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A little darkness into every life must fall...

The sun burned bright before the dawn The moon winked twice, and then was gone It rained down snow amidst the heat Unnatural, discord's drumbeat... Pets walked their masters to and fro There wasn't any place to go Attractions closed, most shops shut down Where once were smiles, now only frowns... TV's news shows just yammered on Folks turned away, suppressing yawns Hid in their rooms, and played their games The world they knew, now up in flames... The world collapsed at eventide Its soul gone rotten from inside

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020




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Date: 6/17/2020 2:37:00 PM
What a powerful poem, Gershon! You described the current state of affairs so well that it gave me chills. I hope we live to see the day when all this violence ends, though I'm beginning to doubt it. We don't seem to learn from past mistakes. Excellent writing. A fave for me! Hugs, carolyn
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Date: 6/17/2020 3:05:00 PM
Always an honor for me to receive a FAVE, esp. from a class act like you, Carolyn. Thank you so much! Take good care, Gershon
Date: 6/17/2020 11:47:00 AM
Gw, you totally nailed this one. Awesome Sonnet. perfect, meaningful rhymes. Great job!!
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Date: 6/17/2020 1:22:00 PM
Hey, Mike! Thanks for the enthusiasm, albeit for a bit of a dark write. Stay cool, my friend. Happy Wednesday! :) gw
Date: 6/17/2020 11:08:00 AM
Wow Gershon a sonnet, I truly enjoyed this although of somber note it is so well written.
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Date: 6/17/2020 1:21:00 PM
Interesting comment: I myself was thinking that it was just too somber for a sonnet as I was penning it... Oh, well, the ink's been linked... Thanks, John! :) gw
Date: 6/17/2020 9:38:00 AM
Things have opened up more here in Texas and it makes a huge difference in morale. Gorgeous soulful penning!
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Date: 6/17/2020 1:19:00 PM
Hopefully, things won't have to take a step back in Texas. Some states that opened (almost) fully are on the verge of walking it back, due to a spike in positive tests and hospitalizations... :) gw
Date: 6/17/2020 9:12:00 AM
GW, Lovely sattire on current affairs of the world in a sonnet. Best. Mohan
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Date: 6/17/2020 1:18:00 PM
Yes, in a sonnet! Appreciate the encouragement, Mohan! :) gw
Date: 6/17/2020 6:33:00 AM
You described the "new normal" well, Gershon, nicely penned. John
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Date: 6/17/2020 1:18:00 PM
Thank you, John! As someone whom I regard as a master of the sonnet form, you kind words are especially encouraging. All the best, Gershon
Date: 6/17/2020 5:54:00 AM
unknown darkness crushes every flaring hope of heart.....rough breath crawling inside to come out forever......
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Date: 6/17/2020 1:16:00 PM
Times are, indeed, tough. Thanks, Mahtab! :) gw
Date: 6/17/2020 5:47:00 AM
You talking these times...it's hard..All the best Gershon
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Date: 6/17/2020 1:15:00 PM
Yup, 'talking the times.' Nice turn of phrase there, Arturo. Thanks! ~ Gershon
Date: 6/17/2020 3:33:00 AM
All too true, sadly Gershon. So well expressed my friend. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 6/17/2020 1:15:00 PM
Thank you so much, Connie. I view you as a model sonnet-writer. So, I really appreciate your kind words about this sonnet. Take good care, Gershon
Date: 6/16/2020 11:24:00 PM
Sad but true commentary of our times, GW. I wonder if we'll even recognize our world once it is deemed safe for living in. All my best, John
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Date: 6/17/2020 1:14:00 PM
Me, too. I wonder too, John. It's an eerie, queasy feeling, isn't it?! Thanks for the insightful comment! Best wishes, Gershon