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Down On Me

Crusty old oaks wave brittle arms angrily overhead, threatening to drop dead crushingly heavy limbs Down Taller trees having achieved the highest heights pine away, lonely jealously pouring their sharp needles Down Towering above terrifyingly insecure in their position they shakily throw their shade blocking sun and rain- trying to keep me Down What did I do to deserve such spite but struggle to survive with limited might a dogwood sapling that could never possibly grow to over-shadow them?

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Old Buck

Date: 6/12/2019 1:30:00 PM

Rhona: As I read this lovely piece I thought of the sparce grass that struggles beneath our Ash tree. thank you for sharing with all of us on the soup. Keep them coming. oldbuck

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 6/13/2019 1:30:00 PM

Thank you! ;)

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 5/10/2019 1:20:00 PM

Hello Rhonda McFerran, everyone struggles to survive no matter what. Have a nice day my friend.

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 5/10/2019 7:50:00 PM

Thank you, Darlene! Hope you have a nice day, too! ;)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 4/18/2019 8:08:00 AM

Awesome personification, clear write! xomo

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 4/18/2019 11:54:00 AM

Thank you, my friend! ;)

M. L. Kiser

Date: 4/10/2019 7:52:00 PM

I feel sorry for that Sapling...great effect!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 4/10/2019 10:05:00 PM

Thank you, my friend! ;)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/10/2019 5:04:00 PM

great metaphors, love the dogwood, for me, the underdog. Rise up and conquer!!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 4/10/2019 10:04:00 PM

Hahaha! I didn't even think of "underdog"!... I just picked dogwood because it was the first small tree that came to mind! ;D

Susan Ashley

Date: 4/9/2019 6:57:00 PM

Oh, I love the personification and imagery of your captivating poem, Rhona. Beautifully expressed and fantastic content. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 4/9/2019 10:01:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comment, Susan! Warmest wishes to you, too!! ;)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 4/9/2019 8:40:00 AM

COOL! Fantastic piece Rhona. I love this. A fave. x

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 4/9/2019 4:44:00 PM

Thanks, Mo- I'm so glad (and honored)!! ;)

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/9/2019 1:37:00 AM

"Towering above terrifyingly insecure in their position they shakily throw their shade blocking sun and rain- trying to keep me Down" Wow! Poetical and wonderful imagery, borderline personification. Adore the psychology in this poem too, my friend. You are on a roll now! Soup Mail.

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 4/9/2019 4:47:00 PM

Thanks, my friend- glad you liked it!! ;) I think I'm getting back in the swing of writing again... (fingers crossed)!