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Downy Feathers For Contest

the ugly duckling
down changed to pure brilliant white
transformed totally

syllable count 5,7,5 
Feathers The Haiku Contest –  Skat
07~13~15

birdchangenaturehaiku

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James Fraser

Date: 7/18/2015 2:11:00 PM

Tommy Steele is this, through and through. I've always loved that song, and well done being placed Jan, hugs//James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/18/2015 2:14:00 PM

I was brought up on the records when I was a kid James :-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 7/16/2015 6:04:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your wonderful win. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 6:10:00 PM

I wouldn't call 11th place wonderful lol but at least it wasn't another N/A to add to my growing collection lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Barbara Campbell

Date: 7/16/2015 3:30:00 PM

This is clever. Really like it. Barbara

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 3:37:00 PM

Thanks Barbara:-) hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 7/16/2015 11:29:00 AM

superb Jan congrats on win hugs 7

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 11:32:00 AM

Thanks Shadow:-) hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 7/16/2015 9:44:00 AM

Oh but this is cute, Jan! Love the pic that went well with the transformation of the ugly duckling. Congrats! hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 9:57:00 AM

thanks Kim - must try harder next time:-( hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/15/2015 11:21:00 PM

Jan, Congratulations on your wonderful win. Always ~LINDA~

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 2:24:00 AM

Thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan x

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/15/2015 11:16:00 PM

Congrats, Jan, no surprise, well done. Jolly well done, young lady, Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 2:23:00 AM

LOL No surprise at all Mr Viv:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/15/2015 11:01:00 PM

Congrats, jan. I have not heard from you today. Let me send you a soupmail.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 2:23:00 AM

Thanks Andrea:-) replied and thanks for boosting my flagging spirits:-( hugs jan xx

Skat A

Date: 7/15/2015 10:52:00 PM

Jan, I think the ugly duckling idea was cool. I was looking for epic lines. however, the second line was a clever one. :) Congratulations on your awesome feather win. **SKAT**

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 2:22:00 AM

Thanks:-( Hugs jan x

Peter Lewis Holmes

Date: 7/15/2015 2:34:00 AM

Simple imagery...nice pen Jan...and thanks for the comment...Peter

Jan Allison
Date: 7/15/2015 4:33:00 AM

Thanks Peter:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/14/2015 9:52:00 PM

oops, typed in wrong box. I wasn't being pedantic (or any other ocean) Jan , but as is often the case with different countries, things differ. A classic example is some Americans pronounce nuclear as 'new killer' which gives an extra syllable. I'd pronounce it as two, but online checkers give it three. I was just watching your back. And very nice it is too...... Viv xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/15/2015 4:32:00 AM

lol and the front isn't bad either lol seriously thanks Mr Viv I do appreciate your comment and assistance:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 7/14/2015 4:26:00 PM

I was the ugly duckling then grew up to be the swan. :~) winner!! good luck love the poem. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2015 4:27:00 PM

Thanks Eve - I think I'm still a duckling lol:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/14/2015 12:08:00 PM

- My favorite fairy tales, Jan :) - Lovely :) - I wish you good luck in the contest! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2015 12:13:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise it is one of my faves too:-) hugs Jan xx

Kelly Deschler

Date: 7/14/2015 12:09:00 AM

It's amazing what a little change will do... I enjoyed your lovely rendition of the classic story. Very well written, Jan! Good luck in Skat's contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2015 4:16:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by Kelly I do appreciate your support:-) hugs Jan xx

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 7/13/2015 11:52:00 PM

Lol!!! A fabulous write here, excellent............A.M.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2015 4:16:00 AM

Thanks so much:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/13/2015 10:35:00 PM

I always loved that story, Jan. a nice entry for the contest and cute picture.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2015 4:20:00 AM

could you triple check the syllables for 'brilliant' -BOTH syllable checkers I used show 2 brill-iant - I don't want to fall at the first hurdle lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2015 4:15:00 AM

thanks Andrea:-) Hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/13/2015 10:18:00 PM

Good luck, Jan, but let's hope your pronunciation of 'brilliant' agrees with Skat's, or you may be a syllable too many. Just a thought. Viv x

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/14/2015 9:35:00 PM

Good-oh. I wasn't being pedantic (or any other ocean), but as is often the case with different countries, things differ. A classic example is some Americans pronounce nuclear as 'new killer' which gives an extra syllable. I'd pronounce it as two, but online checkers give it three. I was just watching your back. And very nice it is too...... Viv xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2015 3:17:00 PM

Mr Viv it looks like we say Brill i ant but the other way is brill yant and that is the way the syllable counter seems to work:-0 hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2015 4:15:00 AM

I double checked Mr Viv and ran it to 2 syllable checkers its brill-iant according to them will note down which ones I used:-) hugs Jan xx