Distant Rumblings - For Choka Contest

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Poetry soup syllable counter counts eight syllables in the eighth line - I do not see how.

howmanysyllables.com counts eight syllables in line three - again - I do not see how.

Distant Rumblings 


A distant rumbling
slowly turns unwary heads,
anticipation’s curtsy
awaiting stillness.
Homage before the deluge.
The delicate staccato,
of clouded future,
cold touch, a victor’s mercy,
counting coup on flower beds.


7/18/2016

submitted to – Compose a Choka – Poetry Contest
sponsor – Janis Thompson

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 8/5/2016 8:45:00 AM
Congrats John for a deserved win with this lovely choka !!
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Date: 7/27/2016 5:57:00 AM
Congrats John, for your fine placement with this choka!! ;-)
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Date: 7/24/2016 5:30:00 PM
John, congratulations on your podium win in the 'Choka' contest! Sandra
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John Lawless
Date: 7/25/2016 10:51:00 AM
Thanks Sandra
Date: 7/24/2016 5:05:00 PM
Congrats on your win, John :)
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John Lawless
Date: 7/25/2016 10:51:00 AM
thanks Laura, appreciate your stopping by
Date: 7/23/2016 9:05:00 PM
I only use how many syllables as I find TPS one is unreliable - I can't understand the error with line 3 I make it 7 syllables:-) Congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/23/2016 7:20:00 PM
Poetry soup syllable counter is usually wrong. It sometimes counts past tense endings and certain punctuation marks. About 70% correct.
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Date: 7/23/2016 7:17:00 PM
Well written! Congratulations and thanks for being in the contest.
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John Lawless
Date: 7/25/2016 10:50:00 AM
Thanks for the theme and the challenge of the form.
Date: 7/18/2016 10:08:00 PM
"Delicate staccato" and "counting coup"--awesome!
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John Lawless
Date: 7/19/2016 6:27:00 AM
Thanks Tom, a tricky little write these Choka
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