Doom

Doom. I smell it A sensual feast of vices. Wretches subscribe their pride to dark horses who ride in the Gloom. Doom, thy muse who takes pleasure in dealing despair. Orphans who lay in the ill sown seeds of Ruin. Doom. Now taste the sweet release of thine enemies. Apple blossoms ripen to a poisonous Bloom. Doom. Hear sounds of chaos and tongue tied terror. screams of the destruction Sweet Mercy will wreak upon her Broom. Doom. ------------------ This is a poem from January. Thought I had posted it before...but nope. Hope you like it.

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Justin Bordner

Date: 6/12/2014 8:35:00 PM

Our Muses enjoy gambles, games, and good willed hunts, sometimes they do indeed seem fickle, but well worth the tease chase and chance. Looking forward to more masterful work from you. Thanks for keepin it Xool Riverbank. J.A.B.

Justin Bordner

Date: 6/12/2014 1:36:00 PM

Continued...with all due respect Riverbank, I encourage you to reconsider the use of cliches in your work. You are a Master Poetess, you need not incorporate unquoted cliches, your magic needs no support. Freddie Vee added an unquoted cliche in one of his recent masterpieces and it made me sad, although the work remains brilliant despite that. I know this is just my opinion, but I say it because I admire your talent. J.A.B.

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/12/2014 8:38:00 PM

Oooppss....I meant to say, "You have special things to express..." LOL...

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/12/2014 8:31:00 PM

Criticism is such a sensitive matter Riverbank, but I respect you so much that I had to be honest about how I feel about using cliches in our Art. I was a little worried you'd be mad, I'm so grateful you understand my good natured comment. I have special things to express, and you express them with such special feeling and originality.

A.E. Rivenbark
Date: 6/12/2014 7:35:00 PM

Oh yeah, this is an older work, though sometimes cliches creep into my mind unwillingly. I do try to court my muses, but they are rather fickle lately. I admire your creativity Justin. Also: Thank you for the fave, the kind words, and the constructive criticism.

Justin Bordner

Date: 6/12/2014 1:31:00 PM

I am intrigued and titilated by how Doom can be the antagonist, the target, and the prevailing subject matter. There is a gorgeous heat of vengence in this write vengence. " Doom, thy Muse who takes pleasure in dealing despair..." wow! This art readies me for war, love it! Once more you have made masterpiece Riverbank, and you are now a Favorite Poet of mine, thank you! J.A.B.