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Disappearing In a Cloud of Smoke

She stood in the doorway of the house
Her vibrant cerise pink dressing gown bulging at the seams - 
Like a sack of dough tied up in the middle
Life has been hard for her and it shows in her face
Which was lined like the bark of a gnarled oak tree
Clouds of smoke billow from the cigarette 
that hangs like an icicle from the corner of her mouth
I smile and say hello
Embarrassed at being seen she lets the cigarette fall
Retreating rapidly through the clearing fog back indoors

I observed this scene when I was out walking yesterday

3rd April 2015

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2015

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Paul Schneiter Date: 4/22/2015 7:30:00 PM A slice of the dark side of life presented with quintessential Allison eloquence. Powerful, thought-provoking, and evocative of the aphorism "There but for the grace of God go I." Bravo! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/23/2015 2:14:00 AM Oh Paul I sincerely hope I never let myself go to this extent - it was really sad to see her:-( Hugs jan xx

James Fraser Date: 4/4/2015 12:34:00 PM Such seen witnessed in many a scene Jan. Your fast becoming the all round poet, and that's extremely rare. I'm so glad that your path led you to the Soup, mega hugs/xx/James Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/4/2015 12:38:00 PM I can only thank Jenny Brewer for pushing me for a month to join the site - I doubt I would have grown so much in confidence and ability if it hadn't been for her persistence and seeing something in me that I couldn't :-) I am truly blessed to have someone who believed in me:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/3/2015 9:24:00 PM Jan, you asked what this is. If you play around with it and work on good line breaks, making shorter lines. I think it is free verse! A great style for you to explore Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/4/2015 5:52:00 AM Thanks Andrea - I am really happy with the poem and the feedback I've received - wouldn't want to change a word... but i will think on it for the future:-) Hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso Date: 4/3/2015 8:42:00 PM All of this , well has inspired me with an idea! As I have said you guys are great, a breath of fresh air to be able to smile and laugh so much! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 8:57:00 PM Makes it all worthwhile Arthur:-) Hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso Date: 4/3/2015 8:36:00 PM People will start to wonder what we all have been smoking tonight!!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 8:39:00 PM The only joint I have in one to go in the oven on Sunday lol:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/3/2015 8:31:00 PM As far as getting community points...oh good now little jimmy can get his operation now. Those are great for poetry soup also someone like you who reads and comments to so many poets are a great asset and support system to the other poets. I don't see any upside to racking up community points but I guess they're better than a kick in the face...although a kick in the face is nice too! Love You, Armand ?? Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 8:39:00 PM Got too much going on in life that is important than to bother with the lists here am just indebted to Jenny Brewer for believing in me and encouraging me to join here:-) Hugs Jan xx Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/3/2015 8:38:00 PM As per your reply above, you are so right and you are great bro! Arthur Vaso Date: 4/3/2015 8:35:00 PM The best points here, is the laughter, the sharing, you guys are great!

