I.... bfnm Eve. Elaine
Date: 6/25/2014 10:14:00 PM
Hello Elaine, I don't know about this, death, and beauty. The way you describe the scenery, ---epicly beautiful... at the same time, it is sad... to go at 14, in a shallow, never to be known.. :(... Enjoyed.. Linda
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