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Driving In the Dark On My Birthday-Oct 7

Thirty minutes til pickup - leaving home before crack of dawn A slew of police cars and orange cones blocking the exit Reading mailboxes with old eyes - not owl eyes My friend and I exchanging gift bags - her birthday was in August Thirty more minutes North - I should have let her drive A sharp curve - caught off guard - followed it to its conclusion A deer in a dead slump near the road’s edge Motorcyclists - one popping a wheelie Country bumpkin roads Field of future Jack-O’-lanterns The church steeple as the sun comes up

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Date: 10/11/2023 10:50:00 PM
All best yet belated birthday wishes Kim And one for every unbirthday day to follow.' May God keep your ways.'
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Date: 10/11/2023 6:39:00 AM
Happy belated Kim! A great deal shone in your eyes and shown in your words. Linda :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/11/2023 10:50:00 AM
Thank you, Linda!
Date: 10/10/2023 1:59:00 AM
Happy belated Birthday Kim! I'm glad you didn't hit the dear, that sounds like a hair raising night. I almost hit a cow tonight going around a dark curve, my daughter screamed "Slow down!!" When she saw eyes glowing ahead, I had no idea, I just hit the brakes and slid to a stop and then saw him, it was close. Oh, thank God He is watching over us gals with our old eyes Kim! I hope you had a fun birthday besides the scary stuff! <3
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/10/2023 9:17:00 AM
Right….lol! Glad you were able to stop! Thanks for the birthday wishes!
Date: 10/9/2023 6:34:00 PM
Happy birthday! Like how you described it...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/10/2023 9:17:00 AM
Thank you, Paige!
Date: 10/9/2023 4:59:00 AM
Happy belated birthday talented poetess, wishing you good health and good thoughts always
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/9/2023 6:53:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 10/8/2023 1:15:00 PM
What a wonderful example of show, don’t tell, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/8/2023 2:54:00 PM
Thank you, Lin!
Date: 10/8/2023 12:54:00 PM
you've described this so well, kim, that i can picture it all. happy belated birthday!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/8/2023 2:55:00 PM
Thank you, Ilene!
Date: 10/8/2023 12:33:00 PM
- You shouldn't have driven in the dark alone... you'll probably never forget that night, Kim - Great written - hugs
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/8/2023 2:55:00 PM
All went well. An adventure.

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