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Down On Me

Crusty old oaks
wave brittle arms angrily
overhead, threatening
to drop dead
crushingly
heavy limbs
Down

Taller trees
having achieved
the highest heights
pine away, lonely
jealously pouring their
sharp needles
Down

Towering above
terrifyingly insecure
in their position
they shakily
throw their shade
blocking sun and rain-
trying to keep me
Down

What did I do
to deserve such spite
but struggle to survive
with limited might
a dogwood sapling
that could never possibly
grow to over-shadow
them?

Copyright © Rhona Mcferran | Year Posted 2019

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Old Buck Date: 6/12/2019 1:30:00 PM Rhona: As I read this lovely piece I thought of the sparce grass that struggles beneath our Ash tree. thank you for sharing with all of us on the soup. Keep them coming. oldbuck Login to Reply Rhona Mcferran Date: 6/13/2019 1:30:00 PM Thank you! ;)

Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 5/10/2019 1:20:00 PM Hello Rhonda McFerran, everyone struggles to survive no matter what. Have a nice day my friend. Login to Reply Rhona Mcferran Date: 5/10/2019 7:50:00 PM Thank you, Darlene! Hope you have a nice day, too! ;)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib Date: 4/18/2019 8:08:00 AM Awesome personification, clear write! xomo Login to Reply Rhona Mcferran Date: 4/18/2019 11:54:00 AM Thank you, my friend! ;)

M. L. Kiser Date: 4/10/2019 7:52:00 PM I feel sorry for that Sapling...great effect! Login to Reply Rhona Mcferran Date: 4/10/2019 10:05:00 PM Thank you, my friend! ;)

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/10/2019 5:04:00 PM great metaphors, love the dogwood, for me, the underdog. Rise up and conquer!! Login to Reply Rhona Mcferran Date: 4/10/2019 10:04:00 PM Hahaha! I didn't even think of "underdog"!... I just picked dogwood because it was the first small tree that came to mind! ;D

Susan Ashley Date: 4/9/2019 6:57:00 PM Oh, I love the personification and imagery of your captivating poem, Rhona. Beautifully expressed and fantastic content. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Login to Reply Rhona Mcferran Date: 4/9/2019 10:01:00 PM Thank you for the lovely comment, Susan! Warmest wishes to you, too!! ;)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib Date: 4/9/2019 8:40:00 AM COOL! Fantastic piece Rhona. I love this. A fave. x Login to Reply Rhona Mcferran Date: 4/9/2019 4:44:00 PM Thanks, Mo- I'm so glad (and honored)!! ;)

Caren Krutsinger Date: 4/9/2019 1:37:00 AM "Towering above terrifyingly insecure in their position they shakily throw their shade blocking sun and rain- trying to keep me Down" Wow! Poetical and wonderful imagery, borderline personification. Adore the psychology in this poem too, my friend. You are on a roll now! Soup Mail. Login to Reply Rhona Mcferran Date: 4/9/2019 4:47:00 PM Thanks, my friend- glad you liked it!! ;) I think I'm getting back in the swing of writing again... (fingers crossed)!