does it hurt

3

It is especially necessary to dream, twice,
To dance with Jessica Alba,
To eat a banana split one evening,
in a bar in Carpentras,
It is especially necessary to dream, twice,

The bosses make us sing,
Niagara Falls, dear Michelle,
Are more serious than men,

Women invent everything,
The kingdoms and their wise men,
To dance with Jessica Alba,
For dinner in Carpentras, with Jessica,
one must especially dream, twice.



4

Does it hurt 
To stop breathing? Mom,
Like a little music
Who stops suddenly,
Does it hurt?

Like a meal that stops,
You have to digest everything afterwards,
the dead eat snails,

Does it hurt?
When someone leaves you?
We don’t want to continue living,
Do we eat snails
When do you stop breathing?
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Jones Avatar
December 21, 2025 at 10:25 PM
Wow your poem is art! Very nice and in such a challenging form! I love what you did here!
Etgen-Baker Avatar
December 20, 2025 at 6:38 PM
loved the analogies in your poem....your composition of this poetic form is excellent
Rolland Avatar
December 21, 2025 at 10:16 PM
thanks sara for encouraging merry Christmas
Dietrich Avatar
December 20, 2025 at 1:47 PM
I like " women invent everything"! So you sure like Jessica Alba. I am trying to remember how that actress looks
Rolland Avatar
December 21, 2025 at 10:18 PM
thanks andrea, i generally love actress and actors, i choose Jessica for the french Rhyme, she is pretty nice merry Christmas
Goldsmith Avatar
December 20, 2025 at 12:08 PM
"does it hurt" is a wonderful/powerful write. Have a lovely day/weekend writing away............
Rolland Avatar
December 21, 2025 at 10:20 PM
thanks Paula, merry Christmas
Poet Avatar
December 20, 2025 at 8:58 AM
Fantastic Rondeau composition, Yann!! Sending best wishes for this seasonal celebration!
Rolland Avatar
December 21, 2025 at 10:19 PM
Thanks sotto for encouraging merry Christmas to you and family
Buhagiar Avatar
December 20, 2025 at 1:45 AM
You delve deeply into both poems. A master of Rondeau. Never tried to write one. Still I loved both poems.
Rolland Avatar
December 21, 2025 at 10:22 PM
thanks Victor, i think you should try some Rondeau, this is quiet amusing merry Christmas poet
Rodrigues Avatar
December 19, 2025 at 4:03 PM
Heartfelt in two different ways.. my reaction was disbelief…who wants to believe such a thing..Love how you circled around in 3… Women invent everything, The kingdoms and their wise men…Your style in unique!
Rolland Avatar
December 21, 2025 at 10:23 PM
thanks Kim, for the brilliant comment merry Christmas to you and family
Hind Avatar
December 19, 2025 at 1:35 PM
This has meaning and it's deep. Beautiful work.
Rolland Avatar
December 21, 2025 at 10:26 PM
thanks Paige for encouraging merry Christmas
Wolf Avatar
December 19, 2025 at 1:29 PM
Your poems make me stop and think... and reconsider...
Rolland Avatar
December 21, 2025 at 10:24 PM
thanks Gershon, for encouraging and may be anticipating my "spirit" merry Christmas to you and family
Kendrick Avatar
December 19, 2025 at 5:00 AM
Interesting work, Yann. Thank you for sharing this one with us. Sara K
Rolland Avatar
December 21, 2025 at 10:27 PM
thanks sara for encouraging merry Christmas to you and family
Maverick Avatar
December 18, 2025 at 12:28 PM
Deep thoughts Yann..We are to find out At some stage.)
Rolland Avatar
December 18, 2025 at 9:59 PM
thanks Joe, for participating
George Avatar
December 17, 2025 at 9:51 PM
When we stop breathing , definitely it will hurt and pain us. The analogies used are excellent... as a lovely music stops suddenly or as a dear one takes leave of us abruptly or a lovely meal gets over before our appetite is not quenched. Great poem, Yaan.
Rolland Avatar
December 18, 2025 at 10:00 PM
thanks you so much valsa for the insights and support wishes
Rose  Avatar
December 17, 2025 at 5:53 PM
we should always dream nice dear Yann, only pleasant dreams in a persons heart !
Rolland Avatar
December 18, 2025 at 10:01 PM
so beautiful comment, Rose, thanks
Rodriguez Avatar
December 17, 2025 at 5:14 PM
Very impressive work! There is nothing better than feeling the authentic tone and reading the feelings feeling! Well done.
Rolland Avatar
December 18, 2025 at 10:02 PM
thanks william for the supportive comment and appreciation wishes
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