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DRUNK LOVE


take me home
where i could drink 
the nectar's sweetness.
assuage my thirst
with love's splendor 
the heart's chamber
overflowing honey.
sit on my heart
affectionate desire.
drink together
and sleep under 
the crescent moon
a million stars studded the heavens, 
I swoon.
crazy i allow 
too much love.
intoxicated. drunk.
take my heart, rip it.
a lustful endeavor.
please forget not to sew
the rippings back together.
while i bathe upon the memory
'tis the moment
that i come alive.
play it back
mystified again
beguiled
love is drunk.


(Note :  My pieces lately seemed unfinished work of thought/art as this one 
appears to be such. The words seem to vibrate, so I let them come out 
naturally. Reality or imagined, it doesn't matter now. But, hopefully I could take 
back a step for awhile and work on the style and art of  words without defiling pure self-expression. Thank you for the great talents I find here at soup.  Looking 
forward to many learnings from y'all.  I would highly appreciate any souper who 
would like to mentor me from time to time. Soup mail me anytime. Thanks so 
much.    )

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 2/23/2014 2:02:00 PM
Wendy oh I love this, try one of the forms here and if you need help there is some great talent here....David
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Date: 2/22/2014 9:03:00 PM
Love is one thing that is not regulated by the Bureau of Alcohol, Tobacco, and Firearms. Anybody can freely get drunk on love, and you can be under twenty-one. This was a fascinating write.
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Date: 1/5/2014 4:15:00 PM
Ok so this poem was raw, relatable and the word choice was exquisite. Though maybe change a couple things, just so that the lines are read easier; perhaps like this: "take me home where i could drink the nectar's sweetness. love's splendor lustful endeavor the heart's chamber overflow honey. sit on my heart; affectionate desire. (because affectionate's isn't the right context I think)" overall it was very well written, and I cant wait to read more, thank you for sharing
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Wendy Meyer
Date: 2/22/2014 5:14:00 PM
carly hi! again....I've been out of soup for the past many weeks...been busy with the demands of life, I say...thought of paying close attention to details of this piece today...thank you for giving your earlier thoughts on my work...~ wendy
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Wendy Meyer
Date: 2/3/2014 1:24:00 AM
carly...well taken...input is much appreciated...thank you...wendy
Date: 1/4/2014 1:39:00 PM
Consider writing it in reverse from the line ie: "love's drunk" "mystified again" "play it back" until you get back to line one. I think this would work so well for this poem. If you wish to do this it may require some minor reworking of some of the earlier lines.
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Wendy Meyer
Date: 2/22/2014 5:34:00 PM
Richard, hi! ....I've been out of soup for the past many weeks...been busy with the demands of life, I say...thought of dropping by to check on things with my work today...will try my best to rework on the lines...pray I'd be graced by time and inspiration for such pleasurable pastime...~wendy
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Wendy Meyer
Date: 2/3/2014 1:23:00 AM
Richard..well taken. input is much appreciated. thank you...wendy
Date: 1/4/2014 11:42:00 AM
very beautifully painted piece excellent
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Wendy Meyer
Date: 2/3/2014 1:25:00 AM
liam, a lovely thanks...wendy
Date: 1/1/2014 9:21:00 PM
love, the best kind of thing to get drunk on... this is beautifully written and it something I think many can relate to...great write Wendy! Hugs
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Wendy Meyer
Date: 2/3/2014 1:26:00 AM
Sandra, a lovely thanks...wendy
Date: 1/1/2014 5:15:00 PM
oh wow, I had not noticed your title and when I finished reading this, Drunk with Love was what came to my mind. You very appropriately titled this one that "vibrates" with your poetic words.
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Wendy Meyer
Date: 2/3/2014 1:26:00 AM
andrea, a lovely thanks...wendy
Date: 1/1/2014 10:03:00 AM
Wendy, I loved your work,, I think you can very well leave it further untouched. Sometimes this rawness appeals to the reader more than a finished poem.. Best wishes and happy New Year to you.. hugs , gautami
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Wendy Meyer
Date: 2/3/2014 1:27:00 AM
G, my friend, a lovely thanks...wendy