Michael J. Falotico Poet Rhyme

Did You See My Tear

Did you see my face when you walked away...
All things promised fell apart and went their way...

You couldn't turn around to see if I had a tear...
Blame was spread and heartache was all too clear...

Who used who was a question that covered both our faces...
We shared the guilt  and washed it away not leaving any traces...

I turned around and watched you walk into another day...
Left only to wonder if either one really ever had their say...

My tears ran slow like a shadow on the wall...
Words I couldn't scream, I was trying not to fall...

But you still never saw my face to see if the pain was real...
Just maybe we both ran away from a love too afraid to feel...

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Rhia Madison Thomer January 8, 2011 at 9:42 PM ok i lied, this is my favorite piece by you so far as i have read. this was stunning, beautiful, sad, strong, just simply amazing. the last line really made me catch my breath. it was so powerful. you have a way with your words. well done! --Madison

Tahera Mannan December 18, 2010 at 7:40 PM Many congratulations dear Micheal for this terrific win.

Dana Smith December 17, 2010 at 6:03 PM Enjoyed reading your poetry today, Michael.... Dana'lynn

Sharon Ruebel December 17, 2010 at 3:35 PM Hello Michael, Congratulations on this beautiful and moving poem. I feel your words dear As Always, Shar

Carolyn Devonshire December 17, 2010 at 12:02 PM Pure emotions conveyed so well in this rhyme, Michael. Congratulations on your win in the contest! Love, Carolyn

M.I.A . December 15, 2010 at 7:07 PM Loved this a lot! the raw honesty of your emotions really flowed beautifully.

Sara Kendrick December 15, 2010 at 3:01 PM Good luck in the contest with this emotive work about your past relationship..Many will be able to relate to this one..You brought forth a good feeling by your comments on my work..Sara

Katie Telling December 15, 2010 at 1:55 PM This gave me goosebumps! Wow Michael this is so well-written and full of emotion.... My favorite line is "My tears ran slow like a shadow on the wall," ---- that is absolutely brilliant! Nice work, I look forward to reading more of your poetry in the future. -Katie :)

Audrey Haick December 15, 2010 at 12:11 PM This touched my heart, Michael..sad but beautifully expressed. A definite one for the Winners' List! Love, audrey

Elizabeth Bark December 14, 2010 at 3:58 PM this is sooo...sad...and solom...i love this though...it really paints the picture of your feelings for this past girl...very nice.. =) with love...lizzy

Wilma Neels December 14, 2010 at 12:12 PM A beautiful reflective write on a relationship that didn't work out.. You bring the emotions across quite vividly Mr. F ;) thanks for sharing this one and good luck for the contest.. Love Wilma

Kabuteng P.Ink K. December 14, 2010 at 10:14 AM oh wow, well this sure is heart breaking , Michael-- how sad it truly is for fear to take over love sometimes-- and your take on this challenge is just moving, Michael :) -- hopefully now the tears you shed are just of happiness :) -- replied to your soupmail -- haha i guess I have yet to think of an entry for this contest ;) -- nikko the competition (?) ^_~

Linda-Marie Sweetheart December 14, 2010 at 5:14 AM Well Michael... a super victory last night... now if they can do that next week for sure.. and the rest of the season ... we are home free.... awesome... and ... did u hear about the Cliff Lee deal? imagine passing the Yankees up for the Phillies...wow... it surely is a business my friend... may the best team win..luv.. happy day my W.K...your J.G. forever and always luv..

Doris Culverhouse December 13, 2010 at 5:33 PM sad tear jerker!! well done work!

Dr.Ram Mehta December 13, 2010 at 4:26 PM You have penned fond memories of the past relationship, Michael

Linda-Marie Sweetheart December 13, 2010 at 3:34 PM Lovely lines my W.K. of P.S. and an elegant entry for the contest.. good luck ..fond memories create the best poetry Michael... good experience to learn and live by in the present tense ... enjoyed with luv .. your J.G. ready for football tonight luv..