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Disastrous Double Date

A cute guy called James once asked me on a date
He rang me the next day said could he bring his mate
A blind date – oh I’d see if my best mate Jen would come
It might be a disaster then again it could turn out to be fun
Jen and I got ready and wore our pretty dresses
Make up was applied and we brushed our lovely tresses
We met the guys in a bar and how my face fell
No thought of their attire but at least they didn't smell!
James wore a white shirt with buttons sewn on with different cotton
He hadn't made an effort any chance of romance was soon forgotten
I turned around and  I had a good look at his best mate Neil
He had a massive scar across his face it made me want to squeal
In the past he been in trouble and had got into a brawl
Some one had slashed his face – not a good thing at all
We sat and had a drink and I looked at my mate Jen
Had hoped for romance – but it wouldn't be with them
Jen and I went off to the loo together (the way that ladies do)
Tried to hatch an escape plan, the lads didn't have a clue
Went back to the bar and soon it was time to leave
Hoped they wouldn't try to kiss us, the idea made us heave
We hurried out of the bar our bus we didn't want to miss
Jen and I climbed the steps of the bus together to avoid a kiss
Sat on the bus and laughed at our awful night
Never heard from James again -  our chemistry wasn't right!
A fun tale on Poetry Soup of Jan and Jen flying the coop.



This really is a true story from when I was about 18 years old – the most hilarious thing was the two of us trying to get up the steps of the bus together and almost falling over eachother in the process!

2nd May 2015
Contest: –) The Pigeon who Flew the Coop Tammy Reams

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Judy Konos June 2, 2015 at 2:08 PM Congratulations on your win with this Fun One Date.... Jan Allison June 2, 2015 at 2:09 PM Thanks Judy:-) Hugs Jan xx

Skat A June 2, 2015 at 12:15 AM Jan, congratulations on your awesome win. **SKAT** Jan Allison June 2, 2015 at 12:56 AM Thanks Skat:-) Hugs jan xx

Carrie Richards June 1, 2015 at 7:54 PM Omg........and the picture that goes with your poem is priceless !!!! Truth is stranger than fiction !!! LOL !! Congrats on your winning poem !!! Jan Allison June 2, 2015 at 12:54 AM I know some people think the pictures detract from the actual poems - but when they compliment the poem so perfectly I have to disagree. I was adamant I wouldn't use pictures but I have been forced to eat my words - and for the cynics - I don't think a picture does hide a bad poem! Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich June 1, 2015 at 3:25 PM GREAT story poem, Jan. Can't believe I somehow missed this true tale from before. So she was named Jen? Jan and Jen, how cool!!! Congrats too. Jan Allison June 1, 2015 at 3:27 PM yes my best mate from school was Jen:-) Oh how we laughed about this disasterous night in fact we never double dated again lol - well not like this anyway :-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight June 1, 2015 at 2:20 PM So funny, Jan, but I guess not at the time it was happening! Congratulations on your nice 2nd place win! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison June 1, 2015 at 2:36 PM Thanks for all your support Sandra I do appreciate it:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper June 1, 2015 at 1:34 PM Back to congratulate you on your wonderful win. Hugs eve Jan Allison June 1, 2015 at 1:35 PM Thanks so much Eve I had fun with this one:-) hugs jan xx

Christina Hons May 15, 2015 at 8:02 PM Thank God for public transportation and perfect timing. I've had a few blind dates like this. Jan Allison May 16, 2015 at 1:45 AM It was many many years ago lol:-) Hugs jan xx

Kim Merryman May 8, 2015 at 1:55 PM Knowing this story is true, makes it even more entertaining. I enjoyed reading your poem, Jan! Love, Kim Jan Allison May 8, 2015 at 2:11 PM Thanks Kim it is 100% true - I can look back now and laugh but truly we just wanted to do a runner lol and the two of us trying to get up the narrow bus steps together was simply hilarious:-) Hugs Jan xx

