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drunk on fire

I stir your seawater where fire balances high on oil You clasp my candlefire, wick's motioning coil — A sweating kind of missing A burned open kissing The glass shared between us two Flames in our faces as we move To the synchrony past Our dressing these masks These temperatures rising in veins of you and I God, brief tourniquets in time — Where I drown my highbrow in your heat This hard body now heartbeats This translation My intoxication

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Suzette Richards

Date: 6/26/2025 3:25:00 AM

You are the queen of passion - wow! I enjoyed losing myself among the lines and caught myself getting into character with it, Paige. :)

Ink Empress

Date: 6/26/2025 2:50:00 AM

Wow i love the ending and also the opening line here dear sweet paige! You have a very imaginative and creative way with words and its truly so very impressive! I especially love "I stir your seawater where fire balances high on oil You clasp my candlefire, wick's motioning coil " so clever! Beautiful couplet! A fave for me! Sending you light always

Danny Derden

Date: 6/25/2025 12:07:00 PM

This poem intensely captures the fiery, intoxicating nature of a passionate connection. It vividly portrays a consuming desire where two individuals merge, shedding pretenses and experiencing a profound, almost overwhelming, union.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/25/2025 10:29:00 AM

This comes off with great sensuality, paige. I really enjoyed the read.

Hiya Sharma

Date: 6/25/2025 12:12:00 AM

Gosh, what a breathtaking chain of couplets you've artistically woven, my dear Paige! I'm in awe of your poetic prowess, so many soul-stirring, profound and introspective lines here that really make one dive in their depth. "I stir your seawater where fire balances high on oil You work my candlefire, wick's motioning coil- " Those opening lined really captivated my attention and throughout, it was such an experience! "tourniquets in time" That's so ingenious,wow! and the ending! Beyond brilliant.. ever so soulful and powerful! One of my FAVs from you, sweet friend.. pleasure reading your work always.

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/24/2025 7:00:00 PM

Wonderful couplet, Paige. I like your several metaphor layers here.