Notes About The Poem

Aten ,also Aton, is the disk of the sun in ancient Egyptian mythology, and originally an aspect of Ra. The deified Aten is the focus of the monolatristic, henotheistic, monistic or monotheistic religion of Atenism established by Amenhotep IV, who later took the name Akhenaten in worship and recognition of Aten.

Diabolical

Insane
All of us
The two of us
The ménage of us

The rain drops fall inside our heads
Just the two of us
Crazy deluded creatures
crawling in the attics of darkness

Breathing, gasping, hold on, hold tight
The air becomes a precious bond
Little one dances in the wind
Precious dreams in white padded rooms

Adam and Eve and serpent roam
The halls of the diabolical 
Wondering where I have been?
I am all of you

Mirrors on the wall 
Can you not all see?
We are all me and you
Insane inside mindless heads

Random mutterings
Broken bottles
Gods stolen promises
Contracts broken in the night

Insane we are
All of us
From Adam to Dawn
Holding hands for better days

Dying to be uninsane
Wishing raindrops go up not down
ATEN shall again shower us
With sunny days


Dedicated to someone here who told me once, “I am just………….     Well I say you are just a brilliant poet”

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Laura Hay

Date: 8/22/2015 3:50:00 AM

Super poem! Well deserving of POTD, congrats, warm rgds Laura

Gary Bateman

Date: 8/19/2015 4:51:00 PM

Congratulations Arthur on POTD here!! Very Well-Done, Sir. Cheers and Best, Gary

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 8/18/2015 3:43:00 AM

Congratulations Arthur on being chosen as poem of the day.. ! ~Olive Eloisa =")

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/18/2015 3:34:00 AM

- Congratulations on your p.o.t.d. Arthur !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Anshita Bansal

Date: 8/18/2015 2:25:00 AM

Wow. WOW. Just wow. I'm speechless.

Edlynn Nau

Date: 8/17/2015 10:32:00 PM

It took two readings but the light came on the second time and boy do I ever Grok this! Glad I put it through the gray matter again. Brilliant!

Edlynn Nau
Date: 8/18/2015 12:30:00 PM

HA HA HA! Anything you want to know, just ask! {:-D

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/18/2015 12:57:00 AM

Thank you, I am still not sure I get it!

Constance La France

Date: 8/17/2015 8:37:00 PM

Arthur congratulations on poem of the day

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/18/2015 12:41:00 AM

a double thank you then!!

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/17/2015 5:02:00 PM

Hi Arthur, l'm coming back to congratulations on getting the poem of the day:-)Alexis

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/18/2015 12:47:00 AM

and I am double thanking you!!!! hugs

Neva Romaine

Date: 8/17/2015 2:47:00 PM

Hey Arthur, BIG congratulations on your poem being chosen for POTD! A very introspective and thought provoking piece deeply expressed. Well deserving! Be Blessed, Neva

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/18/2015 12:39:00 AM

You are very kind, much appreciated!

Paul Callus

Date: 8/17/2015 10:12:00 AM

Congrats on POTD, Arthur!! This diabolical write is anything but insane. I find it hard at times to draw a line between those who claim sanity or insanity! You leave us to ponder...thus you have reached your main aim! // paul

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/17/2015 11:55:00 PM

on, well in my case the verdict is in, totally insane!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/17/2015 8:54:00 AM

This is quiet the write...and I will quote the words of that famous song..."And we'll never survive....unless...we are a little crazy." It's a crazy world, Arthur. We need to survive. Congrats on being POTD.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/17/2015 11:38:00 PM

Thank you Eileen hugs

Eve Roper

Date: 8/17/2015 8:01:00 AM

Congratulations on poem of the day, we all have those mixed feelings inside, how one perceives one thing in their mind the other person a different way that is what makes us unique. I've seen it in painting classes long time ago. My painting of the still life in front of me could be soft and delicate the other person sees it harsh why I have no idea all I can think of is the mood they are in. Well anyway enjoyed your wonderful poem. Hugs sweet friend

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/17/2015 11:37:00 PM

Thank you Eve, hope all is well with you and family!

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/17/2015 6:39:00 AM

Yay, I am just so happy this is poem of the day :)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/17/2015 11:36:00 PM

and you are so sweet!!!!! hugs!

David Meade

Date: 8/16/2015 11:05:00 PM

Well my friend, what a poem -- here's my rambling -- Everyone needs a good defense system. Will we elect to be defended by our nation, with its vast military armaments? Will we choose to be defended by an arrangement of emotional devices that keep others from getting too close? Or will we decide to relax confidently in God, "With Sunny days" Well done mighty one! 7

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/17/2015 11:35:00 PM

Thanks David! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/16/2015 8:21:00 PM

this one makes me think of Flowers in the Attic. I love that story and read all the books in the series, but I suppose your poem means something completely different! (even the picture kind of looks like the wicked mother in that story!)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/16/2015 9:20:00 PM

Had to look that up! Well although this has meaning, its meant to mean whatever one takes out of it as well. I combined a few events, and I have no idea if I succeeded, in that sometimes I try and write something that has a particular meaning, but also none at all, or whatever the reader takes from it. :)

Tim Smith

Date: 8/16/2015 5:21:00 PM

Yes we all look forward to sunny days.....Blackhawks tix go on sale tomorrow Habs come to town Jan. 17th...you in?

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/16/2015 9:11:00 PM

Well we will see how sunny those days by then! Habs might be in last place! LOL

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/16/2015 8:40:00 AM

I see you are getting a head start on Halloween. This is better than Dark Chocolate!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/16/2015 9:00:00 PM

Well dark chocolate and red wine was the formula for this poem!

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/16/2015 8:28:00 AM

Author, I enjoyed reading this deep thought provoking piece. :-) Alexis 7

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/16/2015 9:00:00 PM

Thank you so much Alexis!

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/16/2015 6:41:00 AM

Sorry I couldn't comment last night because the site was acting funny...but I have read this again and again, I want to rate it a 7 but the rating box is covered up by an ad...I just love this poem..it just works so well...xxx

Arthur Vaso
Date: 8/16/2015 8:58:00 PM

and you my lady, are just so kind! hugs

Diabolical

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