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Drifting

The young boy woke up floating, effortlessly above his own little, living, breathing, body that could be clearly seen below with his own intangible eyes, drifting… as if he were a concealed cloud or Zephyr wind suspended within the borders of his bedroom walls. A sky full of galaxies and stars were luminously enticing and inviting him beyond the curtains and outskirts of his window as he wondered what it might be like to let go of his attachments to the familiar, sleeping boy in bed, his mother, father, family, friends, and plastic airplane models he had recently assembled, painted and placed on cluttered shelves along with Mark Twain story books and seashells around his azure blue painted boyhood bedroom cocoon. It was all he could do to keep from drifting through the beckoning window, the ceiling or watchful walls leading upwards and outwards toward some place he thought he knew well enough to call "Home Sweet Home" and yet, something akin to nothingness suddenly surrounded this new-found phantom, ghost-like, being curiously whispering and causing him to realize it was not yet time for him to fly and instead, decided to surrender and reenter that other boy's body, brain, and mind still lying there in bed. Before awaking to the warming glow of glorious, Sunday morning sunlight beams and wondering, if floating weightlessly above himself was as real as chocolate ice cream or nothing more than another delirious dream.

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Date: 9/3/2022 4:54:00 PM
What a marvelous dream you captured Terry in this little boy. You had me glued to your words. The ending was great. Hope you are well my friend. Will read your previous poetry as you are not here now. God bless you my friend...
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Date: 9/3/2022 3:36:00 PM
Very engaging poetry, Terry. I liked the way you let the reader decide what the experience was all about. Was it a near death experience? Was it an out of the body experience? Was it just a delerious dream? Thought-provoking poetry, my favorite kind. Thanks for giving us your thoughts through your poetry and something to think about, my friend. Have a great weekend! Bill P.S. I've had a similar experience as an adult, Terry. Several times in fact. :-)
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Date: 8/21/2022 8:37:00 AM
this is SO COOL> I am so fascinated by these kinds of happenings. Love how you ended this. A FAVE for me
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Terrell Martin
Date: 8/21/2022 9:16:00 AM
Andrea, your response is SO COOL I just want to reach out and hug you or at least "High 5" or fist bump because I can tell by your response that I achieved what I had hoped for: A relatively accurate description of an actual event that took place in my childhood. THANK YOU for your uplifting response. Write on, Terry
Date: 8/20/2022 9:51:00 PM
Interesting poetry, Terrell, a boy's mystic journey, yet not to far away from where his heart belongs. Love the theme, the mindset that drove the pen..Harry
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Terrell Martin
Date: 8/21/2022 9:10:00 AM
Thanks Harry, but confession time: It wasn't a dream because it actually happened to me when I was young. Thanks for your reading and sharing your thoughts. All the best, Terry
Date: 8/20/2022 2:33:00 PM
Dear poet friend, I believe it was as real as chocolate ice cream, and that it really did happen, out of body experiences are more common than you know, and it is life changing at times, Thankyou for such an interesting poem, I loved it, if you ever want to read aloud at our monthly cafe please email me, we would welcome you with open arms,
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Terrell Martin
Date: 8/20/2022 3:55:00 PM
I'm glad we agree, Rose, because this was based on one of my own childhood memories. And I would LOVE to read during one of your monthly cafes so thank you for the invitation and be on the lookout for my email soon. Thanks for reading & sharing, Terrell/Terry or "Hey You" works too!
Date: 8/19/2022 4:15:00 PM
Dear Terrell, be it a soul longing to go home or a delirious dream, your enchanting pen captures the drifting feeling with poetic finesse. A spellbinding and splendid piece! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Susan Ashley
Date: 8/19/2022 6:25:00 PM
It’s all in the eyes of the beholder, my friend. Your poem captured my heart’s imagination as you evocative imagery brought the dreamy scene to life..
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Terrell Martin
Date: 8/19/2022 6:07:00 PM
Hi Susan, I thought this might be a pretty good poem but "A spellbinding and splendid piece" is well over the threshold of my expectations! I cannot express enough appreciation for your gushing compliment. Warm hugs & write on, Terry

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