Doomsday

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A little darkness into every life must fall...

The sun burned bright before the dawn The moon winked twice, and then was gone It rained down snow amidst the heat Unnatural, discord's drumbeat... Pets walked their masters to and fro There wasn't any place to go Attractions closed, most shops shut down Where once were smiles, now only frowns... TV's news shows just yammered on Folks turned away, suppressing yawns Hid in their rooms, and played their games The world they knew, now up in flames... The world collapsed at eventide Its soul gone rotten from inside

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Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/17/2020 2:37:00 PM

What a powerful poem, Gershon! You described the current state of affairs so well that it gave me chills. I hope we live to see the day when all this violence ends, though I'm beginning to doubt it. We don't seem to learn from past mistakes. Excellent writing. A fave for me! Hugs, carolyn

Gershon Wolf
Date: 6/17/2020 3:05:00 PM

Always an honor for me to receive a FAVE, esp. from a class act like you, Carolyn. Thank you so much! Take good care, Gershon

Mike Gentile

Date: 6/17/2020 11:47:00 AM

Gw, you totally nailed this one. Awesome Sonnet. perfect, meaningful rhymes. Great job!!

Gershon Wolf
Date: 6/17/2020 1:22:00 PM

Hey, Mike! Thanks for the enthusiasm, albeit for a bit of a dark write. Stay cool, my friend. Happy Wednesday! :) gw

John Hamilton

Date: 6/17/2020 11:08:00 AM

Wow Gershon a sonnet, I truly enjoyed this although of somber note it is so well written.

Gershon Wolf
Date: 6/17/2020 1:21:00 PM

Interesting comment: I myself was thinking that it was just too somber for a sonnet as I was penning it... Oh, well, the ink's been linked... Thanks, John! :) gw

P.S. Awtry

Date: 6/17/2020 9:38:00 AM

Things have opened up more here in Texas and it makes a huge difference in morale. Gorgeous soulful penning!

Gershon Wolf
Date: 6/17/2020 1:19:00 PM

Hopefully, things won't have to take a step back in Texas. Some states that opened (almost) fully are on the verge of walking it back, due to a spike in positive tests and hospitalizations... :) gw