Arthur Vaso Date: 4/3/2015 8:28:00 PM And on Maurice s last post I could not agree more, the beauty I have seen here is such a diversity of poetry and expression, its such a joy to see such an abundance of creativity!!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 8:36:00 PM I have to thank you for inspiring me with my new poem Arthur - I am in awe of your creativity :-) Hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso Date: 4/3/2015 8:26:00 PM Home depot Floor tiles are only 1.99 a tile!!!!! This week only! Get a free poem with every purchase!!!! Now this is spamming!!!!! LOL Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 8:35:00 PM LOL you deserve being hauled over the carpet for that comment:-) hugs Jan xx Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 8:35:00 PM I don't mind you being on top occasionally Armand:-) Hugs Jan xx Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/3/2015 8:33:00 PM HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/3/2015 8:24:00 PM "so there is hope I will write a decent poem one day" are you kidding you have written hundreds of amazing poems. I think everything happens for a reason. There is so much more depth to the poetry you write now than you could have written when you were young. Remember that Grandma Moses did not start painting until she was an older woman and she is considered a master. The great thing about the arts is there in no single mold anyone has to fit into! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 8:33:00 PM I am sure some people would disagree Armand lol - but I am grateful I have found this creativity which has brought me so much pleasure and relief from the stress in my life in the last 13 months:-) Hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso Date: 4/3/2015 8:23:00 PM I think Jan is brilliant too, then again I think my long lost brother is brilliant too!!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 8:28:00 PM aww am blushing here lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/3/2015 7:48:00 PM OMG! I just realized this is just like spamming. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 7:52:00 PM Ha ha ha :-) - just means you get more community points:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/3/2015 7:47:00 PM Of course that is something just between me and Arthur so I don't know why I'm telling you. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 7:51:00 PM Ha ha ha - you two would make a great comedy double act:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/3/2015 7:45:00 PM I didn't really need to make that last comment but I like to make sure I make a lot more comments than Arthur to any one post. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 7:50:00 PM LOL:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/3/2015 7:44:00 PM ...and you thought you were just writing about some woman with a cigarette. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 7:50:00 PM LOL:-) I get inspired by everything around me Armand or events in my life - pity I started writing relatively late in life - saying that my aunt and uncle still write - he is 96 my aunt is 87 so there is hope I will write a decent poem one day:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/3/2015 7:42:00 PM Oh yeah and I like it too! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 7:45:00 PM :-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/3/2015 7:41:00 PM Jan you show an incredible strength writing in this style. If I were you I would explore this talent further. You are brilliant no matter the style but I think this is that perfect icing for your perfectly baked cake. I already faved this one or I would fav it now! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 7:45:00 PM Aww you are so kind and boost my spirits Armand:-) Hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso Date: 4/3/2015 6:57:00 PM That could even become a Poem title "Blown Away" Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 7:13:00 PM Nice thought Arthur - you better write that one I've done my trilogy! Hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso Date: 4/3/2015 6:40:00 PM This what poetry should be, If I was a teacher would use this one to teach a few!!! GAV, (great amazing verse) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 6:43:00 PM Aww thanks Arthur I am blown away with the positive comments I've had on this write:-) Hugs Jan xx

Jack Ellison Date: 4/3/2015 6:02:00 PM You've got an eye for beauty no matter what form it takes... whatta form! Great descriptive write dear sis! Hugs, Jack xxx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 6:08:00 PM Thanks so much Jack - always a pleasure to see you visit my page:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/3/2015 5:45:00 PM Brilliant imagery. I wasn't really embarrassed being seen after all I was wearing my beautiful cerise pink dressing gown. It's just that wasn't a cigarette I was smoking. Incredible descriptive write! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 5:47:00 PM LOL Armand your comments really brighten my day:-) Hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie Date: 4/3/2015 5:10:00 PM G'day Jan... most people would walk past without a thought, but not an observance poet like yourself Jan. This poem is really good - Lindsay Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 5:12:00 PM Thanks so much for the lovely comment Lindsay:-) Hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet Date: 4/3/2015 12:40:00 PM You did a wonderful job here. I read it several times and it slowly came alive for me. The loneliness insecurity and pain of reality came through your words. Emile. #7 Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 1:14:00 PM Thanks so much Emile it was a sad sight but makes a wonderful subject for my poem:-) Hugs jan xx

Constance La France Date: 4/3/2015 7:46:00 AM Jan, you have the skill of a true writer that observes the world for inspiration and your poem shows your skill at seeing the world, wonderful writing 7 and thanks for visiting my poetry Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 7:48:00 AM Oh thank you so much for your wonderful comment:-) Hugs jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 4/3/2015 7:05:00 AM Impressed by your keen eye, Jan! Very descriptive; you turn an ordinary simple moment into poetry. Hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 7:37:00 AM Thanks Paul I am working hard on my imagery but this sadly didn't need any poetic licence it was a very accurate picture of the moment:-) Hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 4/3/2015 5:25:00 AM - Sad !!!!!!! - A Blessed Easter to you and your family, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2015 7:36:00 AM Yes isn't it. Thanks for dropping by Anne lise:-) Hugs Jan xx

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