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Door Number Four

He met her on the dating game, at a suburban bar scene Amidst a lot of drinking and dancing, she whispered adventure was her middle name Told him that he had pretty blue eyes, that would look good on her pillow Said she had a fire starting down below that needed to be cooled come morning sunrise In a drunken haze, he didn't know what happened next for sure He vaguely recall leaving the bar, being led by her hand, staggering to his car When he woke up, there was only some key to door number four Beside him was a note written in lipstick bright cherry red: it said she had a man, and a spare lover too But last night, she needed something new And you promised her a wild ride, but had a flat tire instead

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Caycay Jennings

Date: 12/17/2016 8:54:00 PM

I didn't see that ending coming - what an off-the-wall cool ending. And a humorous date as accompanied by Murphy's Law - I enjoy this, Freddie - CayCay

Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 12/17/2016 9:15:00 PM

Ty, CayCay. Glad I could offer a bit of a surprise. I thought it was off beat as well when I was penning it. Appreciate your love and support. Many blessings of love to you.

Doug Vinson

Date: 12/16/2016 3:01:00 AM

Ah RW, our choices... A morality play, a cautionary tale, and for any and all of that, a funny look at us. : )

Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 12/17/2016 9:14:00 PM

Ty, Doug. A cautionary tale indeed. Yeah, I wanted to inject a humorous point of view to an unseemly situation. Ty for the kind comments. Love always to you.

Space Cadet

Date: 12/15/2016 8:54:00 PM

These can (or are) some great lyrics. -- Wesley C. Great title too! I my good gracious, these are great for a song.

Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 12/17/2016 9:11:00 PM

Ty, SC for the mad props. Appreciate you stopping by for a sit and read. Much love to you, bro.

Chris Green

Date: 12/15/2016 11:29:00 AM

That was funny, poor guy. I hope he learned his lesson r maybe she did. Nicely done Freddie.

Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 12/17/2016 9:10:00 PM

Ty, Chris. I hope the chump learned his lesson too. Ha ha ha. Love you, my poetic friend.

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/15/2016 9:11:00 AM

Hi Freddie, We all have lived a reckless lifestyle. This kind of scenario is very common in that lifestyle. But boy didn't shake awake up to a rude awakening ( they both did for that matter). I don't know if you intented this write to be kind of funny or not but is was. That twist at the end is what did it for me. As always good write. Well done:-) Alexis

Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 12/17/2016 9:09:00 PM

Ty, Alexis. Yeah, I wanted the serious situation to have an off beat humorous ending. Impotency is a bane to men. We hate it when it happens, but that's life. Women that can accept this flaw in men, knows that it will occur from time to time, and sometimes at the most inopportune time. That's why Viagra and all those other male erectile enhancement products sell so well. Much love to you.