Thomas Martin May 6, 2015 at 5:14 PM My god! So hilarious! Tale well told. Jan Allison May 6, 2015 at 5:21 PM Thanks Thomas ... and it is a completely true story:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper May 3, 2015 at 2:16 PM Oh you're good, you're my favorite poet a 7 :~) Eve Roper May 3, 2015 at 3:20 PM We both are blessed with your friendship and all the others Jan Allison May 3, 2015 at 2:54 PM Aww Eve that is a lovely thing to say I am blushing here - I simply write to entertain and am just so pleased people like my style - having never written a poem since i was at school it is amazing to think this creativity has only come about because of my husband's cancer surgery - he is cured and I have a hobby I love and friends all over the world - I am truly blessed:-) Hugs jan xx

James Fraser May 3, 2015 at 1:59 PM Love this quirky true write Jan, and yes I'm cute, and I can sew better now ;-) good luck in the contest with this fine poetry, love it, hugs //James xxx Jan Allison May 3, 2015 at 2:01 PM Shhhh James don't tell the world our little secret - am just so sorry it didn't work out for us on the night:-( Hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez May 3, 2015 at 4:57 AM LOL! Hilarious Hillary! Well, woman, your story had me in stitches and the pic was perfect for the humor here. Good luck! Hugs! Kim :) Jan Allison May 3, 2015 at 5:02 AM I loved the pic too Kim I am sure we would have if we had had the chance lol:-) hugs Jan xx

M. L. Kiser May 3, 2015 at 1:56 AM That's one of those times when the planets are having a row and it's us humans who pay the price...at least, you and Jen got away. Good luck in the contest. Jan Allison May 3, 2015 at 5:02 AM I will send her the poem not thought about this in years lol - i was about 18 at the time and that is too many years to admit to lol:-) Hugs jan xx

Nandita Das May 2, 2015 at 10:26 AM Hilarious. How I enjoy all your humorous writes. You do it to perfection. #7 Jan Allison May 2, 2015 at 12:21 PM Truly Nandita there was no poetic licence here it is as it actually happened lol - seeing this guy with a scar made me think I had made a big mistake if James could hang around with a guy like him! oh the innocence of youth lol :-)Hugs jan xx

Charmaine Chircop May 2, 2015 at 9:25 AM lol...Blind me if you can said Jan to Jen,till We get rid of these two men : )..Entertaining!! Jan Allison May 2, 2015 at 12:19 PM We did try go get out of the bar without them seeing Charma but the toilets were off the room we were sitting in lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer May 2, 2015 at 8:37 AM great story, jan, and told in your wonderful humorous style! Jan Allison May 2, 2015 at 12:18 PM There really is no poetic licence in this one Ilene it is as it happened - the most hilarious thing was the two of us trying to get up the steps of the bus together - it was only one door width and we were stumling about lol:-) Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux May 2, 2015 at 8:16 AM I'm glad you both made your escape. Jan Allison May 2, 2015 at 8:18 AM We did Richard lol - we would have escaped earlier if we could:-) His friend Neil was obviously 'trouble' and it made me doubt James too:-( Hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet May 2, 2015 at 8:00 AM A fun frolic into the past that sets us up for a chuckle. Emile. Jan Allison May 2, 2015 at 8:03 AM It was far from funny at the time Emile - the buttons were sewn on with different coloured cottons and it wasn't a trend at that time and the shirt hadn't seen an iron lol and as for his friend Neil as soon as I saw him I knew it was a big mistake - never double dated again lol:-) Hugs jan xx

John Williams May 2, 2015 at 7:55 AM A lucky escape there Jan...... ah, the experience of dating--some good,some bad......Well done Jan----kind regards----John Jan Allison May 2, 2015 at 7:57 AM I had never told my hubby about this until I wrote this poem lol - some things are best kept in the past ! Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance May 2, 2015 at 7:04 AM Haha Oh my goodness now that is a story, blind dates should stay blind sometimes. Jan Allison May 2, 2015 at 7:05 AM LOL Cas - I will send this to my mate Jenny - bring back some hilarious memories of that night:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick May 2, 2015 at 6:39 AM Reads like a winner..Way to go..Sorry that the date turned out so bad but they say one has to kiss many toads before they find princess charming..Thanks for stopping by..Sara Jan Allison May 2, 2015 at 6:42 AM It was a disaster from start to finish - we would have left if we could but the loos were just off the bar we were in so we had to stay lol:-) Hugs Jan xx