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Inspired by AD Hope.


 

 

Destiny of a Bird

She flings her body skyward
as every winter before, her heart afire,
 she follows a pre set- migratory course,
 divinely guided, from half a world away.

Coming or going her destination
 always becomes home, 
 to nest again -raise another brood
knowing that generations drive her grand obsession-
the self- exile she endures  heavy on her breast

She sees around her unfamiliar landscape
 longs for lush valleys and trees of evergreen
With each day  her inner call grows stronger, 
fills her with an urgent sense to  flight
 to take to the endless skies- one tiny bird, uncertain, of her flock,
 alone in the vast and blue unfriendly sky

Her wings falter, she feels that death is near,
a last flight comes for every bird.
It seems, what divine force
 held her course before - is gone
she tries but her flight turns aimless
Below, the landscape is a map- less blur
 that baffles her tiny brain

From the dark valleys below a black fog rises
Hostile winds impede her faltering flight
until the ground without  warning or  ill-will
calls the tiny form again to earth.

Premiere Contest number 9
Contest Judged:  9/8/2016 12:01:00 PM
Sponsored by: SKAT A 
9th Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Thomas Avatar
June 25, 2022 at 7:07 PM
An end many see, yet not the one we ever wish for them. A beautifully sad write SuZ
Fenn Avatar
June 25, 2022 at 9:00 AM
Very tenderly written poem about this poor bird. I like all your animal and flower poems.
Mcguire Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 6:01 PM
Love it! good job Suzanne
Delaney Avatar
August 31, 2018 at 10:39 AM
Hi Timothy: Thanks so much for reading and commenting. Most appreciated. SuZ
Scars Avatar
September 9, 2016 at 9:12 AM
Suzanne, congrats on your placement! :)-luloo
Grahamburglar Avatar
September 8, 2016 at 7:07 PM
This was nicely written and held my interest all the way through. I really like the closing lines, there is something comforting about Earth calling home her children, despite being a generally sad affair. I enjoyed your perspective in this write. Congrats on your win. -G
A  Avatar
September 8, 2016 at 12:35 PM
Suz, Congratulations on your win in SKAT'S "Premiere Contest number 9" It was my pleasure judging this one for my sister. Stop by and enjoy your win on Skat's Blog "BLACKBIRDS." with lots of love LINDA (For: SKAT)
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 16, 2014 at 3:46 PM
Wow Suz, I love your take on this most genius poem that I read first before reading yours. Both were very moving and spoke to that spirit of love I have for nature and its inhabitants. Truly a beautiful poem you have written. I can easily see why you were inspired to write it.
Kamoonpuri Avatar
August 14, 2014 at 5:52 AM
ah u mean the death of a migratory bird while migrating right, eh awesome and sweetly sad, all death is sad since every new life seems daunting. I admire how u termed it self-exile. Awesome as a freeverse, yor whole poem. Nice to read u again once more.
Ryerson Avatar
August 10, 2014 at 4:54 PM
Suzanne - I have not read the original poem but I will as soon as I finish here AND my guess is that this equals or maybe surpasses it! Great inspiration can inspire and breed even GREATER inspiration. I've always been fascinated with this subject; not only concerning birds, but Monarch butterflies, Salmon, etc....How?? Scientists have their theories but in all boils down to your line: "divinely guided half a world away"...Thank you for this my friend - Tim
Ryerson Avatar
August 10, 2014 at 5:06 PM
PS: "The small worry of her death" is indeed small, but in my opinion, it is no less small than the death of ANY human being no matter who that might be...These creatures were created by God just as we were and have the same right to share this planet with us, maybe even more. At least they got it right and most of us DON'T. I will stop rambling now...
Dietrich Avatar
August 9, 2014 at 9:37 PM
oh my, this is great writing. I especially love the last part, how you paint so beautifully this sad death of the brave little bird. It reminds me also of a small poem I read one time about the unfeeling nature of "nature"
Ludden Avatar
July 1, 2014 at 3:39 PM
I see that by missing all of your poems for the past few years, I have missed some very satisfying reading! Today I corrected that a bit, and intend to look at more before you disappear from my consciousness! I do intend to be back for more. :-) -Dean
Sirak Avatar
June 12, 2014 at 7:36 AM
Beautiful, intriguing, and sad. I have felt like that tiny bird sometimes, facing the unfamiliar, being uncertain.
May Avatar
June 8, 2014 at 1:59 PM
Very nicely done...beautiful yet sad...
Eggins Avatar
June 7, 2014 at 12:44 PM
Beautifully done, applause...love Jayne x
Delaney Avatar
June 7, 2014 at 1:08 PM
Thanks Jane This was a fun exercise to try.
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