Rhona Mcferran Poet Personification

Down On Me

Crusty old oaks
wave brittle arms angrily
overhead, threatening
to drop dead
crushingly
heavy limbs
Down

Taller trees
having achieved
the highest heights
pine away, lonely
jealously pouring their
sharp needles
Down

Towering above
terrifyingly insecure
in their position
they shakily
throw their shade
blocking sun and rain-
trying to keep me
Down

What did I do
to deserve such spite
but struggle to survive
with limited might
a dogwood sapling
that could never possibly
grow to over-shadow
them?

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Old Buck June 12, 2019 at 1:30 PM Rhona: As I read this lovely piece I thought of the sparce grass that struggles beneath our Ash tree. thank you for sharing with all of us on the soup. Keep them coming. oldbuck Rhona Mcferran June 13, 2019 at 1:30 PM Thank you! ;)

Darlene De Beaulieu May 10, 2019 at 1:20 PM Hello Rhonda McFerran, everyone struggles to survive no matter what. Have a nice day my friend. Rhona Mcferran May 10, 2019 at 7:50 PM Thank you, Darlene! Hope you have a nice day, too! ;)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 18, 2019 at 8:08 AM Awesome personification, clear write! xomo Rhona Mcferran April 18, 2019 at 11:54 AM Thank you, my friend! ;)

M. L. Kiser April 10, 2019 at 7:52 PM I feel sorry for that Sapling...great effect! Rhona Mcferran April 10, 2019 at 10:05 PM Thank you, my friend! ;)

Andrea Dietrich April 10, 2019 at 5:04 PM great metaphors, love the dogwood, for me, the underdog. Rise up and conquer!! Rhona Mcferran April 10, 2019 at 10:04 PM Hahaha! I didn't even think of "underdog"!... I just picked dogwood because it was the first small tree that came to mind! ;D

Susan Ashley April 9, 2019 at 6:57 PM Oh, I love the personification and imagery of your captivating poem, Rhona. Beautifully expressed and fantastic content. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Rhona Mcferran April 9, 2019 at 10:01 PM Thank you for the lovely comment, Susan! Warmest wishes to you, too!! ;)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 9, 2019 at 8:40 AM COOL! Fantastic piece Rhona. I love this. A fave. x Rhona Mcferran April 9, 2019 at 4:44 PM Thanks, Mo- I'm so glad (and honored)!! ;)

Caren Krutsinger April 9, 2019 at 1:37 AM "Towering above terrifyingly insecure in their position they shakily throw their shade blocking sun and rain- trying to keep me Down" Wow! Poetical and wonderful imagery, borderline personification. Adore the psychology in this poem too, my friend. You are on a roll now! Soup Mail. Rhona Mcferran April 9, 2019 at 4:47 PM Thanks, my friend- glad you liked it!! ;) I think I'm getting back in the swing of writing again... (fingers crossed)!