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Destination, Palm Springs

Destination,Vegas
                     perfume sales,
                                       on the road.
                             Six young adults crammed
                                       like sardines
                                   in my car,
            the size of a commode.

                A hatchback, blue 
                        Escort, 
                         Ford,
                With suicide doors.
                        Roars  
                       through 
                smoldering desert 
                         heat.
                        
                        STOP!!

             "My car will overheat"
                the radiator leaks.

                        Money, 
                     we all seek.
                        Vagas',
                   the place to be
        dollar signs on every street.
                       Walking, 
                        talking,
              dollar signs with feet.

                                     Another and I,
                                          paired,
                            A black guy..
Damien, an awesome
                   
                  smooth talking,
                  money making,
                     sales guy...
                Money falls from
                      the sky.
                            He's got that look
                                       in his eye.
                                  each sale strokes
                                        his pride.
                             Witnessing his techniques,
                                      I establish
                                          mine.

Vegas, 
our third stop.
We have seven,
It's eleven,
It's time to start picking 
the midnight crop.

        We head west toward 
                California,
                  stop in 
                      Pasendena,
                              Pamona,
                                   of impulse.

                             We hear Benjamin, 
                                     Grant, 
                                and Jackson.
                          We bank of the songs
                                  they sing.
        I grin....

      Back on 
        Route...... 
                      ......Ten
              To our destination,
Palm Springs.


....The trip continues................:JP}
Jared Pickett...7/28/09

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 7/31/2009 1:06:00 PM
Hi Jared! I just passed passed Deb Guzzi's limerick game to you cuz I couldn't reach PB! and I have been admiring your talented writes lately!!! I hope you have time to continue the challenge! see my poem "the limerick express" for a weak attempt at a limerick!...lol! ...if we get the game goin' in 2-directions! EVEN MORE FUN!!!.... mail
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Date: 7/29/2009 10:03:00 AM
Looks like a great trip, Jared, I use to run up through there when I was out on the road, driving a truck,otr. Thanks for comments,Moses
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Date: 7/29/2009 9:40:00 AM
I like the artistic presentation. The short lines work well in this enjoyable poem. Good use of imagery. Thank you for sharing this one with us. Have a good day! Karen
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Date: 7/29/2009 3:47:00 AM
Awesome trip Jared, another delightful read>>James
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Date: 7/28/2009 7:07:00 PM
dig the shape! dig the vibe! dig the adventure! dig this poem! Jared! jimbo
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Date: 7/28/2009 6:54:00 PM
Love this!!! Been through this part of the country quite a lot, and I can picture the whole scene....watch out for that radiator while out in the desert!!! (Loved the line about the suicide doors! Great job! )
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