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Double J - Just Jetsam

Marred and minced remnants pile high in a storm’s swarm Yesterdays, hardened-soft, surface where sea’s warm… Flotsam found, lays tales around, in frayed traces Another shattered shell whimpers of graces vying with the sea-swept sands: gloss embossed fades… Ocean’s dead! These are castaways of Hades, rid of depth, stranded upon the dry shallow Interred where the sun bleaches out the shadows till whitened ivory fills cavern’s echo: enmeshed lime, crunching upon errors callow Jazz died - June’s sun sank into august abyss… Undertow currents ceased their torments of bliss Nipped life, silenced like frothing foam vacuum-sealed, kept smothered in an opaque ocean congealed… Yard junked, Neptune’s home’s now a derelict mess and yet he clings to the crap amassed, crownless Right always, up to the end --------- that no return. Death will erase the un-sunk bones when they burn (10/3/2019: '90 Sea Ray DA 350; Discovery Park; ‘my favorite junkyard’)

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Date: 8/17/2022 12:19:00 PM
Hello Susan, the imagery of you collecting driftwood amongst the waste and debris is sad and disturbing. Shame on them. We need Heal The Bay and others more than ever! I am glad you shared these junkyard interpretations love that! on Jazz—Jazz with Reggae an infused treat ~ Evelyn J Buehler ~ her poem “Almost Home” 8/12/22 turned me on to it! ~I Am Anaya
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 8/17/2022 12:52:00 PM
Hi Anaya…thank you. Yes, it’s saddening how the ocean is so full of trash… I like reggae but Jazz in this write was an old friend’s nickname and she passed away shortly before i wrote the poem…I’ll check out Evelyn’s write :)
Date: 3/9/2021 6:40:00 AM
Such a remarkable poem. Memorable lines like "...where the sun bleaches out the shadows." Our oceans are indeed junkyards particularly with plastic waste. A superb write. Challenging. Best wishes, Brian
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 3/9/2021 7:43:00 AM
thank you...true, it is saddening now to see more and more plastic when I go collecting shells and driftwood :)
Date: 11/13/2019 8:23:00 AM
Congrats on your top win, Susan. Welcome to PoetrySoup.
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 11/13/2019 4:20:00 PM
Thanks Line :)
Date: 11/5/2019 8:23:00 AM
Very creative and quite the abstract piece but so well written and expressed. Congrats on your win!!!
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 11/5/2019 10:00:00 AM
thank you, Chris. Glad you enjoyed it :)
Date: 11/2/2019 7:55:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Susan, in My Favorite Junkyard. Hugs Eve
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 11/3/2019 2:06:00 AM
thank you Eve, I am quite a beachcomber! :)
Date: 11/2/2019 4:16:00 PM
great write....congratulations on your top win! :)
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 11/2/2019 5:24:00 PM
thank you :)
Date: 11/2/2019 3:58:00 PM
Wow! Amazing sweet Susan! Congrats on your well deserved top win. :)-luloo
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 11/2/2019 5:24:00 PM
thank you..congrats to you as well :)
Date: 11/2/2019 2:22:00 PM
Congratulations! Great imagery and depth. All the best ... CayCay
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 11/2/2019 5:21:00 PM
thank you CayCay - the best to you too :)
Date: 11/2/2019 1:29:00 PM
Tasteful ambiguity presented in a truthfully painful & artful message - hits hard as it should. Exceptional poetry.
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 11/2/2019 5:20:00 PM
I'm thrilled you liked it, Craig...I actually used advice from one of your blogs :)

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