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Destination, Palm Springs

Destination,Vegas perfume sales, on the road. Six young adults crammed like sardines in my car, the size of a commode. A hatchback, blue Escort, Ford, With suicide doors. Roars through smoldering desert heat. STOP!! "My car will overheat" the radiator leaks. Money, we all seek. Vagas', the place to be dollar signs on every street. Walking, talking, dollar signs with feet. Another and I, paired, A black guy.. Damien, an awesome smooth talking, money making, sales guy... Money falls from the sky. He's got that look in his eye. each sale strokes his pride. Witnessing his techniques, I establish mine. Vegas, our third stop. We have seven, It's eleven, It's time to start picking the midnight crop. We head west toward California, stop in Pasendena, Pamona, of impulse. We hear Benjamin, Grant, and Jackson. We bank of the songs they sing. I grin.... Back on Route...... ......Ten To our destination, Palm Springs. ....The trip continues................:JP} Jared Pickett...7/28/09

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Date: 7/31/2009 1:06:00 PM
Hi Jared! I just passed passed Deb Guzzi's limerick game to you cuz I couldn't reach PB! and I have been admiring your talented writes lately!!! I hope you have time to continue the challenge! see my poem "the limerick express" for a weak attempt at a limerick!...lol! ...if we get the game goin' in 2-directions! EVEN MORE FUN!!!.... mail
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Date: 7/29/2009 10:03:00 AM
Looks like a great trip, Jared, I use to run up through there when I was out on the road, driving a truck,otr. Thanks for comments,Moses
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Date: 7/29/2009 9:40:00 AM
I like the artistic presentation. The short lines work well in this enjoyable poem. Good use of imagery. Thank you for sharing this one with us. Have a good day! Karen
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Date: 7/29/2009 3:47:00 AM
Awesome trip Jared, another delightful read>>James
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Date: 7/28/2009 7:07:00 PM
dig the shape! dig the vibe! dig the adventure! dig this poem! Jared! jimbo
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Date: 7/28/2009 6:54:00 PM
Love this!!! Been through this part of the country quite a lot, and I can picture the whole scene....watch out for that radiator while out in the desert!!! (Loved the line about the suicide doors! Great job! )
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